July 6th, 2013 at 09:02pm
Oh my goodness.
I can truly say, I cannot recall ever reading something this beautiful. The whole idea along with your style of writing is just, it's phenomenal & elegant & just, three shades of beautiful. I can't even pick out a choice phrase because there are so many amazing words & metaphors & I can't even narrow it down; it's just, it's so amazing.
I'll have to review this one day soon. Just, I have no words.
The idea of the girl being completely mesmerising is an interesting one as well. There's almost an air of the supernatural about her, which you compliment with your descriptions of her. I love the draw that she has to Dougie as well - I almost imagine that he's linked to her by an invisible chord as he walks. I don't know what she's doing or why she's so otherworldly, but I love it. I'm not usually a big fan of stories that leave that much of a mystery behind after they finish, but this one definitely goes in with the few that pull it off excellently.
Absolutely beautiful, gorgeous imagery and an intriguing plotline. Good work!