Okay, so first thing - I like how it's in parts. It puts a twist on it. Well, I wouldn't say twist.. but I've never seen anyone do that before. :)
You have a spelling error here - “Can I talk you, Ryan?”
This is really moving. It's really emotional. Like, it's bringing tears to my eyes right now. I can almost feel Ry's desperation in wanting to be able to talk to Bden and fix things and everything. I think, honestly Julia, that you have nothing to worry about. This story is well written and very captivating. Two important factors when it comes to writing. You did a good job. And the fact that there's an underlying message to it just adds more. :arms: I'm sorry that this review isn't long or anything. I'm not very good at them. :shifty
Okay, so first thing - I like how it's in parts. It puts a twist on it. Well, I wouldn't say twist.. but I've never seen anyone do that before. :)
You have a spelling error here - “Can I talk you, Ryan?”
This is really moving. It's really emotional. Like, it's bringing tears to my eyes right now. I can almost feel Ry's desperation in wanting to be able to talk to Bden and fix things and everything. I think, honestly Julia, that you have nothing to worry about. This story is well written and very captivating. Two important factors when it comes to writing. You did a good job. And the fact that there's an underlying message to it just adds more. :arms:
I'm sorry that this review isn't long or anything. I'm not very good at them. :shifty