Sick Boy - Comments

I think it was too short. Trust me, I know what it is like to get writers block or even to be distracted by other stories- I just finally updated Disturbia after like five months of delaying- so I also know sometimes you just have to spit out an update. And this kinda felt like it was spat out. Don't take this the wrong way, and know that I really love your story, but it just felt rushed.

Also, the quick paced dialogue made it hard to keep up with who was speaking at the time- and I had to read it over a couple of times to get the flow of it. But the POV of the narration was still done effortlessly.

The last paragraph was truly up to your talent. Despite the quick feeling, it was perfectly written. It had the impact that was needed to keep the reader interested and also have that ominious cloud that is continously following these boys. It was a nice simple touch to re-affirm our fears that you are going to torture these characters.

Seriously?
Lyk, seriously?
Fangirl? Me? The girl getting insain inked on her forever? Nah. Never. Not me.

Once again, I love how you can so easily shift viewpoint on narration. It always adds something different to your stories, it's just one way they're so different than others.

P!ATD fans weren’t as dark, not as used to their idols kissing boys for real. MCR fans were jaded, bored, the new Gerbert is Ryrard.

The Panic fans were surpised, the MCRmy was pissed.

I like how you use "our" lingo, yet it ties in perfectly and it flows well. People who don't know our "language" would still understand, I think.

I liked how in this chapter Gerard realized what he did. I feel that it's going to turn out to be something important. I just feel sad that it's going to rain on his parade when he gets that message. He was happy (sort of, I think) and thought that he could turn things around and now they're going to have to deal with the videos on the internet.

Aw!
this story is too cute.
im so frustrated about theyre relationship thoughhhh AHH.
but i suppose thats what you call a conflict.
hahah grrrr.

anyyywayyyyy.
i love this and i want to know what happens NEXT.
actually, i do know, gerard is going to read the message and ryan's going to get in trouble.
but the SUSPENSE!
i want it to end *pouts*

lovvve it.

Wow, I really do love this.
I especially liked the way that Mikey explained to Gerard.
It was wonderful times.
Sorry I haven't read/commented for a long time, it's just that I was on holiday, and I had about ten updates to read and my own updates to write and post...
But I really love this story.

=O Dru!
*shakes head disdainfully*
I love this, it's like, so real.
You know what I mean, hopefully.
xD

ACK!

I know I should be leaving some good, in depth review after being on read/comment hiatus, but OMGee!!!

Dru is so evil! GAH! Love the subtle reference to Mibba... and was the Sidekick pertaining to Tas? And... and...

I'M HERE!

:spazz:

ILY SO MUCH WIFEY!

EDIT: They're on the INTERNET! OHNOOO!!! I feel like this is real life we're talking about, not fanfic!

And... Mikey about Alicia, the bartender... and BROTHERLY SCENES! WOOHOO!... I just loveloveloveadorelove the latest updates!

SQUEE!!!

You made me happy!

BTW, do I have a bigger role here, or am I just a cameo? :lmfao

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I absolutely love this story.
It's awesomely fantastic.
I love this pairing.
It's my favorite slash. :D

Uh oh.
I did something naughty.
-giggles-
Mikey's good at the talking thing. I love what he said about Alicia.
And Gerard's second to the last paragraph was love.
And for some reason buying the new Sidekick as a peace offering stuck out a lot and I'm not sure why.

It's about fucking time that he realized Ryan isn't perfect. :roll:

I wanna see how Gerard reacts to the stuff out on the net...

I loved the whole part with Alicia, and what Mikey says. It made me laugh. "and she snores, too" :lmfao

I want to start this off by apologizing for not commenting sooner and to ask you not to hunt me down for putting off commenting.

Had Gerard been so stupid as to look past Ryan’s apparent flaws and fool himself into thinking the boy was perfect? Gee! You’re insain. Seriously.
I love this line because it shows how blind love can make some people. It can get to the point where your insisting to yourself that your partner is perfect, while anyone else not fucking said partner can see all the flaws clearly strew amidst the personality of..said partner. And, this is also a clear display of GeeLove's [ignore my lame name] internal war of which is mentioned throughout the story. He's at war with his insainity!
OHMIGOSH, Cap'n Obvious just dropped by.

“She’s a fucking publicity whore. She spends to much time on the Internet and sometimes I think she flaunts me. And she snores too.”
Heh heh. Made me giggle like an idiot because I've kind of noticed that... Not the Alicia snoring thing because I haven't gotten the privilege of sleeping next/with her. But the whole publicity whore thing. Well said, mate.

As usual, your grammar is SUPERB and the chapter is very well done.
Update when you get the chance and take care.

=O Dru's a bad girl! But even it is just a story, I'm glad she's sharing all the cuteness with us. hehe.

But aww...Gerard's all faltering between sain and insain...did I tell you last night? I got an essay back in English about a character in a book that particularly struck me. And somewhere in the middle, I wrote how realisitic and romantic it was when she went insain. The teacher circled it and put a big ol' question mark...=P

But this chapter was so awww! Mikey's idea of romance, that sounds just like how I imagine him. Plus I'm a huge Mylicia fan. Can I put in a request? Can you somehow get Mylicia babies into the story? Hanyway....lmfao @ the peace offering of a Sidekick.

I kind of don't agree with Mikey in a way. I mean, I know no one is perfect- but I think if you are that deeply in love, then that person Is perfect; for you at least. I mean, it isn't a healthy to think that way I think, and maybe it is just the uber romantic in me to think something like that.

I also really really really hope Gerard reads the message before he notices that he and Ryan were found out; cause I would like hate to think he would think Ryan was doing it for publicity! >_< Yeah, I'm scared, you are going to torture them aren't you?

Great update!!!
I wanna be in this story >_>

oh...gee might be made now..about the videos and stuff being online...oo..

awesome update...

aww..they're fighting..again...
cant wait to read more!!

-Moves to pick jaw off of ground-

Dru took care of the fangirl part so I'll say this:

Omfg, that was freaking amazing! I was reading that bar scene and was like "Why does that sound like Dru?"...."It IS Dru!!!"
Ry must start taking better care of his Sidekick, but I feel quite sad for Gee, more soon?

Aww...you made Ryan such a bitch. I love the portrayal of Gerard in this chapter. Especially

"Welcome back to the insain part of your life. Did you ever really leave?"

And poor Ryan is freaking out about his Sidekick. I dunno why, but it made me laugh like crazy and it reminded me of my dad.

What!? It makes me so sad. Is it wrong of me to be angry with Ryan right now?

Besides my little fit, that was a really, really good chapter. I'm glad I caught it before I left.

Fangirl:

OMGZZZZ U UPDATEZZZ!!111
Pur Grard! Ryn is a doofu! whatz that drugonnna do!! OmGSZ
I Lve ur wiring, Updatz soon!
MREMREMRE.

*snort*
I did that too good, even for me XD

Yikes, major tension, anger and aggravation in this chapter. Ryan's just gonna beat himself up even more now cause he got drunk AND he lost his sidekick.

Poor Gerard, Ryan just hung up on him. Stop doing this, it's making me all nervous- talking about Exes! Ryan and Gerard are never going to be an Ex-anything. -crosses arms like 5 year old- So there, hmph.

LMFAO at Dru's guest appearance. I feel like an asshole pointing out that Druscilla's not the only Druscilla in the world and that they wouldn't actually be able to recognize her unless they were up on her mibba thing checking out her pictures.

If that's the case: Dru, you've made it big when rock stars are checking you out! But it was a good chapter. Funny and fun with the right amount of melancholy mushy goo goo.

I haven't been commenting for a while actually...=(

But I have to say, I've been loving this story and loved it even more when Gerard quoted BOBD.