December 17th, 2008 at 09:10pm
This was amazing. Your use of imagery was perfect. I could visualize it in my head, could watch what happened like it was playing off a screen.
The emotions were electric. The way you described it, I could almost feel the pain and fear.
It just made me so sad. Danny's reactions to everything, you could tell that he must have loved Tom an encredible amount.
This story was crushing.
You have an incredibly way of writing. The imagery one gets from your stories stuns me. You have no reason to wish to have any of my "talent" because you have your own.
So, am I correct in thinking that Tom died? Or did he simply leave? Because I want to think he's dead, but then how could Danny continue to reach the answering machine? Wouldn't the number have been disconnected? Hm...:think:
“Hi, you’ve reached Tom – oi, Danny, get off me! I can’t answer my mobile, so you know the drill…”
That line made me laugh really hard, but in a sad sort of way, because of the tone of the rest of the story. To be honest, though, I would not be at all surprised to find out that Tom's actual voicemail was something along those lines. It just seems like them. :XD
No matter who was in the room with him, he would still be alone - because they weren’t Tom.
The way Danny thinks; tramautized by the passing of his lover (whether in death or simply being left) is just captivating. It shows that love is eternal and when one is left, they suffer immensely. It's perfect, in a tragic sort of way.
And I adore the title. The way it connects to the story, after reading, is positively chilling, which is a good thing for this tone.
Oh and you tricked me! I thought Tom was actually there. :grr:
All in all, a touching story, with beautiful writing. You don't need my talent. :arms:
And I'm sorry I can't write epic reviews like you do. But I tried. That counts too, right?