for my pastor- i have to give this to him tonight. please comment?

i think i need a better beginning... have any ideas?

You've raised many from the waters
Born with new lives
You've guided us on our winding roads
You've strictly married only men and wives

You're our example,
Teaching us to follow God's laws
How to share what each of us believe
How to take our friends from Satan's jaws.

You've done so much for us
Driving fifteen caffeine-filled teens
A hundred miles in a bus,
Showing patience even when they turned green.

Broadway was a blessing
Every one of us was touched
You're raising us to be Godly youngsters,
We appreciate you so very much.

So thanks, Bro David,
For showing us another home
With each of your sermons,
We're given a burning fire and an everlasting hope.