December 19th, 2008 at 08:32pm
The beginning was really well written.
The description of Jamie feeling so confused and anguished with the situation, especially how Lee was acting. And how he just couldn't take it all in, due to the sheer lack of cognitive ability, reduced by narcotics.
Oh yeah. That was a mouthful :file: *talks shit*
Then, when he started crying and Lee immediately got all soft and started comforting in, calling him sweet little names and asking, rather than demanding, and answer. :cute:
The end was just adorable. The last line...so sweet
Really awesome.
xx
You're an amazing writer, particularly when you're describing feelings.
It's really sad how when in this state, Jamie feels safe in the dark and when the Lee opens the curtains he feels scared and unsure about himself.
At first, when I read this story, I saw Lee as a scary, abusing person until I got nearer the end (I viewed their relationship as an abusive one, and I saw the starting of this story as Jamie waking up from another beating and cowering from Lee because he just expects it), and then once I read those last few paragraphs his character got another dimension and we see him as somebody who is worried about his boyfriend.
It's really sweet when Lee just holds Jamie, comforting him, and there's a slight change in Jamie's character, where he knows he'll be okay with Lee.
And then the worry when he asks Jamie what he took. Jamie's all quiet and doesn't want to say, and its like Lee answers his own question.
The last line of this was beautiful.
This was an amazing oneshot and I liked the length of it. Short and straight to the point. :cute:
...not that long isn't good, mind. but the length suited this oneshot.
:XD
I'm not making sense any more.
Great writing, as always.