A Shot in the Dark - Comments

Wow, I really didn't see the ending coming.
Your description is very good, very detailed.
The atmosphere and attitude through out was powerful, really making the emotion strong.
It's well-written and a lovely piece of work, darling.

Kimmeh!
This is really good. :cheese:
I loved how suspenseful the beginning was,
and how sad it got later on.
It honestly moved me,
as cheesy as that sounds. :tehe:
Amazingly well-written by the way.

Well, what else can I say when others have said the main things I was going to say?
This was the most beautiful one shot I've ever read. I'm proud to know that this one shot comes from you, the most awesomest professional-like author I know :tehe:

It starts out with a clouded atmosphere, but as you read, it gets interesting. Suspense builds when he knocks on the door and proceeds further in opening it. Produces foreshadow at the moment as well! And shockness when she is claimed to have killed herself. The 9-1 thing was pretty unique :D Stopping in mid-dialing as the character changes his mind in his actions, clever Meeka :D :) :D ::clapp: And for the most part, the ending. It was so precious! *tear drop* It reminds me of Romeo and Juliet, if you ask me. Except the girl kills herself before the guy when in Romeo and Juliet it was the guy then the girl. You know, you should make more one shots (and update your other story too) :D :D ~~ :D ~~
I like your vocabulary by the way ^u^

xoXO
zilly

That was great Kim! :arms:
The length was perfect and the way you described the last part was just so intense, you could really tell that there was more to the both of them and how people in real life thing sometimes and things like this happen.
I really loved it and I agree you should write more, because your writing is great and we need more of it.

Shitty comment.

AHA.
I MAY NOT HAVE TAKEN YOUR ONESHOT COMMENT VIRGINITY BUT I AM MAKING YOU MY ONE-SHOT SLUT. :twisted:
:cute: Kidding, kidding.

I like this, for a short piece.
It was like... it flowed well, naturally and then bang. It all kind of stops in a big crash that isn't really expected.
We kinda know everything without really knowing anything at all. When you know, you just kind of expected all of us, the readers, to know what's going pn, when infact we don't, so we kind of have to think of the background and everything ourselfes. Especially about their relationship. Okay, so we know they're like bffls or something, but by the way he reacted and dealed with it tells us something else.

And about the 911 thing. Oh my God, I love that part. So fucking clever of you. I hate you. No, kidding, I love you.

This is a shitty comment!
Yes it is!
I'm sorry.
:arms:
I like this, you liar. :hand: You know how to write. :con:
And you should do things like this more often.

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FIRST COMMENT!
WHOO!
I am taking your one-shot comment virginity. :file:
schweet. :weird

:tehe:
okay. now for the commentingggg.

I reallyreally liked this.
It was a little sad, but it was very well-written.

Hopefully keeping the pouring rain, insane neighbors, and dreary February in general out,
The bit about the insane neighbors made me giggle. :tehe: I'm going to assume the character doesn't like Februaries (I think that's the plural form of it. :weird :tehe:), I'm going to admit I could totally relate to the dreary February part because honestly I don't like February either.

I like how in the beginning how something so small like his roommate not answering him when he says he is home is so significant to him. To me, it shows how good the relationship between them is; they can tell something is wrong right away from a small detail like that.

I also liked how he described his job. :tehe: I found it funny.

With a her light glimmering in on the gun and no more in her eyes, I stood there in complete shock.
There's something about this line that just..gah. I dunno. It really paints a picture in my mind and there's something about the way you described it that makes this sentence stand out to me.
..hopefully that made sense. :shifty

The blood soaked on her favorite sweater was enough to make even a callous villain double over in disgust.
You know how big I am on horror flicks and the crazy shit that goes on the horror movies I watch so this is just descriptive, to me at least, in the perfect way. I honestly paused and cringed at the picture I got in my mind.

Also, I think it's really smart how you left off the last 1 in 911. I thought it was a typo but when you told me it was meant to be that way it makes sense, and I think that was a good idea, to show he really didn't want to go through with it and his hesitation in calling.

My last sight was of her and really that's all that mattered in the end.
That sentence just..omgno::cheese:

This was great, Kim.
I really liked it, and if it were any longer or shorter it wouldn't be right. It's perfect the way it is.
I can't wait to read more stuff from you!
Post more, yes? :weird
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