this story is soooo cool but chapter 3 kind of creeped me out with the parents watching. i understand though and you should wright more. pleeeaaaaassssseeee write more when you have the time.
I'm sorry I'm taking forever to post, but I've gotten married and pregnate since starting this story, I also don't have much access to internet right now. I'm working to remedy that but we'll see. Thank you SOOOO much for reading!
This is incredibly good! I love your twist on the typical arranged marriages, it's really spectacular. It's a really great plot, and I love every aspect of this. With them being thirteen it's a little weird for me to comprehend, but I'm getting used to it- I guess I have to adjust, in a way. I like the way you have a background story for everything, it's much, much better that way. Some people just make these obscure twists in their stories, and it makes no sense at all, and is altogether unprofessional. With you, that is not the case. I'm subscribing, so I hope you update soon.
I'm sorry it's taking me forever to write more, I dropped out of college and got a job, a finacee, 2 dogs... Well for now we have 8 puppies, and 6 of them are bottle babies and I don't have internet, so it's kinda hard for me. I'm really sorry. Also I am working on getting one of my other stories published!!!! YAY! So, Seeing as I'm planning to publish under the name Lori Angel, Look for my novels in stores... Not right away, but I'll let you know KK? Any way I'll try to write a bit on this one today. K? Love you all. Thank you SOOO MUCH for reading!
I will try right now I don't have regular access to internet, and I don't have the story saved to my comp. but I'm going to do that now. I'm also working on several stories at once.
Yeah, sorry about that I have a crazy mind. Also sorry it's been so long since I posted anything. I've been haveing issues latly and before that I didn't feel like writting. I ended up in bad relationship and now I'm using that for some inspiration.. prolly not on this story but still.. And I won't be posting much because since school's out for me I won't have internet. I'll try to go to the Library and other places for WIFI if I can but other wise I'm out of luck but I will still be writting.
You should proof read all your chapter and make them better. I understand that if you do that the chapter might not turn out as you oroginally wanted it to be. But, if you do make those changes you are making it better. Isnt that what every writer does? with each little change you make your writing even better than before! Again, good chapter. Maybe make it a bit longer. Good luck! keep writing.
Thank you all! The reason the parents watched was because they are so young and since they're nyphms they have to have sex to survive so their parents watched so they could help out if nessacary and make sure they did it right so they would survive. Sorry to freak you out. It would be really gross if parents watched us on our wedding night.. EWWW.. But that's my reason. Thank you all. Love, Ang Aka; BlueEyedAngel2
Hahaha loooved the update :D But it kinda freaked me out that their parents WATCHED!!! I was like "AAAHHH!" lol. That creeped me out lol. But awesome nonetheless :P