Wires - Comments

Shit. I forgot to comment this, I'm such a shitty friend! But I am here now, da da da daaaaaa!

First off, let's get my emotions clear;
It's over? DDDDD: NOOOO! I'm going to miss it so bad! -sobsob- I'm gonna go cry emo Wentz tears! ;(

But, the ending was so amazing! I can't even begin to fathom how incredible it was. And I'm not even going to attempt to dissect it like I usually do, because I know I will screw it up and somehow destroy that absolute beauty that story held, because let's be honest, it was fucking amazing.

I loved the irony. When I read how Nancy died, I felt bad because I laughed. I mean, with his wires, and being electrocuted, I was chuckling! Oh, great, now I'm a terrible person! :XD:

But the best part was, the last chapter made everything make sense. No lie. The last chapter just seemed to make total sense to me, and it was crazy. I can't even begin to describe the emotions I was feeling, sorrow for Gabe and Nancy, confusion for the main character - who is still nameless in my mind - and then a slight hatred for Gabriel for wanting her all to himself, but then also adoration that he was there for her in her time of need. Let's just say my emotions were awry and completely FRIED. AHAHA. Okay, I'll stop.

Seriously, this comment doesn't give the chapter any justice. It was the most amazing, descriptive, emotion-twinging chapter I have ever read, and it still gives me chills just thinking about it. You really out did yourself, Vinzy, you should be bloody proud!

I <3 THIS SO HARD.

OH MY GOSH. Seriously, I was reading this, got half way and then Cobra, False Start, Drew looking scarily like Joe Jonas and Green Day distracted me! GRR @ THEM FOR KEEPING ME FROM READING.

WOW DREW CAN SING!

~anywayyyyyy. This is... this is... :cheese: I'm scared to put how much I love this story into words because then I might destroy the beauty of this story, and how brilliantly stunning it is.

I love how the story line makes me have to think. I really have to look in between words so that I can set apart Gabe and Gabriel and keep up with what is happening. And the way you write this is just... I can't even explain it! It's so... devastating and beautiful all at once. It's written with a gray cloud overhead because she knows that the story ends with such a tragedy, but when she's remembering before that event, everything was happier although confusing. If that makes sense. And I just re-read it, and it doesn't. Hmm. I really need to learn how to get my thoughts into understandable sentences. :shifty

Gabe had always made me listen, but Gabriel allowed me to speak.
I love this. In each chapter, you set Gabe and Gabriel apart, and this by far has been the most defining moment. I love seeing her see the differences between the two, and showing her favour Gabriel more because of his more... giving personality.

I convinced myself that this was not Nancy's Gabe.
I love how she is trying so hard to make Gabe and Gabriel two different people so that she doesn't have to feel the guilt of being with her best friends boyfriend. I love her naivety, and at the same time, she makes me see them as two people so its almost as if shes deluded everyone into seeing them how she sees them.

“It's just the way things are,” he responded.
Just... :cheese: Probably the best explanation any of us are going to get, because that's exactly how it is. It's so simple, yet completely intricate. It makes you think.

It was official that Gabe was a mystery to all. All, maybe, except for Nancy. I was positive that if Nancy knew Gabriel existed, he would be just as mysterious to her.
This is my favourite part. I don't know what it is exactly, but somehow it just gets to me. That fact that she is admitting that she will never figure out Gabe, but it's almost as if she's compensating with the fact that Nancy will never understand Gabriel. I'm not sure, but I love it all the same.

Your writing is so pure and genuine, I absolutely adore it, and I know I tell you all the time, but I just feel like you have to know how amazing your writing is, and how much it affects me. Because it's so beautiful, and amazing, and just, and I know I've overused this smiley, but this is how I feel about your writing; :cheese:

I'm really sad that there is only one more chapter left, but in saying that, I really can't wait to see what you do to end this. It's going to be amazing!

This is a really interesting story I really like it!
You should definitely continue with it.

Well, fiiiiiinally! I thought William Beckett would pop out two kids before you updated again! I see my sneaky and subtle updating hints worked during maths. Yes, that's right, when you are working out your parabolas, I'm hacking into your brain and screaming, update, update, update!

But anyway, that's another story.

Holy shit. My brain is still trying to get around that chapter and the amount of WOW that just got thrown at me. You do realise how much of an amazing author you are right? Because you seriously blow my mind with your writing technique, everything is so real, so there, and it makes me believe that somewhere out there, Gabriel is living his mundane life, and Gabe is tangling his wires.

I loved Nancy despite how much she confused me when she was with Gabe. She was my best friend.
This restored my faith, because I felt like she was losing her friendship with Nancy because of Gabe, and it definitely contrasted against the last sentence and I felt that sense of betrayal before it happened.

I realized that following wires was pointless, because I was never going to get anywhere with Gabe. I did believe, however, that I would get somewhere with Gabriel, who I suspected had no wires at all.
I love how it feels like Gabriel/ Gabe has multiple personalities, or something similar, because the way you describe the both of them back to back makes me feel like you are describing two polar opposite characters, yet in the same sense, just two sides of one confusing, wireless and full of wires character.

The only problem was when I went too far.
Warning bells. I could practically hear them ringing.

I vaguely wondered if Nancy had extracted these petty facts from his strange words, or if they just didn't matter to her at all.
I really like this line here, because it helps define the two female characters. It's obvious that Nancy and Gabe's relationship is solely based on physical attraction, and then, I just realised I don't know the main character's name. Does she have a name? ...anyway. Her and Gabriel's relationship is based on words, and ideas and thoughts, those are the things bringing them together.

The question was swelling on my tongue.
My favourite line. Definitely makes her sound desperate for the answer, but holding back, and gives her this almost frustration at the fact she wants to say it, but her tongue won't let the words past.

Could he remember me if he wasn't aware of his counterpart that spent a majority of his time with me?

Wow. Just... wow. And I thought the story couldn't get any more intricate and intriguing.

On the 30th of August, 2004, I stood on the library steps and kissed Gabriel Saporta. I had never been happier.
And then, it does even more. I have to say, I was kind of excited when that happened, I want to see how Gabriel and Gabe are going to have to fight and hide the separate relationships, and see how Gabriel's relationship with her is going to put a strain on Gabe and Nancy's relationship.

Just so damn amazing, such a talented friend I have. (: Thank you so much for updating, it's the highlight of my night! No lie! Please don't make me wait too long for the next update, or else I'll get Rik to 'wape' you xD I kid, I kid!

I think I've taken up enough space so yeah, I'll end this now. Amazing stuff! <3

i really really like this story.
it's SO well written and simplistic and i love the idea of gabe and gabriel being two different characters.

well done! i can't wait to read more!
-subscribes-

Well, it's about time!
Yeah, I'm liking Gabriel much better than Gabe, he is less complex and not as hard to figure out.
I'm loving this story, because I just don't know what you're going to pull out next :]
Have I mentioned that I love the way you wrote this? Because I can actually feel like I'm there, and I just love this story!
So don't leave me hanging too long, I need to know what's happening next! :]

Is it strange that this story is just so confusing, yet it makes perfect sense? Because that is how it is to me.
I love this story, because it's one of those stories that stay with you, meaning you begin thinking about them later, which is amazing.
I'm really interested to see what will happen next...
Excellent job :]

Like I said, I would eventually comment this so, well, here I am!

First off, wow. Just plain wow, for I don't have another word to describe this story. It is completely captivating and mind blowing, and just amazing!

Seriously, the writing style, the characters, the plot, (Even though we are at the starting point) has already won me over. And not just because of Gabe -shifty-

This is stunning, and I will personally follow you around school nagging if it doesn't continue :D

ily vinz! =]

Wow, I like this story.
But, it confuses me heaps (:
Anyway, update soon!
xx