Five Stages - Comments

I had to read it, just because I love CSI so much.
And I do have a few opinions of it.
First, unfortunately I don't think you captured Grissom, and this is more OOC (out of character) than anything, which is fine if that's what you were aiming for.
Secondly, I don't think you captured his emotions either. I mean the storyline is pretty cool, what with the five stages and all, but I can't get into his mind.
I don't relate, because it's so short, and not descriptive enough.
We (the readers) don't get into his head, which is really what we're meant to be able to do, I'm guessing, due to the storyline you've chosen.

So allbeit interesting, I can't say that I liked it. I need more descriptions, more feelings, more emotions, more actions, more agony, more denial - to be honest.

I know what you were trying to do, and you did give a good attempt, but for me you didn't manage.

No offence meant, just wanted to give some helpful critisism. Maybe in the next few chapters you'll think of what I've said and they'll be awesome.
(:

This is epic, and now that I've finally read it I expect you to finish it. :hand:
But no, in all seriousness I thought it was amazing. :cute:

Kayso.
As I fan, I just have to say...

GRISSOM!
GRISSOM!
GRISSOM!

Anyway, Amanda, I love CSI (although Miami has to be my favourite. New york least favourite...) and I love this.
I need more of this, ja. :arms:

Amazing.

I don't have the right words for this.
This is amazing.

You capture the loneliness and the heartache so well, especially in the letter. Every word is full of emotion--it's a nonstop force in this piece, flowing very well throughout the whole thing.
It's just so well written; everything flows and everything is so natural and it's just heart-wrenching.
I love this.