One Night - Comments

For this being my first mpreg I quite enjoyed it :)

Andrea Ohhh.:

Congradulations, you have also taken my Gabelliam virginity like Erincer Walker x) I've never given them a time of day to read any but i decided, why not and boy am I glad that read it.

That was perfectly written down to the words chosen and everything flowed so well together. The scenes unfolded themselves perfectly and it didn't seem rushed at all. I think you did an excellent job, especially since it's your first time writing a m-preg. It almost seem like it could actually happen since all the feelings displayed were so realistic. Loved it, you're a wonderfully gifted writer (:
xo

Took the words right out of my fucking mouth. Thank you, for taking my Gabilliam virginity.

I'm not sure when you wrote this...but I have goosebumps all up my arms...the sadness is incredible...

It's so well written and awful but amazing...<3

I really like your story =]
It's unlike any other mpreg I've read.
And I almost started to cry cause he starved himself to kill the baby but yet he killed himself too.
I just really liked it =]
Love, Spencer =P

It seems like everything I wanted to say has already been written, so I'll just go on to say: This was superb.

I'm bad at feedback, but that was so good. I'm not usually a fan of m-preg, but I did like how it didn't have like a happy ending, so it was a bit of a twist to it.
You portrayed all their emotions really well, and I was quite surprised to know that Gabe never figured anything out and like, didn't really ask.
But overall I thought it was awesome
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Wow, I'm just really in shock right now.

The way you told it, all the way from the beginning about Gabe's problems with drugs and booze to where William started starving himself to kill the baby, and then when Gabe... It was so intense.

It was so clear from the beginning that all Gabe wanted was to have his freedom of booze, drugs and sex and what happened with William was never supposed to be anything more than that one time, but still - When William needed him because of the baby he helped him. When Gabe gave up his freedom of the partying he started to love William and that's what made it so beautiful in my eyes.

William, he was very special. The way he was drawn to Gabe when everybody told him to stay, they definitely had a connection. I'm just wondering whether Will really loved Gabe same way. He was obviously really scared about the baby and even though he couldn't kill it with an abortion he couldn't handle being pregnant and having a baby either. I believe he was more focused on the fear than on Gabe and that's why things happened the way they did.

You write so well, and you have a great way of getting emotions to flow through the words, allowing the reader to really feel the sadness, confusion or desperation that the characters are feeling.

This is definitely one of the best mpregs I've ever read and it's amazing in every way.
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Oh my God.
I'm crying right now. Like actually crying.
That was just...amazing.

The way you wrote about the way William was dealing with the baby, how Gabe was trying to deal with it.

I hated the end. I hated it because it was so fucking amazing that it made me burst into tears.

The last line I wasn't expecting at all and it just...it was such a punch in the stomach, you know?

I love this. I loved it so so much.

Words can't really describe how I'm feeling after reading this, but my hands are shaking as I'm typing, so I hope that some sort of sign as to how well you can write.

It was amazing.

My dear that was a marvelously written story, it connects with the reader and you have such wonderful articulacy, vocabulary and everything, every sentence somehow contributed to thickening the storyline, the plot and invoking an empathetic response within that of the reader.

This, my dear, is beautiful. :arms:

O_O
Whoa.

I don't normally like to read m-preg, but this one was beautiful. I also like that you gave a legitimate reason for a man to be pregnant in this world, not a fantasy world where it happens all the time. I also love the story line in general; then again I'm always a sucker for dark stories, stories about drugs and pretty, glittery boys and the various and myriad ways in which they mix or don't mix or shouldn't mix but do. I love this story so much. And the end? Perfect. Spectacular. Deeply emotional. Beautiful.

Wow.

Just ... wow.

That was amazing, seriously.

Incredible.

wow, that was amazing! i never usually read mpregs but hey now i do!
lol
wowww, rollercoaster loved it :D:D

Bravo! Fucking Bravo!

That was amazing, I loved every word. expeccially the last part.

Gabe may have been drunk when he slept with William Beckett but he was completely and utterly sober when he pulled the trigger.

What a perfect ending. it certainlu did the trick to tie up everything in the end =]

Wow! That was amazing!!!!

I loved it!!!

Wow.
That was so... hypnotic. Your pacing was absolutely perfect. The start was really engaging, it really drew me in and made me want to know what had led Gabe to that place... and the shock at the end was amazing.
Wow. That is definitely the best m-preg I've ever read.

That was absolutely incredible! Totally unexpected ending, and very different to any m-preg I've read before. You didn't beat around the bush with the plot, but it wasn't rushed either. The plot, words, and style were perfect.
Masterpiece =]
:arms: ily Shteevey :tehe:

Congradulations, you have also taken my Gabelliam virginity like Erincer Walker x) I've never given them a time of day to read any but i decided, why not and boy am I glad that read it.

That was perfectly written down to the words chosen and everything flowed so well together. The scenes unfolded themselves perfectly and it didn't seem rushed at all. I think you did an excellent job, especially since it's your first time writing a m-preg. It almost seem like it could actually happen since all the feelings displayed were so realistic. Loved it, you're a wonderfully gifted writer (:
xo

So my comment won't be nearly as long as the one above. You know me. Short sweet comments are what I do best.

First of, I must say that is my first Gabe/William I have ever read. You have taken my Gabe/William Virginity. Congradulations.

I absolutely loved how it was in third person. It just gave it... I don't know how to explain it. Your descriptions of everything are fantastic.

At the very beginning, you implied something had happened, but you didn't come right out and say what did happen. It gave a bit of mysterious air.

"Surrounded by cold concrete walls that towered above him, he lay on a gurney that looked identical to the dozen or so scattered amongst the room." That line makes things so much bigger than they actually are. As with losing someone, everything seems so overwhelming and large.

Also, how he used a condom, but it must of had a hole or something in it, because Will ended up Pregnant. It's all so realistic. As Lizzy said, this story is like a cycle.

Will saved Gabe, but Gabe couldn't save William. It really did make this the perfect one shot. Everything was perfect.

You did excellent with this, deary.
Loved it and love you.

Wow Kaitlyn. I don't read mpregs, as we discussed previously, and I knew the fact that you didn't either, plus the fact that this was a work done by you meant only one thing: this one particular mpreg would freaking rule.

You certainly didn't disappoint.

Honestly, when you first told me about this I was stoked. Then when you told me it was gabilliam, I nearly fainted. You know how big a fan I am of William and Gabriel, oh my oh my. They are my second favorite pairing, and this coming from you was sure to be a treat.

Again, you didn't disappoint.

I'm either all for they're together, have the possibility of being together, or have it end just the way it ended: perfectly; because they could go to a place where they could be together.

I thought the beginning was done in a very lovely way: it was the perfect depiction of a glorified rock star destroying himself on a daily basis, only to be saved by the one person that could save him. William was his reason for getting clean and sober, William was in a sense, Gabe's reason for living.

I loved that Will wanted the abortion, yet couldn't go through with it. I love that midway through, William and Gabe sort of switched places, and that it was Will [I can't bring myself to call him Bill for some reason, forgive me] that ended up destroying himself... but Gabe couldn't save him.

It's a cycle really. Like, Gabe destroys himself, Will saves him. Will destroys himself, but the cycle doesn't continue. It ended, because Will destroyed the connection between them, beginning with the baby, continuing with himself, then ending with Gabe. Does that make any sense? It does to me, but... yeah.

The ending completed everything so well, I think. It made this oneshot perfect, dare I say, because like I said William, and the child growing inside of him, was Gabe's reason for living... and once both were gone, he had no reason to live anymore.

Everything he had been living for is gone, and no amount of drugs or sex or booze or stardom or anything could ever fill the void in Gabe's heart... I love that how in the end, he finally could breathe and smell and live... like, physically. Like smelling the McDonalds, feeling the breeze and whatnot... yet he couldn't live, emotionally. Everything was made very vivid, like clarity if anything. Everything suddenly made sense, including his actions that made up that ending.

Loved it, Kaitlyn.
Absolutely loved it... :arms:
Pat yourself on the back darling, you did an amazing job with this.