Well, my love, you can certainly write (as if you didn't already know that). That was truly wonderful and I read it over twice - just because I liked it so much! You put some serious feelings into writing that, and that's a good thing because it just makes your characters seem more real.
He won’t know that she is swimming in his gut and has been absorbed into his bloodstream.
That seriously made my mouth drop and go, "Oh, snap!" It was so flawless and amazingly presented. I mean...I don't even know what to say! I loved how you used all those words to describe what was happening, how she was feeling, and what was going through her head (which was quite a lot and all very interesting :tehe:). You couldn't have done a better job.
The small replica of the both of them is now traveling through dirty, rat infested pipelines underground.
Another example of why I like your writing style: it's so real, it's almost frightening. :yah
He won’t know that she is swimming in his gut and has been absorbed into his bloodstream.
That seriously made my mouth drop and go, "Oh, snap!" It was so flawless and amazingly presented. I mean...I don't even know what to say! I loved how you used all those words to describe what was happening, how she was feeling, and what was going through her head (which was quite a lot and all very interesting :tehe:). You couldn't have done a better job.
The small replica of the both of them is now traveling through dirty, rat infested pipelines underground.
Another example of why I like your writing style: it's so real, it's almost frightening. :yah
In other words, awesome-fantastic-superb job.
P.S. Good luck with the contest!