November 19th, 2008 at 09:54pm
I think this story is beautiful. The girl's excitement is so realistic, and I could see her dancing with her mother.
Apollo seems like a very interesting character; he intrigues me.
You're a brilliant writer, and I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Anyways. With the fangirlism out of the way, I loved the oneshot. I think it was well-written, other than the one or two spelling/punctuation mistakes I noticed...but I wouldn't worry too much about those. Everyone misses a comma or two every now and then.
I really like how it was told through the eyes of a young girl named Suzy; her naivety gave Dreamland a touch more of that illusion/romanticism, which really worked.
I can't wait to see more Dreamland pieces. Especially since I love Apollo so much. :tehe: Keep writing Mandy. You're really good at it.
I love you. :arms: