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Oh my God.
That was beautiful. It was so realistic.
I agree with lyrical_mess about: spaceboy: gee that's so poetic, bert. go make it into a song like fucking pretty handsome awkward
It was so typically Gerard, I thought. It seemed like what he'd say, given the situation you set up for them.

Basically, that is some amazing writing. I love it.

OMFG.

It started out all cute and funny and silly and then WHAM. Arrow through the heart. I liked it and I barely ever read Gerbert. I loved it.

You know which line made me snort with laughter: spaceboy: gee that's so poetic, bert. go make it into a song like fucking pretty handsome awkward but it kind of broke my heart too. y'know?

I loved it. The yelling match and the ughhhh too much. I like the style. Its real and not over-the-top dramatic arguing. Its real, if I have to find a word for it. I pretty much...agree exactly with the last para of the review up there *points*.

I loved loved loved loved loved the end. how he just...gets pissed off and signs out. because that's what people do. *hug* you're so good at making people, hon, i get jealous.

I don't think this is the kind of story that will let me leave a long comment...so apologies for this short rambly thing.

This is definitely something. I mean, the msn conversation story has been done before (and poorly), but this isn't just a meaningless chat induced by sugar. It's serious, and even the bitter remarks seem to be made in an attempt to protect how hurt they feel.

I thought it was really quite moving and blunt, and I don't even really like Gerbert all that much. The way they interacted and the way it ended, oh my god, it made sense, you know? Like you've taken the facts, put some fiction in and made a story out of it. And it is a story, even though it's shown through a msn conversation, which means constant changing of perspective. There's backstory there and hurt and love.

You two did a good job with this. The use of lyrics was a nice touch too.