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  • ward-o

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    Real creative idea. I like it. It sounds afwully like Ryan. I love how he goes to Patrick for shit like sex. I like how Peter's still that funny moron I always see he is. I love how Brendon's completely clueless of Ryan's feelings. It's high school all over again.
    January 11th, 2009 at 07:30am
  • Iero_Hero

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    I rather liked this one. =]
    It's not really common of people to do what you did, and buy a journal for purposes such as this. Actually, it's very, very creative.

    The fact that he never dates his entries, just... It's simply something that Ryan may do, most likely. How you wrote it out to make it so very similar as to what RyRo may wrote is just simply amazing. I honestly don't think someone else could pull it off as well as you did.

    I'd honestly love to read more. =)
    (Pfft, I'm no good at "good" reviews, but I am getting better.)-
    January 11th, 2009 at 05:24am
  • sketch.

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    Oh gosh. I'm finding this really enjoyable.

    I love how... well, simple your style here is, in a way. For example, when Ryan sucked off the roadie and writes I kind of hate myself right now, you don't doubt for a second that it's the truth despite the fact that this self hate isn't really explored in great detail. I think a lot of this story is more about what it doesn't say than what it does say, much like Catcher in the Rye, one of my favourite books.

    I agree with Nimrod's idea about how Pete and Patrick seem like father figures giving little Ryan advice. It's a very twisted form of a fatherly relationship :XD But it is somewhat fatherly, all the same.

    I also really think it contains great humour. Again, subtle, but rather hilarious at the same time. Ryan's character itself is one intriguing part, he seems to indeed hate himself but without the whole thing descending into the tale of another tortured soul. He's sort of like a teenager really, he seems to still be growing up in a few ways and have characteristics often associated with those of teens- struggles with sexuality and coming out, unrequeited love, making mistakes, heavy sarcasm. :XD

    I also loved the fact that he never dates his entries. It adds to the image of him that I had; slightly absent minded and messy, artistic and rebellious, though it is that subtle, perhaps subconscious rebellion.

    I'm quite ashamed of how many times I've used the word "subtle" in this comment. I apologise :cheese:

    I'd love to read more :cute:
    January 11th, 2009 at 12:58am
  • animrod

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    Oh, god. :lmfao
    I got a lot of strange looks from my mother for laughing hysterically out of nowhere in the less than five minutes that I freakin' speed read that.
    Ryan's (your) wit was excellent. I love that you didn't make him too deep or introspective - you gave him somewhat of a normal life/made him a normal person inside a totally not-normal life.
    And Pete and Patrick fit together perfectly. :XD And into the story perfectly. I love how Ryan gets advice from them both - they seem like father figures to me for some reason. In Love Though now that I think about it that's a rather creepy thing considering his... escapades with them both. I should probably rethink that.

    But all in all... I love it. :cute: It makes me laugh and it actually seems more realistic than it should. :tehe:
    January 10th, 2009 at 10:11pm
  • Siriano;

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    I like it. I'm not a big fan of fan-fiction but this was pretty good. I love how you manage to carry out a plot using only a paragraph at a time.

    Some parts I felt I really couldn't see the guys doing, but it wasn't that distracting from the whole thing.
    :cute:
    January 10th, 2009 at 09:32pm
  • folie a dru.

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    New story-thing.
    It's just a Ryan journal thing I started in my new journal.
    More of a writing tool for me, but I thought you guys might like to read it.
    Happy reading!

    xoxox
    -Dru
    January 10th, 2009 at 08:46pm
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