Sorry it’s taken me so long, my coursework load got increased so I’ve only just got round to this.
First off, I loved how you covered the whole family, it was very well done.
Secondly as a writer you have potential.
My favourite part; the part that I’d say made me fall in love with this story was Peter and Claire
"You changed Claire."
Yes, she had changed. Everybody needed to change, to adopt what was necessary and move on. Peter was like an autistic child, he couldn't stand change and refused to admit that he had.
"So did you Peter."
It was just so Heroesish? Struck me as the sort of thing Kring, Loeb or Alexander would stick in a script.
The Nathan story was also pretty damn awesome, and the Gabriel one was just so much like him, you really got his character down to a tee.
I loved it, every single part of it. It’s defiantly a favorite of mine.
First off, I loved how you covered the whole family, it was very well done.
Secondly as a writer you have potential.
My favourite part; the part that I’d say made me fall in love with this story was Peter and Claire
"You changed Claire."
Yes, she had changed. Everybody needed to change, to adopt what was necessary and move on. Peter was like an autistic child, he couldn't stand change and refused to admit that he had.
"So did you Peter."
It was just so Heroesish? Struck me as the sort of thing Kring, Loeb or Alexander would stick in a script.
The Nathan story was also pretty damn awesome, and the Gabriel one was just so much like him, you really got his character down to a tee.
I loved it, every single part of it.
It’s defiantly a favorite of mine.