April 19th, 2009 at 08:28pm
Oh, talk about bittersweet ending.
That was really, really good. Just the depression and deathwish of the first chapter was really pure and believable. anyone who had gone from such a life of freedom and pleasure to a life of illness in a hospital where you couldn't do anything would probably feel like that. I know I would.
This might sound kinda weird, but I thought it was beautiful when he started crying when he didn't die, and that it was his roommate who died when he thought he had. It showed how much he hated living like that and how much he wanted to put an end to everything, and it put a nice contrast to the next part.
The second chapter was really sweet.
He finally found a girl that he could love and start a life with, and he realized how much he had wasted the 25 years he had already lived. He wanted to change and believe in himself and that he would get better. He started fighting, for the girl he loved so he could make her happy.
Then, his wish was fulfilled and he died.
He didn't want to die anymore, but just becasue he had given up so long ago he was completely powerless and his body finally quit on him. It's really ironic, but the whole story brings out the message of that you should be careful of what you wish for, becasue one day you are bound to regret it. But you can't take it back or make it undone.
I really love the ending. Even though he didn't want to die, I'm happy for him because he doesn't have to suffer in that cursed hospital anymore. Hopefully he'll just find some peace in the afterlife.
This was really beautifully written, and I like it all very much.
You're a really talented writer and I hope to see more from you. :arms:
I liked the ending A LOT. Part two in my opinion was better.