This is incredibly stunning, you seriously have an amazing talent for writing. I got goosebumps reading it, I really enjoyed it. Thnk you so much for sharing :arms:
March 14th, 2009 at 12:17pm
*stares at the banner for awhile* Oh, right.
:yah I tell you all the time, your writing is nomnomnom. It just is. No way around it.
Mm, I like the fireworks thing. :tehe: I've used that same word in a suicide fic myself! Go figure. Fireworks are fun to (ab)use. And then the fact that he's killing himself the same way...it's
fersher. You've got a thing for pact suicides, dun ya? :file: Yeah, don't think I didn't notice that between contests.:think: What the heck is a 'red creaming soda'? I'm thinking of cream soda which I love, but I don't think that's the same thing.
Him with the heat packs, I just love that for some reason. Not sure why but I think the fact that it shows how vulndurable and needy he is and stuff...yeah, that gets to me. I love weak, broken male characters. *keens* I love you putting the word stupid in there when he's talking about how he can't sleep. Stupid, in most cases, would seem like a word not to be used in a story so...pensive? Can't think of the word. But anyway, you can actually pull off a word like that. It takes skillz. Yew haz skillz.:think: The whole "If I could ask you one question, it would be 'Why?'" thing is a little...cliche. I mean, don't get me wrong, nobody would ask anything otherwise I don't think, but that's something in almost every suicide fic. Almost. It's in movies and stuff too...always.
(I'm abusing this smiley, aren't I?) I love the paragraph about him saying that the most he's said in a month was him agreeing with Nakki. It's so...frail.:cheese: HE WAS GONNA PROPOSE TO HIM!
Now I'm all sad and stuff. Poor baby.:file: Only you can pull off putting 'fucking' in the middle of a really fucking sad, heartbreaking, hectic, suspenseful, tragic scene like that. Srsly. And again when he's sort of having a light moment mentioning the car.
Ohh, him throwing a fit and making a scene. I love it. Really. I might have written a scene like that once in my RP. Yeah, think I did. Poor David was refusing to let Matt go, I think I hurt him pretty badly somehow. I can't even remember.:arms: You are win. Epic amounts of it.
