Ugh, okay before I even start I'm just gonna say I love you, okay. :tehe: I'm gonna marry you, and we're going to be like Dan and Jeph and have little annoying jackass children like Quinn and Bert. Yup that's my plan. :coffee:
First, I love the layout. :XD
The sound of whooshing metal rang through the air and Dante couldn’t help but die a little inside. On his fucking day off. He took the key from his pocket and jammed in into the lock, the clicking sound officially welcoming him to hell. The beginning is like so...so Dante. :XD Right off the bat it's that pessimistic, everyday is hell feeling that follows Dante all through out the movies and you worked it very well through out the whole story.
“The video store is closed and I need some entertainment” He snickered. Randal, how I love him. :tehe: You captured his asshole ways perfectly, and I kinda wanted to just smoosh Randal in this (let's ignore the fact that I kind of always wanna smoosh Randal). What I love most about this is that as I read the words I can hear the characters' voices in my head actually saying them, and no matter how good a story is that's always something that is hard to come across for me.
“I’m gonna pick up a smokin’ babe. With really big tits. Yeah, big tits. And I’m gonna tell her I own the video store. Yeah and then I’m going to fuck her. Fuck her real hard. On the counter. And then, I’m going to leave a sandwich on the counter. Yeah, fuck that stupid dude, thinks he can lock me out of the store.” :lmfao You're dialog is great, and just.....fucking Jay. :XD
“Fifteen bucks, little man, put that shit in my hand.” That made me :tehe:
No one answered. He abandoned the counter and started searching. The moaning got louder and louder as he went towards the food isle. He turned the corner and shut his eyes quickly.
“Jesus fucking Christ, what is your problem?!”
Jay looked up. Well, you took my keys. So I did it in your store instead.” He giggled. I love how Jay actually did it, 'cause he's like that hugest shittalker and you'd usually just roll your eyes at whatever bullshit, especially when it comes to chicks, he says he's gonna do. So yeah, having him actually doing the chick, and it being in the Quick Stop instead was genius.
Bob slid down the wall and put his head on Dante’s shoulder. Dante told himself that he was too fucking high to care, but he really actually liked it. They sat there, for quite some time, staring at the cars that whizzed by. Everything was fucking hilarious when high. This is like so cute and sweet, yet without being disgustingly fluffy.
Things have bee stolen, the Doritos section is covered in come :lmfao The little details in this, like this part and Randal sliding on the counter with his porno mag just complete it.
Somewhere in the distance, My Heart Will Go On stars playing. Dante bashes his head against the counter. Fuck Caitlin, fuck Veronica, fuck Bob…wait, what?For some reason it's like one of my favorite things in Clerks stories, only though I've only read a few, when Caitlin and Veronica are mentioned.
Bob shrugs and looks down at the floor. Bob followed Jay. And Jay did not plan on getting a job. Ever. This part is like....I don't know, kinda sad, yet sweet. Like yeah Bob is obviously just going to follow Jay around for the rest of his life, but it's a sweet kind of dependence. They just go together, and I love how you can't have one without the other.
Tbh, I was kinda of iffy on the pairing because usually I just don't do any kind of slash with Jay or Silent Bob but the way you wrote Dante and Bob's interactions through out the story and the kiss wasn't sappy, or dramatic, or messy, or all or :yah, it was just a simple kiss and it was believable.
“LET ME HELP YOU OUT OF THE CHAIR GRANDMA! LET ME TOUCH YOU, LET ME FEEL YOU!” two fucked up voices hollered. Jay and Randal.
Bob and Dante groaned; but everything was as it should be. And the ending :XD it was a perfect follow to the kiss, and the last sentence was great because that's just how it is with them, the same as it ever is kind of feeling and nothing else.
I've actually always been surprised that Randal and Jay didn't get along better in the movies, they're so alike. :think:
Anyway, this was funny, and sweet and I can't imagine it any better. :XD And I hope you write more Clerks stuff in the future. :tehe:
I'm gonna marry you, and we're going to be like Dan and Jeph and have
little annoying jackass children like Quinn and Bert. Yup that's my plan. :coffee:
First, I love the layout. :XD
The sound of whooshing metal rang through the air and Dante couldn’t help but die a little inside. On his fucking day off. He took the key from his pocket and jammed in into the lock, the clicking sound officially welcoming him to hell.
The beginning is like so...so Dante. :XD Right off the bat it's that pessimistic, everyday is hell feeling that follows Dante all through out the movies and you worked it very well through out the whole story.
“The video store is closed and I need some entertainment” He snickered.
Randal, how I love him. :tehe: You captured his asshole ways perfectly, and I kinda wanted to just smoosh Randal in this (let's ignore the fact that I kind of always wanna smoosh Randal). What I love most about this is that as I read the words I can hear the characters' voices in my head actually saying them, and no matter how good a story is that's always something that is hard to come across for me.
“I’m gonna pick up a smokin’ babe. With really big tits. Yeah, big tits. And I’m gonna tell her I own the video store. Yeah and then I’m going to fuck her. Fuck her real hard. On the counter. And then, I’m going to leave a sandwich on the counter. Yeah, fuck that stupid dude, thinks he can lock me out of the store.”
:lmfao You're dialog is great, and just.....fucking Jay. :XD
“Fifteen bucks, little man, put that shit in my hand.”
That made me :tehe:
No one answered. He abandoned the counter and started searching. The moaning got louder and louder as he went towards the food isle. He turned the corner and shut his eyes quickly.
“Jesus fucking Christ, what is your problem?!”
Jay looked up. Well, you took my keys. So I did it in your store instead.” He giggled.
I love how Jay actually did it, 'cause he's like that hugest shittalker and you'd usually just roll your eyes at whatever bullshit, especially when it comes to chicks,
he says he's gonna do. So yeah, having him actually doing the chick, and it being in the Quick Stop instead was genius.
Bob slid down the wall and put his head on Dante’s shoulder. Dante told himself that he was too fucking high to care, but he really actually liked it. They sat there, for quite some time, staring at the cars that whizzed by. Everything was fucking hilarious when high.
This is like so cute and sweet, yet without being disgustingly fluffy.
Things have bee stolen, the Doritos section is covered in come
:lmfao The little details in this, like this part and Randal sliding on the counter with his porno mag just complete it.
Somewhere in the distance, My Heart Will Go On stars playing. Dante bashes his head against the counter. Fuck Caitlin, fuck Veronica, fuck Bob…wait, what?For some reason it's like one of my favorite things in Clerks stories, only though I've only read a few, when Caitlin and Veronica are mentioned.
Bob shrugs and looks down at the floor. Bob followed Jay. And Jay did not plan on getting a job. Ever.
This part is like....I don't know, kinda sad, yet sweet. Like yeah Bob is obviously just going to follow Jay around for the rest of his life, but it's a sweet kind of dependence. They just go together, and I love how you can't have one without the other.
Tbh, I was kinda of iffy on the pairing because usually I just don't do any kind of slash with Jay or Silent Bob but the way you wrote Dante and Bob's interactions through out the story and the kiss wasn't sappy, or dramatic, or messy, or all
“LET ME HELP YOU OUT OF THE CHAIR GRANDMA! LET ME TOUCH YOU, LET ME FEEL YOU!” two fucked up voices hollered. Jay and Randal.
Bob and Dante groaned; but everything was as it should be.
And the ending :XD it was a perfect follow to the kiss, and the last sentence was great because that's just how it is with them, the same as it ever
is kind of feeling and nothing else.
I've actually always been surprised that Randal and Jay didn't get along better in the movies, they're so alike. :think:
Anyway, this was funny, and sweet and I can't imagine it any better. :XD
And I hope you write more Clerks stuff in the future. :tehe: