I liked your story. It was funny and had some serious drama. Your characters were described well. Each had their own unique personality and had attitude.
Your plot line was good, I wasn't too sure where you were going with the whole Sara thing, I think it was just to make a point.
The few things that need a bit of improving are the description of the party and what happens when Jezzy finds her with her boytoy. A few more descriptions would make it perfect.
I liked your story. It was funny and had some serious drama. Your characters were described well. Each had their own unique personality and had attitude.
Your plot line was good, I wasn't too sure where you were going with the whole Sara thing, I think it was just to make a point.
The few things that need a bit of improving are the description of the party and what happens when Jezzy finds her with her boytoy. A few more descriptions would make it perfect.
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