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Woo! New chapter!

I did like the ending. It's making me chronically anxious.

I know all about those comment-driven ego-boosts. So here's another.

:O I'm so excited for an update..!

oh man, another amazing chapter. keep it up. [:

It took me way too long to read this last update, mostly due to being distracted by homework or my laptop being suicidal. But I'm here now, I guess.

So, of course, the chapter totally blew me away yet again. You're writing, which strikes me as so mature of someone of....well, however old you are. Damn that sounds rude, and condescending, especially as I'm pretty sure you're older than me. But what I mean is, Dude, you fucking rock. Point blank.

First off, the way the chapter started out, with the three rules...I found humorous how completely true it was, and how much it applied to myself. It's always good when you can relate yourself to a story.

...except for Curtis and Lee. The two were out working; Lee at the local blockbuster, and Curtis at a grocery store. If that sounds odd, they all actually had those duties except for the Sykes brothers (they were still fully financially supported by their parents).
- I actually found it really weird that Curtis and Lee both work. It's like I've been imagining the entire band as super heroes or something, the only life they have taking place during night at the club. A little surprising, but a nice touch of reality to put me back in my place (:

Never acting upon his observations; just keeping his eyes busy with fantasies. They say you violate someone in the worst way in your head. Kean imagined fucking her in dozens of scenarios and many positions in a second's time of her contagious smile or her apparel of a dress.
- Okay, so real life Matt to me seems like a borderline shy guy, who's pretty sweet and all that (of course I don't know him, but that's the impression I get.) But the Matt in this story sort of give me the creeps. I mean, not like I think he's going to stalk anyone, but his quiet watching...yeah, a little freaky. But in a good way, if that makes any sense.

"So yeh relleh banged 'er Olleh?"
He asked in amazement; as though the concept was stamped foreign on the intimate relationship, ironically.
- Such typical guy banter. I love it!

He placed the tray of sandwiches on the glass table and one by one, they all grabbed the ones that look like their own, even Kean, who's was even on wheat bread because it was his favorite. He looked at it strangely at first, then turned to Tom, who shrugged his shoulders and turned bashful again.

"You say you like wheat better than white bread, and we had some, so...yeah."
- Aww! If nobody marries Tom, I will! He's maybe my favourite character in this entire story, and I actually think this liking stemmed from the first chapter. He seems like a genuine good person, through and through.

It wasn't enough that Corey had completely intruded into their lives, got a tattoo matching his almost twin's, but now he was starting to talk like him?
- Oh my god. You're brilliant. Really, you are. Your ideas are amazing, and the things you write make me cringe, swoon, laugh and cry in all the right places!

"Either accept 'im or get the fuck out."
- The last line actually broke my heart a little. Oh, Matt.

I've said it before, and I'll say it again: I adore this in every way that a person can. I'm slightly sad that there are so few chapters to come, but I'm also very excited to see where this story ends and if my theory is correct!

It feels so masochistic to keep reading this fucking incredible piece of work... I just know it's getting closer to the end, or what happened in the beginning, whatever. :(

Write write write. :)

at the first paragraph I got the mental image of cavemans drinking tea but still talking in UGH und UH hahahaha, yeah i don#t know where that came from :D

OLiver is a fucking dick! seriously? he should have told them about her father catching them, but nooo he has to brag with sex that never actually happened, but then again, it's oliver we're talking about, he has to keep his reputation up...*sighs*

poor tom...he seems to be quite like the boys mother, always being careful and all, like he has to take care of them even if he's the younger boy...he' so cute *pinches his cheek* >.<
what's up with Kean in this chapter? something as to be other than being in a mood...
he seems off!...

Kean imagined fucking her in dozens of scenarios and many positions
......wow...okay I didn't expect this...but he hid it well becasue you never noticed something until now, well we still don't notice it someboy told us so...yeah

"Coreh's been teachin' meh. I did bloody good too."
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO wtf? fucking*@_+?##*+~ corey, and now this combined with me hating corey for being fucking suspicious and for oliver being a blind self-absorbed asshole who cant see that corey is not normal because he copied olivers tattoo and olivers appearence , he should SEE that corey is no good! wake up oliver! *shakes oliver*

Social vampires.
Again it's good to see that you describe how the boys live or are when their not at one of their shows, that they have an actual life, even though it's inside the hosue. I actually didn't suspect them to be 'social vampires' but it makes sense in a way, not everybody loves them...

Except, of course, Oli with Corey.
One would think that they were best friends, or Oli was just walking around with a mirror all the time. Although he would always take off, and the band never actually witnessed his twin anymore.
nonononono, why? I kind of tthink that corey is corrupting oliver when they're out alone, it's just an idea but I'm not sure, but i had to laugh at the mirror part!

He wanted to go back to the beginning when there was activities to engage in whenever he wanted and things were run by deranged powers.
I really like how we get a glimpse at nicholls thoughts and mind and his perspective of everything

No children outside on tricycles, or screaming in the sprinklers; they would probably freeze mid-air if they attempted something like that.
Another glimpse at the world in the story, it's kind of scary when you imaine it, but I didn't knew until now that the reality in the story is THAT much different than from the world now, but I like it loads, becasue it just add sto the dark side of the story, it explains why it is 'normal' in this world for oliver to get executed... :(

He didn't want his ass kicked, he just wanted to hang out with Oli. Then with his luck his biggest enemy was right there on the fucking porch.
*gets secong thoughts about corey*, maybe he's just...obsessed with oli...nononoNO I can't think like that He's evil! EVIL you hear me, EVIIIL!

Not this again, he thought miserably.
you know, with the thinks corey thinks or at least the glimpse we get at his thoughts makes him seem spineless and very much tom like, but then agai its only pert of his thoughts we don't know what he's thinking all the time and to add the smirk when nicholls got kicked out of the restaurant...no he's evil

The two looked like a couple of gay lovers, and Matt wouldn't be surprised if that was why his friend wanted to keep such a parasite. Because his girlfriend hadn't fucked him yet.
How does he know? Nicholls just kind of pushed oli from his place in my favourite person in this story race, just becasue he acts like a true friend, who DOES GIVE A FUCK not like the others, and becasue he's obseravant and sees that corey is nothing but shit!
GO NICHOLLS!


"Either accept 'im or get the fuck out." and oli whos the worst best mate ever just hit rock bottom on my scale, no wait that's corey, he's like a bit over corey just enough so the two can butt fuck...got since when is he such an asshole to his true, and best mate he's known for ages?

okay I think that either corey will be the cause of olivers death or then again I think it will be eveyn's father...or she just thinks its her father when nicholls maybe leaves the hosue and accidently gets drunk and tells some random person everything...
yeah I kind of think that nicholls will be involved, I think he'll leave the hosue but I don't think that this was the last time we heard from him, becasue, I just got a feeling...

and I'm always somewhat sad when a story is about to finish, becasue when I really like a story I just want it to never end, becasue I get spazz attackswhen the story update notification in my email account pop up and all...its just sad to see it go...but don#T delete the story please! I read old stories rom time to time... :D

yeah great update AGAIN as always :D

Basically, her dad needs to get the fuck out of her life.
Shouldn't he be happy that she's happy? I thought that was like... what parents strive for - their kids to be healthy and happy, and not so damn antisocial like she was pre Oli.
Whatever. He's a douche.

"You know who's house you're in?"
NO asswipe. Please clarify.

I'm so glad that Oli did something though. I think that by even going near her house again, much less blasting music that her father obviously couldn't stand, took massive balls and only if he actually went ape shit on the dude could it have been any better.

I feel like although he fucked up and pretty much started the battle of all battle's against her pops it's gonna be good in a way. Well... I sort of know the ending, so I can try to piece it together as best I can and make sense of it - but although shit hits the fan and messing with the big boys will get Oliver in a hell of alot of trouble it's all in the principle.

He's not gonna just sit down and obey bullshit orders.
Her dad should be fucking proud that she's got such a passionate boyfriend. Dammit.

<3 I wuv the updates. [: Keep em comen!

I just finished reading this story up to the current chapter, and I must say, it is fucking AMAZING!
Keep up the good work and update soon!

BORING!? naaah, it was just more like a break from all of the major events that happned, but still exiting because before I read the chapter I was getting all hyper thinking :'Oh shit, this going to be the end, oli's going to be arrested nooooooo' but thankfully that didn't happen, so I was/am kinda relieved :D
anyways my comment:
"takes two to tango"
aah here we see how much her father has been missing of her life and how much he missed of his daughter growing up becasue she's 24 and he can't seriously think that she's stil a innocent little girl

"Get up," he uttered with shame and still grabbed her by the upper arm even though she was rising.
It's quite funny how her father can feel shame when he was the one who rudely interrupted this scenario, when every other parent woud have just walked out. Here we kind of see the man who doesn't know much about education or his CHILDREN, becasue he's to sorbed up in his work!

Evelyn was timid in her small ounces of rebellion towards him or even, god forbid, Carolyne.
I like how you put in this little sentences reminding of us characters or better from evelyn's living situation, how she has no freedom, and is treated like a toddler.

Hell, that was why Oli liked her.
He liked her sassy attitude in the van the first time, but also got to see her real unsure side in the stairwell on their way to his own show.
It's great how the reader sees two sides of of Evelyn's. First of all the 'inside the house Evelyn' where she can't stand up to her father (except for later :D) and than the evelyn that oliver and the boys know, the 'wild evelyn' except for a few times where she's a bit shy or unsure, you know what I mean ? :D

That wasn't the main point for Oli though, for it did essentially matter how many times they were together, but really, his main objective was for Evelyn to stand up for herself.
ANd here we see hhow different the couple is, oliver says what he thinks to whomever he wants even if it were his ownparents, and then evely who is stuck being the little girl she was in her athers eyes and doesn't have the guty to say something. I feel somewhat bad for her :(

He just wanted Evelyn to gain that courage and strike down all the restrictions that should have been prohibited in her twenties and beyond. He couldn't understand that his small-time preaching of this had hurt her feelings; had her experiencing inferiority, and even slight jealousy. It was just so easy for him considering his naturally rebellious streak.
I love the way your write, your chosse of words especially! it's not the simple english but indeed it sounds classy and how it would sound if someone wrote a good book not like Twlilight but good in the choose of words! But then there is a good mixture of words that people oliver&co's age would use which kind of fresh the story up like here:
He could dictate all of his citizen's rights through bullshit laws and regulations, but still baring that governmental crown on his parental skull was something completely unethical.
-> oh and even though this is written in the 3rd person's point of view, there is still shining an attitude through, which is great, since the speaking person doesn't seem neutral, but on evelyn's side...somewhat

He hadn't see his daughter in so long and it was beginning to effect his work days. He never intended for their lives to drift apart so distantly; the office had swallowed him more quickly and worse than he thought it would.
woow he finally sees that!? great a little late though and definately at the wrong time...

It all came rushing back in her head: the feelings that she was always in the wrong and deeply sorry.
So, so sorry.
That's a typical reaction of what childs do when their parants are angry about something or when they THINK the're parents are angry ( because I remember doing this xD) but evekyn shouldn't be doing this, she's an adult for fucks sake! that just proves how much control her father has over her...

"Do you have anything to say about this?"
What the fuck is there to say about this!? Oo

It was Oli's anger getting the better of him, it seemed, and when that happens to anyone it is guaranteed that something stupid will ensue. So he tells his girlfriend's father to go fuck himself.
Tells the man to fuck himself.
aaarrgh, fucking brillaint oliver cheers! I'm kind of torn about olivers attitude in this one right now, on one side I'm seriously cheering and laughing and encouraging him and then on the other side I just want to slap him hard! seriously...*shakes head*
but then again it's oliver he doesn't care, he does what he wants, always!

and then in the end it's sad how oliver knows that he is n competition compared to her father but at the same time evelyn is actually standing up for her own and oliver. BUt it's sad that he's so sure about his girlfriend not picking his side, when he sidobeyed her fathers rule AND laws over the past week by sneaking out and hanging with the boys and listening to music!
I'm disappointed in Oliver, in a way becasue he's somewhat just thinking of himself and his fucking anger! he could've controlled himself just ONCE, once in his whole life, but no, he didn't instead he pissed the governor and father of his girlfriend of, who then threatens to arrest him

and we all know how it ends...god I don't even want to think about that :(

you know, on friday night I wrote this long ass comment on the first chapter including the summary, it tok me an whole hour to write it because it was first of all really long and I tried to observe as much as possible, becasue that's the best chapter that has ever been written (in my opinion)
but then when I submitted it, I didn#t realized that I was looged of mibba and I logged in again but the comment was gone, I was SO pissed, it was one o'clock in the morning and it was all for nothing >:O but I swear I'm gonna write a new one!

How can you say you disliked that chapter, when I enjoyed it so much? It flowed perfectly from the previous post and felt very real. I was expecting Evelyn to be all hard-ass and start yelling at her dad right away, because that's what I'm used to seeing in Fan Fiction - it's not necessarily a bad thing, but it get boring when the main character is always some hardcore little punk, who's drop dead gorgeous with everything she wants.

She shrunk back and became scared when he father confronted her - just like anyone would do. No matter how kind hearted, loving and easy going someone's father could be, most people lose their bottle when they anger their dad. A father figure, when dishing out the discipline, is not one to be reckoned with - usually.

I found it sort of intriguing that Evelyn reacts the same way I do - a sixteen year old as opposed to a twenty-four year old - when she's, for lack of a better term, getting told off.

Evelyn seems to have about a million dimensions - again, not a bad thing. In fact, a very, very good thing. I love reading about her, and finding all these different traits. Like how, depending on what situation she's in, her attitude and level of confidence wavers.

Like with Carolyne, she may have to bite her tongue, but she's very quick-witted and bitchy (not that I'm complaining, I'd love to see Evelyn get one over on Carolyne). With her father, she seems very reclusive, weak and not herself at all. But with Oli, she opens up and becomes someone who pretty hard to dislike.

To shorten my essay that was totally uncalled for: I like Evelyn, quite a lot.

The phrase "takes two to tango" had been missing from his thoughts...
- It seems fictional parents share the same thesis when it comes to their children as mine do. Eh.

Out of his wits, Evelyn's father roared for Oli to get out of his house before he called the cops, and the petrified young man, hovering above his girlfriend, remained for a brief moment before he scrambled towards the back door and slammed it shut. He left Evelyn and surrounded by her cotton and feathers, and had the unwanted privilege to listen to him pull up his pants with her dad listening; dangerous and outraged.
- This whole paragraph made me laugh and cringe from embarrassment at the same time. Loved it!

...his claws bending tightly around the flesh
- Oooh, I just adore how graphic the slightly gory parts in this story are!

He didn't have to be dependent on them as much as he used to, and that liberation tasted fucking delicious.
- The way you express things, and the attitude you have in your writing...it just blows my mind. Like, seriously, how do you do it? You have a really great writing style, it's so distinguished and...just brilliant.

A corporate clone.
An unjust maker.
The man.
- Just really loved this part.

So he tells his girlfriend's father to go fuck himself.

Tells the man[b/] to fuck himself.
- One half of me was like, "Whoo! Go Oli, telling that prick to fuck himself!". The other half was stood on the sidelines, palm to face and shaking it's head, muttering, "Oh, Oliver...stupid boy." So basically, Oli's in the shit.

I could quote more, and write a ton more, but by the time you've gotten to this point, you'd be bored of what I have to say. Thank you for updating, and writing yet another amazing and inspiring chapter. I loved it, as always.

Oh man.
How could she have refused something so life-saving?

That line. It hit me pretty hard. To me, I see so much of that line as meaning to take advantage of the moment and live. Taking risks makes you feel alive, I think many people can atest to that. It's the rush of being caught and probably almost getting caught that keeps you coming back for more, just because it's hard to keep that feeling going after the adventure is over. So I can of course see why Evelyn sneaks around without telling her father. That, and the complete and total fear she has of him. I definitely hope that next, she can grow some balls and stand up for the woman that she is.
A move out, perhaps?
For now, I do not know. But I really don't like her father, as I have previously mentioned.

Yet again, great job bro. :]

Christ.
HOW long have I been meaning to drop this comment now? I apologize my friend, because I was supposed to do this right after I read the update!
Well now. We ALMOST get something going between the two. But not quite of course, because neither life nor fiction tends to work that way. Somehow though, when it does happen seamlessly and coreographed with no interruptions, it doesn't feel as good as it should. Just like how good it will feel when they finally end up getting it on... whenever that may be.
So not feeling her dad right now though. Talk about a cockblocker! Hah... and he didn't even have to try. BUT, I am more than anxious now about what's gonna go down next chapter. Something big, I hope.
Surely there has NEVER been another time that Evelyn has gotten caught, with a boy, half naked, in her room at night. Ohhh man.
The suspense. It kills.

man, i haven't been on here in a long time...
and this story has gotten so much more amazing
seriously, your one of the best writers on here
you work amazes me

I wasn't even finished with that commen but it's fucking LONG! soory if most of it are quotes though :)
so I'll continue giving some pointless comments xD
Her clammy hand would finally smack the glass
that reminds me of a certain movie...*cough*titanic :D

seriously Olivers thoughts about him fucking evelyn are hilarious, it reminds me of a hormone driven teenager xD
even though the graveyard thing IS creepy, as well as his parents bedroom, he seriously needs it BAD

just stared at his Evelyn that was sweet *O* and from there it goes like from fucking each others brains out to adorable sweet ...foreplay? I don't know :D
"You're everything to me, beautiful." *_____________________________*
I think I quote way too much on this chapter...
that just showed olivers intelligent, poet-ish side, as a songwriter and musician

...did she just say that she's glad that she SHAVED? °.°...seriously? that's hilarious x'D
.....and now I read the authors note....xDDDDDDD

*hyperventilates* shit...fuck shitttt...run oliver RUUUUUN
her father, who is the GOVERNOR...shit he's...he...walked in on them...run oliver you'll die!! *panics*

I really hope that this is NOT the reason that oliver will die, because then I'm going to blame evely and will haunt her fiction character forever!
T.T

and I think that I'm gonna write a better review/comment on the first chapter, because it was the chapter that made me want to read the end of the story SO badly, to find out the reason for olivers dead...but also because that chapter was so unbelievably sad, I've never read anything close as sad as this, and at the time I read that I didn#T really write good comments I still don't only on this story because this is my favourite ever, and it deserves it for the that it has one of the most unique fan fiction stories I've read, and yeah but not now, some other tikme :)

again, I'm commenting while reading the story so...yeah here it goes :D
some things may be pointless but I'll just write down what I think when it comes to certains lines xD

He found humor in the fact that she was 24 years old and still afraid to do what she pleased.
I like how you kind of show the reader, that, even though evelyn has spent so much time with the boys, she's still evelyn in some way and totally different than the boys in so many ways, she's 24 and afraid of getting caught when oli just do whatever he wants, it just shows the different backgrounds their coming from, at least that's what I think :D

she was sure that she had never seen them not drunk.
sad, but certainly true xD not that I'd mind, they were drunk in like...every chapter :D

It all depended on the individual: Curtis couldn't hold his alcohol to save his life. Always saying something off the wall; attempting something stupid; always something.
[...]Kean and Lee were pretty leveled for the next placing, needing a little more alcohol than their other two companions who seemed to get buzzed off of water. They didn't act as outrageous either, just hazy eyed and late on their responses. They were the kind of drunks to suffer from temporary retardation when having too much to drink.

I didn't want to cpoy all the description because that would've been too much so the three dots are for the missing ones :D
I absolutely LOVE how you describe each of their characters when being drunk, just to remind the reader of what happened and give the reader a closer view into their characters. also it just proves that they were drunk in basically every chapter, because that was just how they acted xD

Which only left Oli.

I had to smile during the whole paragraph about oliver, seriously he just makes me smile in this story
in this paragraph you showed not the jackass oli he is when he's on stage or so no it shows the oliver that is sweet and caring forhis girlfriend, he has like two sides the fuck-me-I'm-a-rockstar side and the adorable side that makes everyone go awwwwww how sweet :)

and then...tom *sighs*
it seems as if he's not...I don't know really PART of the group in a way, sure they all care for him and he's like their brother (okay he really IS olivers brother but you know what I mean :D), but I think that's the problem, he's like their yonger brother when all the others are the same age, which makes him kind of stand out from the group
he kind of is like the child in the group always quiet and afraid of the 'grown ups' or something
I don't wanna say that they don't want him in the group but it' sjust...he's outstanding, and in some ways just not a part of the group. period (I'm gonna stop writong about tom because I could keep going for ages just trying to prove my point :D)

okay...that was before I read THIS
In the past couple of weeks, however, after that faithful day in the restaurant, it looked as though he were trying to turn things around. As though heart-fully, genuinely, to become a bigger part of the group. He made more facial expressions towards the activity revolving around him, laughed every time someone said something funny instead of holding it in.
I was like wtf? what happened to my poor little tommy-tom-tom ? *O* <- I just made that nick name up it sounded cute :))
what made him change? was it cock-orey and his stupid behaviour? I can't see what he wants to reach with it but I'll see :)
BUT he's still a kid somewhere, in his heart, which proves this line HA!
He liked that very much, even if it embarrassed the hell out of him.
(yeah I want to prove that the long part about tom that I wrote before wasn't totally unnecessary)
only kids laugh when adults laugh about threr jokes or when they're in the spotlight...okay many people get shiy in spotlight but we're talking abou TOM herre :D

It was completely unexpected to show up like that unannounced, but she couldn't say that she didn't like it.
that's olicer for you, being totally random :D


His appearance was normal for this bizarre occurrence; clad in a black hoodie, black skinny jeans, and black vans. He looked like a scene ninja, ready to kick some posers' asses, and not to do something so casual as visiting his girlfriend.
...BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHahahahahahahahahahaahahahaha
.........................................................................<-rolls around the room laughing at the image x'D

He moved his chin to the top of her head; looking out at the sky.

There were hardly any stars because they were close to the city, but in the other direction behind him were even more; only Evelyn able to see them from past his neck where her nose barely touched. She didn't want to look at that universe though; it would be there until the end of time, but the man who held her so close wouldn't. yes therer are tears brimming in my eyes *sniffes* *thinks of the first chapter*
god, that was great, the whole thing with the universe could make me bawl, seriously, it describes teir relationship perfectly, sad, but true :(

The tips of his fingers clasped her protruding skin as she continued to leave her lips there; sucking a bit.
so there is obviously a certain awkwardness between the both of them, seeing as they get barely time alone, and this just proves it :)

"...Already Oli?"
hahahahahaaa, it's good that after the more serious part you wrote THIS because...it just cracks me up...seriously xD

Fuck her right there in front of all his friends and fans.
oh no, poor sex deprived oli xDD

Oh my christ.
THIS
STORY.

"People can't fucking glow."
Love it. :D

WHAT THE HELL!?
Her dad ruined my life.
Just ruined it.
I wanted them to do the nasty already... xD

I'll try not to quote the entire chapter, although it's pretty worthy.

His bottom lip was jutted out with, oddly and very brutally, slivers of glass dug halfway through. Kean, Lee, and Tom uttered their shocked disgusts to this cruel incident, trying to fathom the pain he would experience as he savaged through his lip to get them out.

The crystallized, microscopic particles that would scrape the sensitive nerves. The iron-laced blood gushing from his mouth; dribbling down his scrapped chin. His entire face aching in a tremendously excruciating intrusion of its insides.
The squeezing. The prodding.
This was so graphic and made me cringe - in the right way. I've read so many attempts at something like this, gore, blood, horror or whatever. Never really works for me, I'm more of a visual person. But this...oh man, made my toes curl just imagining. Very well written.

He stared at his potential murderer, who looked him over in repulsion and shock as if to say "what the fuck are you looking at, you sod?", and he instantly tore his unlucky eyes away.
Another one of your lines that made me laugh. Damn, you're witty.

Lee knew off the bat that it was the right logic, but he couldn't shake the feeling of despise. He was one of those individuals that were born with a thick enough skull that deflected any incoming philosophy or reason.
This is a really interesting characteristic to give to Lee. Very original, I love how diverse and real your characters are. They have such depth - I love it!

No one was hungry anymore.
Lunch time was over.

...Maybe Nicholls wasn't so out of line.
All I can say to this is: Oh, shit.

I think I have a slight inkling of where this is going, and if my theory is correct then I think it's genius. If not, then I'm totally bewildered to what could be going on.

It's so beautifully written, every aspect of it is just...like, my idea of a perfect fan fiction, to the T. It has a great band starring, a captivating love story, the most incredible plot. I mean, who else would start an Oliver Sykes story with killing him off in the first chapter? It's brilliant. Truly.

And there's parts that are just like poetry. I can't even fathom it.

I'm genuinely excited for more (:

If you changed Oliver's name(I mean, made it so it wasn't a fan fic-- not that it isn't great now!) I would honestly buy this from book stores. I would pay the 25$ for hard back first edition copy!!! This is amazing!!!

This is fantastic. update please.

Bro. So amazing. I don't possess half of your commenting skills, but I will try. As much as I can for how little brain power I have at the moment.

Part of me wants to slap Oliver. I believe it is not only Lee who was born with the undeniably thick skull, but also Oliver. Definitely Oliver. It seems like they were making progress, evaluating Corey right in front of him, the final words on whether he would say or not happening then and there. Of course, leave it to Curtis to cause a distraction, without knowing it of course. But I think Corey deserved it, what with the spotlight on him all of a sudden.

Bitch deserved it though. That tattoo wasn't a good move. I can tell already. Part of me wonders what Nicholls would have done if he was still allowed in the restaurant. Bet he would have flipped, because I kind of did, and the characters all kind of did.

I hope this is the end for Corey. He's just annoying me at this point, really. I think he's getting in the way. He's ruining the relationship between most of the boys and Oliver.

But this was amazing, as always.