He Comes in Peace - Comments

I finished reading your story. The ending was really romantic. lol. I could see how your writing style got progressively better over the years it took you to write the whole thing. I remember writing a story for the first time. It took me forever to finish. And when I went back to read the old chapters I realized how different my writing style became.

I recommended your story. I don't often do that. And your story is the only one I've read all the way through, being a chapter story. I have subscribed to many other stories, but I've not read through all their chapters yet. Yours, luckily, was finished and I could read it all in a matter of a couple days. It held my interest the whole time.

Well done!

I read how your alien race mates. I found that very interesting. Though, I don't think I would have told Skye if I was the alien. Because unless Skye goes with the aliens or they erase her mind, Skye could be a danger to their race by knowing how they reproduce. If some one on earth had bad intentions they could easily find a way to kill off the alien race by killing off the "mother bee". Just a thought...

I am enjoying your story!! Now on to ch. 38! :D

I just read chapter 26. I so wanted to bitch slap those slutty girls. I wouldn't stand for their BS like that. Not if I didn't have to. And if they were bothering my friends in a public place like that, they would be dead.

I'd also freak them about about their camping trip, saying there's a nasty alien out there that likes to eat slutty girls. lol.

The gif didn't work so I'll do it now...

And I'm sorry for the heap of spelling and possibly grammar mistakes in my little spiel o.O

So I did say I'd comment on this didn't I? I finished reading it last night and I just, adored this, seriously. If I ever end up updating any of my stories, I'm gonna rec this story in author's note, and you too...I LOVED IT. I'm gonna launch into a rant about the things I loved (eveyrthing) in this fic, hoping that it makes sense, and just...yeah.

- First off, I'd like to be carried by an alien with spikes on his back now. Specifically, Tay. Or his twin. Doesn't matter.

- The fact that he had to go through several languages to finally get the two to cross the language barrier! And that he spoke so formally, not using contractions and though he may be well educated in the english language, dictionary, grammar and good manners, he has no idea whatsoever about human behaviour and sayings. Which I find amusing and extremely hilarious. Yup.

- I love secrecy in stories I read. I love the mystery of it all. I've read a couple fics with cute boys sneaking in through your window when your parents are asleep, I've read some where you keep someone hidden inside your bedroom, hell, I've read one where someone who was beaten up climbs up your wall and in through your window, when you're naked and he actually ends up being cute...anyway, it's cute and cliche and I love it.
Like, out of all the people he could've disturbed, Tay chose the bedroom of the girl he fell on and licked..like yay. I've never read one where it's a cute alien boy who, at times, lets his spike-like fins erupt and whose eyes glow (green or yellow?). Yep, definite yes to hiding an alien.

- And the idea of them meeting in her holiday house while Skye and her mum are relaxing away for the long weekend. YES. Otherwise, where would the fun have come from, only keeping him inside your bedroom? And now having difficulty and panic attacks while trying to get him inside your mum's car? Aha. I loved that bit.

- Running from the crazy people who wants to use Tay as an experiment. HELL YES. What's a extraterrestrial sci-fi fic without the part where the protagonists run away from home, and protect the alien from getting hurt? Duh. I am in no way using sarcasm...I swear. The chase was *read in singsong voice* awwweeeesuuuuum! In ET, he was riding a bike, but here, Tay was carrying Skye. And he was freaking jumping from trees and all that crazy stuff all while having a teenage human girl hanging on his spikes for dear life. I want to runaway using the method of riding an out of this planet being, whyyyyy?

- I think the most I enjoyed about this was their interactions.

1) how Skye had to deal with his formal dialogue and how everytime she blurted out something he couldn't comprehend, she mostly just waved it off and told him to forget about it aha.
2) whenever he gets too close she always got easily irked by this and told him off...either she felt uncomfortable or it was when she was developing more intimate feelings for the boy
3) and each time the two had the slightest argument, I would be laughing, they're just so cute when they argue
4) when those girls tried to seduce Tay (I'm just like bitches, puhhhlease) and Skye got all defensive and jealous and I'm just like "ooooooh". Though when Tay stepped forward, cradled Skye and politely waved them off, my heart mekted from his sweetness and urrghhhhh.
5) plus those little hilarious moments when everything is just awkward...e.g about the whole sanitary, wearing undearwear, thing BAHAHA
I swear I've got more....

- Kudos and kudos and kudos to you for making up the whote story about his planet and everything (including the "bee" phenomenon). I know I'm young and naive and whatnot, but I don't think I could ever make up a story like that (hell, I probably wouldn't even get pass the different names and I'm too lazy to do it). The effort you put into explaining his life and planet and people is just amazing and it came out flawless. Though excuse me but the whole males with the queen is just...yeah...and when she said Tay left (oooh and also his story of leaving...makes so much sense) because of that - ugh my poor boy.

- (this relates to 'interactions' bit) And to the part I've been waiting to write *cue DUN DUN DUHHH*: do you know how long I waited until the two finally admitted their feelings, or talk about their relationship or kiss? A long, long, long and immensely painful time. Don't tell anyone but I'm a sucker for little cute romance like this.
It's not just 'oh they're running away and they fall in love, yess' - no, it's more like 'even through the arguments and differences, they still found someone they'd fall in love with inside each other. Even though they were running away from extremely dangerous people, they found time to get to know and appreciate each other.'
At first it was an awkward friendship between the two and (though I knew there was going to be romance in this) I still couldn't help the warm fuzzy feeling. I'm a weird young teenage girl, I deserve to have these feelings.
And the way you made it happen. God, there should be an award for most romantic and cute way to tell someone you love them. And the little hint of alien-ism in there and that it was coming from a non-human being...baha. No but really? "Words humans on earth, use much too lightly." How do you even-no

Okay I think that's it...maybe. I might add something else. So I hope you enjoyed my list :).
I really did love this. So freaking m u c h. It deserves a massive percentage of recognition and you deserve all the attention you get (or got, I keep forgetting that this was finished ages ago) for this. I hope I did justice (bahahah) and goobye!!
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I've been reading your story up to the point where the alien started speaking other languages. One thing I have learned from reading other books, is when they use a language other than the one you speak, the foreign language is always in italics.

Though, Latin might have been a cool language to have him speak first, or Greek or something.

I stumbled upon your story on the home page and read it because it was an alien sci-fi. I am also currently working on an alien sci-fi.

For some reason your alien character reminds me of L from Death Note... so that's sorta what I imagined him looking like...

I am soooooooooo (emphasis on that word) lucky to be able to write a review about this. This story is absolutely AMAZING. I can't believe that the epilogue was short! At least, I think it was short. Let me just say that the story was short but the chapter long? Ugh, I don't know what to say anymore.

In a few seconds, this comment will be filled with every I have felt about your story from chapters 1-44. I mean every single word I say and I hope you take it to heart. lol. :-) Here it goes!

It's not a typical alien love story. It's YOUR typical alien love story ('your' meaning the readers). The author plays with your mind a little and tugs at your heart strings just to tease you. As much as you want more intimate time for Kartayon and Skye, you don't. But each moment they have together feels like a lifetime for you.

And don't let me get started with Skye. What can I say about her? She's sweet, adorable, beautiful and REAL. I can give a thumbs up to Kartayon for bumping into her in the first place.

Kartayon, what can I say about him? HOT must seem too much but I really can't say anything else about him. He's different, DEFINITELY but you know that he's kind and loving. Despite being from a different planet, you can pass him off as a hot teenager.

You are a brilliant writer. I applaud you for each and every chapter you have written, down to the smallest detail. It may seem a bit exaggerating but I have to say what I want to say because this is my comment. When I read your author's note about having to update after one month, I guess it's fine because you have given us a chapter that deserves to be written perfectly.

He Comes in Peace, one of the best mibba stories I have ever read.

again this is an amazing adventure from the talented Chiling!!!!
I am really disappointed that this story is not LONGER!!!
the climax was soo intense that I thought there'd be a BOOOM SHA BAM!!! but...
still, this story is beautiful.

oh gosh the romantic scenes u write are sooo cute~~

GREAT JOB AND FINISH A NOVEL, OR OR SOMETHING THIS BREAK K?? I PROMISE I WILL FINISH THE SONG AND MAKE IT SOUND BEST AS POSSIBLE OKAY?!?!

Thanks and MERRY CHRISTMAS!!

GOD we got OLD! and I have to admit I was kind of surprised to see this updated but I was significantly pleased <3 good job.

Oh my god that was amazing!!! I just started and finished this story today and it's awesome! I'm definately gonna read it again. Btw, I'm totally in love with Kartayon!

Oh.My.God.
This was the best story I've ever read!
I never wanted it to end!

OMG OMG OMG!

Not gonna lie, this was one of my favorite stories here on Mibba and when I left it was at the "Like bee's" chapter and I would come back every so often JUST to see if you updates.

After months gone I finally came back and I was so skeptical to check this but it was the only story I really really wanted to read so I clicked it on my subscriptions page, because hell, even if you abandoned it I still wanted to re-read it. And low-and-behold what I find! I was so happy I DANCED and shouted.

I love this story. I can not even say it properly or enough, but I love this story. So great....and I can't even describe it or my love for it! Speechless, wordless, thankless! But alas THANK YOU!

I am so happy you finished, ugh I could cry! I am going to do back, re-read everything, and comment on every freaking sentence if I have to because, Dammit!, you deserve it!

The updates and ending is awesome, the story is awesome, and you are awesome!

I have waited for what seems like ever for this story to finish but let me say, IT WAS WORTH IT.

I love it, and you, and Tay and Skye and I am so glad/sad everything is done :'D

THANK YOU <3 <3 <3

Amazing story!! I'm gonna miss Skye and Tay. This is like my favorite alien story that I have ever read. And seriously, how many berries did Tay eat for his mouth to turn blue? haha! Awesome job with the story <3

Honestly, I'm sad to see it go! I loved this story!! I'm not gonna have anything to look forward to now when i see a mibba update! I miss it already. LOVED IT!

It's over... :'(
Oh I'm going to miss this story sooo sooo much! Thank you so much for living and thinking and creating this beautiful story!
I want to say so much more, but there's just so much and I can't think of what to say first, and I don't want to ramble.
Okay, I read Imagineer like last year, and it would be wonderful if you could build on it!
Can't wait to see more of your wonderful work!!!

This was probably one of the best stories I've ever read on Mibba. I'm so glad I stuck with it, even when you weren't updating. It was absolutely brilliant and I sincerely hope you never stop writing. Congratulations on finally finishing! ;]

I've been following since about 13 chapters in, and I have to say, I'm super glad to have been along for the ride, and I'm glad to see the story completed in such a nice way. You are brilliant, the story was fantastic, and I look forward to reading more creations from you. :]

Alright, let me just get this out of the way: AWWWWWWWWWW!
I just about melted from all the mushy feelings the last chapter had, which is not a bad thing at all. I have loved following this story, and knew the wait for chapters was well worth it. Congrats on finishing a lovely story!

This was a great story :D
Just a tip. It would of made more sense if she was 18 maybe, would make the running off more realistic, or the chapter when the evil guys come her mum would have been like it's some university/college people, or when she went to get the dog she told them that her mate drove, and being an adult at 18 it makes sense that she fell in love.
That's just me. BUT I loved this story. My favorites. It would make a good film, and book. If you work on it, it could definately be a good sci-fi novel :)
Can't wait to read your other stuff :D

Perfect :)