Roll Call/Yellow Bird - Comments

Wow. That was really good. Really, really good.

It just seemed to make ... sense

I found this when I was doing my periodic searches of myself and found your confession.

This is not really a review, but I needed to say it.

This reads like... poetry and a song at the same time. As I was reading I could actually hear music and a beat and a rhythm in my head to fit the words. It was beautiful. This reminded me a lot of Ryan's writing actually. It was very... organic and still... it contained a lot of references and metaphors to more... artificial things.

It made me think of woodwork and conceptual photographs and people clapping their hands while singing a song acapella. It's beautiful, truly.

Whoa.

That's a real...its, well, for one thing that piece is very hard to describe. I like the whole chain of events bit. And Alice and Lady Lazarus. This phrase was especially cool: eyes like hurricanes.

I liked the acoustic guitar bit the best, maybe because I was just playing mine for the last ten minutes. But I liked that question, Does it sing?. It was a good question. And then the answer comes in bird form, which is even cooler because birds sing.

The piece is more philosophical than the title would suggest, in a rambling thoughts kind of way. I actually expected something happy, I don't know why. Yellow is a happy color to me. Maybe that's why the tone is all the more fitting, actually. I wouldn't call it sombre or melancholy.

Interesting, maybe? Okay, I don't know. But the last line is...wow. It's something that stays with the reader. I really like this.

Good job. =D

(and I'm sorry this review isn't longer or better, but this is an unusual piece and wasn't sure how to go about it. But unusual in a good way.)

That's freaking awesome. :lmfao

I love its whimsy.