June 11th, 2009 at 05:01am
Chapter four.
I knew there was something up with Daphne, and I did not enjoy reading about her, in the first place. Too icky sweet for my tastes, not a character I enjoy, but her side gave you a bit more insight to Natalie and the story, so I stomahced her niceness and read on.
There seems to be more to Phillips than I thought, so that's good at least. And Natalie, Natalie. Getting defensive about the boyfriend/girlfriend subject, eh? Hm, maybe I am not like her, but I suppose fronts make you think you're getting along with someone, depending on where you are when you meet them.
I like Natalie's last name. It reminds me of the chocolates that people give out during Valentine's Day. I have a character named Natalie and it gets me slightly confused on which one I am reading about-- which is good, I am into the story.
Next chapter.
So. Natalie is emotional about getting a bad grade-- hell. Been ther edone that with my parents, I cried every so often until a turning point in my life, which is when I do not care anymore, and ignore the screams. But I know how she feels. I know how she feels.
Phillips seems nice enough, better than that Daphne chick. I know what you're trying to convey with Daphne, but. I don't like icky sweet people, they just piss me off, period. I'll edit this when I have read more.
Things seem to be heating up, which is good, I finally got to the part that you took out of your story, the "I'm not gay!" part, and it made sense now and things are getiing better.
Still don't like Daphne, and Ella, I like. She's a different kind of girl I never really see in teenage books like these (not that I read many of them, for that matter) I hope you update soon, I'd like to read more.
I got disappointed when there was no chapter eleven.