Sinister Smile With a Hole in My Heart - Comments

I also miss this a lot. Like, heaps. Your stories are definitely the best on here.

just read this whole story! i love it!!!!

this story is amazing, it has so many different ways it could turn, and so many unexpected twists! The characters are so origional, completely non-typical like some stories on this site :) POST soon!!!

Alright, I know I am forever late, but oh my god! this chapter <3
All I can say is, it's shitty that even though both Alex and Michelle regret what they drunkenly did (which is a marvellous thing, because it's only made them realise that they belong with Jill and Zack, respectively) they still have to cop the consequence of it, which has fucked up things all over again with Alex and Jill, when he was going so well with being responsible and more mature for dear Drew and Jilly was slowly letting her walls down to let him in. I imagine it is also going to fuck shit up with Zack and Michelle even more when he finds out. Let's just hope that Michelle decides to be honest with him so if they start their relationship again it's not going to start on lies... no matter how inconvenient the truth will be for Zacky, he needs to know.

I loved the whole little family moment thing when Alex was mucking around with Drew and Jill was being over protective, it was the cutest and I literally smiled. hahahaha/

'“Ok, so you wouldn’t mind if I went into your room now then?” she questioned partially teasing inching towards the closed bedroom door. But she was also angry that he was lying to her, she’d thought they were past that.'

THAT ^ is when I knew that shit was going to go down, and when my eyes went wide and i was like
'HOOOOOOOOO SHIT!' hahahhahaha. but as per usual the intensity was BRILLIANT, although I really DID NOT LIKE the outcome, but it was one that was close to reality, which is what I love about your stories, and I have the advantage of knowing I'm going to have to wait till the sequel for things to go the way I wish haha.

Okay, now the whole Jack/Kate situation was next, and you made me all teary and 'aww' :( whilst being left with intense feelings about what was going to happen with Jill/Alex/Michelle. Now here's the thing, I wanted to give Jack a massssssssive hug, and I think there should be a new character in this story called Jade, whom becomes his best friend when Kate is in rehab and he's all devastated so he can be cheered up, and then Jade should meet Zack and fuck shit up with him and Michelle, because I reckon I could take her on if this was real life hahahahha. But I'll settle with Rian :):) hahahahha I'm kidding, that's all a joke, but yes, I was so happy that Kate was okay no matter how much I hated her last few chapters for screwing Jack over and putting him in danger in Seattle, taking his mother's pills, lying to him about zeeee drugs, etcetc hahaha.

'Alex stared at Jill staring at Michelle staring at Jill.'
^ I laughed mentally at that although I was so eager to read on it didn't have time to be voiced hahah.

'The baby boy was a spitting image of his father. The chocolate hair, the chocolate eyes, the nose, the mouth. Everything about his appearance screamed Alex.' FINALLY someone NOTICED! hahah :)
Although everyone is finding out in shitty ways, and I have a feeling Michelle won't be able to keep the secret during the next chapter, I'm actually kind of excited that slowly but surely the secret of Alex being Drew's father is going to not be a secret anymore, even though problems with Alex and Jack will likely arise for a while, I just can't wait for PedoFreakAlexWill to find out and get his fucking ego cut down. 'Jill is mine blah blah blah you don't stand a chance.' NO! stfu you insecure piece of shit, Jill is Alex's. hahahhaha repeating last chapter's rant, but oh well haha.

'Yes, she was jealous, she wouldn’t admit that out loud feeling unable to' YEWWWW! hahaha, you don't know how excited I was... next step... ADMIT IT hahhahahha
I have to say I enjoyed Michelle trying to stick up for Alex and herself after Jill's first criticism of them both, because Jill indeed did turn down Alex's proposal, and she should be reminded that... although it doesn't really make a difference that Alex was sleeping with her cousin... that is kind of dementedly screwed up, because that's like his kid's cousin :| hahaha.
But then she really needed to shut up with the whole 'broke things off thing'... janfdwowkmflwefncw hahah

In saying that about Michelle, Jill's rant really summed it all up, with everything she was and is feeling ravelled into one. Maybe now Alex will understand why she doesn't want to just jump straight into things with him... he did after all hurt her and even Drew when they both... or technically seeing as Drew wasn't born yet, she, neededed him the most.

holy shit Kay, Jill better not get into an accident or anything drastic,'kqqpuqe[rdf
CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT UPDATE <3

ps; Rian's absence is getting to me, because I know he knows the secret... hahah

Looooove the update :)

the newest chapter was formatted weird it was aligned to the right which made it kind of hard to read and yes you use paragraph but you dont use spacing

awwww, that last chapter was fricking awesome
it was soo sad, and kate better not dieee
i like her too much
but wow, things just got a whole lot harder
oh and alex/michelle are idiots

update soon, yeah (:

OH MY GOD
OH MY GOD
OH MY GOD
SHIT HAS HIT THE FAN
OH MY GOD!
HAHAHAHA

HOLY SHIT!
I have no idea where to begin. That was intense! LIKE WOW
hahaa
The first bit with Jack and his mommy was adorable haha, and sad :( But it ended up being the cutest <3
And then Michelle and Zack, I'm so glad that she wasn't like "Did Rian or Alex tell you?" Because that's what I predicted was going to happen and then that would have casued drama with Zack and Rian and I think that might have been a little TOO much drama for this chapter as my heart feels like it is currently stuck in my throat from the intensity of this story hahaha
AND THEN GAH! I could kill Jill. Well no, not really, I couldn't, because she's just a character, but GOD she's such a fail going after Will and not even giving Alex a chance to explain. I know it's a difficult situation that she's in but she should be at least a little concerned about working on her relationship with Alex G (bahaha, it sounds like a gangsta name, but i didn't want to confuse yourself or myself haha) and trying to see if she could make something work. She has more to consider than just herself, she should consider Drew!
And Alex/Will is just a lame asshole, and i literally laughed at the bit where Alex was all 'Who was this little boy, in his apartment, ' HAHA, little boy. And Alex/Will should just, again, chime the fuck out with his little 'territorial' claims over Jill, and being all 'you and jill are never going to work because I'm amazing'
BECAUSE NO! YOU ARE INCORRECT ALEX/WILL. YOU'RE A FREAKING LOSER! hahah
and now, as a consequence of Jill's stupidity, Alex has gone and gotten drunk and Michelle of course is going to combine THEIR stupidity and they're going to fuck and now it's going to start all over again from the beginning! And Zack will be hurt :( But I sure as hope that Jill doesn't get all 'no Alex, you're a slut, you screwed my cousin when you have a kid with me!'
Because do you know what? She quite clearly rejected him and made HIM feel like shit, and she doesn't get to choose when the fact that they are Drew's parents come into play. Him and Michelle are the exact same as her and Alex/will, only Michelle is Jill's teenage cousin, which would be the only argument I think would be worthy to work on Jill's behalf if she finds out.
BUT shit is going to hit the fan when Jack finds out about Michelle and Alex if he also finds out about the baby, which i think will happen quite soon, because Rian was MIA from this chapter, and I can tell he's about to spill some secrets!
And on the topic of Jack;
MY POOR BABY! :(:( hahahhahahha
If anything happens to Kate he's going to blame himself :( and soon he'll be the one on anti-depressants and I will be incredibly upset :(

AHHHHH why must your stories be so amazing?

-RANT COMPLETE-

hahah <3

ps; 'so jacky boy, her brother, my best friend-I love that kid-' BAHAHAHHA i laughed :):)

i see that watching finding nemo yesterday ispired a little part loma.
ahhhhh, stupid alex/will the douche! me no likey him.
ooh la la , more sexyness with michelle&alex? yum.
ohno, is kate dead?!? for reals?!? :(

Your title is from hero/heroin.:)
Love your story keep going!!

I don't think you understand how
a) much of an amazing writer you are
and
b) how much you need to update this story! I don't care if you haven't since January because you were uninspired or whatever, I need this story! hahaha I just finished reading this and holy shit it needs to continue and be amazing!
and i hate Will, he should just chime the fuck out hahahahhaha, he KNOWS that Jill likes Alex, he should just stop denying that fact and move on with his life! and Jill should understand her feelings for Alex and stop denying those!
and wow, Michelle.... i find her kind of annoying, but like.... pulling the whole thing together at the same time... i don't get how she could likeee, go with alex and then move onto Zack though (nearly wrote Jack, that could have turned out a tad incestrial hahahaha), like, that should be morally illegal haha. I felt so bad when Alex spoke to Zack about it and Zack had no idea, I was like Ohhhhh shit!

And then there's Rian, and oh my goodness, i feel so sorry for him, having to keep everyone's secrets, holy shit, i would explode. I'm kind of glad that he told Alex that he knew though, but he didn't need to go about it in such an asshole sort of way as he did in the last chapter, like... yeah, he left Jill and all of his responsibilities in the beginning, which i certainly wanted to punch him in the face for haha, but it's clear that she has forgiven him at least a little bit and he is certainly trying his best to step up to the plate, so there was no need to be so harsh. Plus what was Alex meant to do? Jill waited like two days before telling everyone that it was Joey's baby, it's not as though Alex, in the state of mind he was in could go, 'nahhh, truth is, it's mine, yay!'. Sure, he should have taken the responsibility from the moment Jill told him instead of being such a prick, but just like she was shocked and worried when she found out, she could of given him sometime to come around. Then again, I totally get where she's coming from, and how distraught she would have been when Alex said all of that shit to her.

and then poor Jacky, like seriously. I just want to give him a massive hug, like, I felt so sorry for him when he thought Kate had an eating disorder and she totally just lied and went along with it when really she was just on drugs. I totally understand where she was coming from though, obviously when you have a drug problem, it's not as easy as being like, 'hey jack, guess what, i'm on drugs, weeeeeeeeee!' it's horrible, and trying to get off drugs is even worse, but i personally thought it was seriously inconsiderate of her to go to Seattle with the guys, seriously, she risked all of their safety, as well as her own. And Kay, may I just say, I think the way you've tied this whole thing together is almost amazing as you yourself, what with Kate taking Mrs Barakat's pills, and then Jill thinking her mom was abusing her painkilers, and then getting Jack and Michelle worried, and then... ahhh

this story could seriously become a tv show and make sooooo much money. hahah all of your stories could, i swear!

so i mean it, get rid of the writer's block, negative thoughts or whatever it was that stopped you from updating this story, because i absolutely NEED an update, like as badly as Kate needs her drugs haha.

ps; i loved the last chapter where Alex was talking to Drew, 'Do you think daddy's an asshole?'
hahahhahahahha i actually literally aw every time Alex has one of those true father moments and like talks to the baby and stuff, and when he went to the mall for all the clothes and toys for his house? I thought that was the most adorable thing!

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE

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I somehow found this storym and let me say, i LOVE this story.
SOO much. It's one of my favorites<3 I have been reading it every chance I get. So I would really love it if you updated it soon:) <3333333

Dear you, I love you.
Just sayin'.
And I will spend this weekend attempting to convince you to update this A.S.A.P.
:)

New subscriberr! But umm, I love this story. Alex/Will is annoying though, maybe just because I like real Alex more :). I feel bad that Rian is keeping all the secrets though, I would burst and scream everything. And when Kate tells Jack... :( Keep writing!

Oooh!
Great update.
More soon! :]

Heyy, this story is freaking amazing. I cant wait to see if Alex and jill get their happy ever after, or if jill ends up with alex/will. And im heaps curious about kate's past, i cant wait to see what she is hiding exactly. And for some reason i can just see Rian have a breakdown from all the secrets he has to keep, so i can see him telling everyone. Can't wait till u update, Woot keep on writing

xx

you should definitely continue! i really want to know where this'll go. :)

i want it to continue!!!!XD plz??

CONTINUE PLEASE!
PLEASE
PLEASE
PLEASE

Well...just saying that I really like this story...
More with the updating?
Please...?

Haha, kidding. Take your time.
But hurry up.
haha, kidding...or am I?

No, but seriously...take your time. It's always better when more time is spent on it...