The Catch - Comments

Absolutely wonderful story. I love all the different P.O.V's; they give such a depth to the story. I especially like the mother and father's P.O.V; it must be what a lot of parents secretly think about their children if they were going through issues such as this. Extremely well written - I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.

Oh my God. "Why?" - The feelings that Chris has are I'm sure what anyone would feel if they lost their best friend in the world. I love how brief the chapters are so far; so abrupt. I love it.

An amazing first chapter; so melancholy but really drawing you on to read more! I love the way that Alex is quite non-plus about her death; almost amused by it, even though the reader feels sad. This really keeps the suspsense up. Short but very to the point . I cannot wait to read more.

It was short but amazingly good! It was really orginal and I liked that ^_^ It was a good ending too... Deep *lol* Looking forward to your next story ;)

wow jessi
this is amazing
its short but effective
<3

This is highly original - really good. I like the ways you express the views of others and their characters.

I REALLY like the different POVs, you're so good at writing the whole thing viewed from different aspects ^_^ Don't worry about the chapters being short, that really doesn't matter you know, because your writing is good and it's straight to the point. I think the short chapters actually kinda fits the story:)

I liked what you wrote about, I could really relate. Well done ^_^ *thumbs up*

O_O Wow, that's a great idea, I like that you included the dead person's POV. And you describe how the different persons who knew Alex feel goddamn well!! It's great! :D *subscribes*

this is really really really great!! i would like to see where it goes

No, Alex(a) is a girl, so you were right there. But Chris can be a boy or a girl. The last two chapters I've put up were the mother and father, but the rest of the chapters will be open to interpretation unless I decide to have one by her brother.

waitingforsomething:

I tried to use androgynous names, but unfortunately I couldn't avoid giving away a gender for Alex. I wanted it all to be very generic and open to interpretation. Thank you guys :D

*slaps face* Sorry. I make assumptions...thought I saw Alexia in there somewhere...*goes to eat Hamburger Helper*

Yes that is precisely what I'm about to do.

Wow, very insightful and thoguht-provoking chapter. I only just now figured out who your narrator is; first I thought it was a friend or someone like that. Way to keep the suspense goin'. :mrgreen:

You are totally rocking my writer's world with your stuff! I love it!

I tried to use androgynous names, but unfortunately I couldn't avoid giving away a gender for Alex. I wanted it all to be very generic and open to interpretation. Thank you guys :D

*agrees with the previous*

Sad start. I feel bad for your character. And her opinion of the MCR lyrics you used.

Cool start. I like :)