March 27th, 2009 at 01:07am
Okay...
Kat wow, just wow. I know I read the draft so I knew what was coming, but it brought me to tears. I think you should also try and get people to listen to "Someday You Will Be Loved" by Death Cab For Cutie also while reading this, it helps the mood.
I could just imagine their voice in my head. I don't know whether it was Gerard or if it was Frank, but I could imagine their voice. How, dreary and sad it sounded, like someone completely and utterly shattered.
I felt like I was seeing the world through his eyes as well, like when he's describing how dull the colours are, I could imagine that. In that little part when he's talking about how he opened his eyes to the world...it was like you got a little flash of colour as well. When he gets the envelope, what I pictured was that his eyes were "opening" again and then he see's the date and straight away his eyes close again.
I'm going to say here that I think Gerard's left Frank, but I'm just guessing.
Fantasy is also a good friend. He helps me, y’know? He helps me follow that small but frail string that’s slowly leading me through the darkness. He’s quite slow though, it feels like we never get anywhere. Sometimes he leads me in circles. It doesn’t bother me much though.
There's just something about those lines, I wish I could describe what I want to say, but I really can't. I guess to me, it's either he's trying and trying to escape to his fantasies, but he just can't and keeps going round in circles, or that's he's trapped in them.
I’ve stopped wishing. Actually, I stopped a long time ago.
I cried at that, honestly. He sounds like me right now, and I know the feeling of kind of having that magic taken away from you, that you can just wish and know that it probably will come true.
I’m quiet now too, almost silent, just suspending in a deep, dark blue ocean with only muffled sound. It’s quite pretty actually.
This line reminds me of when people kill themselves in the bathtub, I'm not sure as to why. But I guess because inside, he's slowly dying, and he doesn't care anymore. It's like suicide, he know's he's dying, but he doesn't really care anymore.
It was just beautiful Kat, I hope you win this, I really hope you do.
Just... great job. Really. There is nothing negative to say and I think out of all of the ones that I have read prior to this... yours is one of my top favorites. More than likely top three.
It was very bittersweet the way you ended it by the way. I liked it. The perfect ending. Sorry if this is scrambled. I'm sort of at a loss for words.