Bittersweet World - Comments

I really liked this and I also love Ashlee and Pete! More plz(:

Hey, hope you don't mind that I scanned this in, rather than type it up.

I will type it up if it's unreadable, though.

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That was a refreshing piece of writing.

I've read countless Fall Out Boy fanfics that bash Ashlee, and I've seen how cruel FOB fans can be when it comes to "their man"'s wife.

It was nice to read something from her perspective for a change.
For fear of being long-winded, it was simply brilliant.

This was really amazing. I personally really like Ashlee Simpson, a lot more than I do Pete at times, and I think it's really cool that FINALLY someone's writing something good about her, from her point of view, and not making her seem like a total bitch.
You made her seem real, like she was just another person, only stalked by photographers day in and day out.
Will you please let me know if you write any more about her and Pete, because I REALLY want to read some more about them!

So I failed at reading a full act of King Lear, so I decided to give up for the day and come back and bum around and leave some reviews. So I've got my review music on, You Me At Six (: and we're ready to goooo.

I lovelovelovelovelove this. You know by know that I absolutely adore everything you write anyway, but something about this is different. I love it for a different reason, and I think it's just the way you wrote it and how it's told from a different perspective.

people will see I’m not some big conked band boy stealer, they’ll see I’m not a lip synching monster NOT GONNA LIE, I LAUGHED. You can see from the first paragraph that this is going to challenge everyone's view of Ashlee, whether they love her or hate her. Personally, I don't come under either of those.

Ashlee getting a coffee from Starbucks with her husband, Ashlee leaving a club with her assistant Koko, Ashlee at a premiere, Ashlee going to one of Jess’ concerts in Texas, Ashlee taking Hemmingway for a walk and Ashlee leaving ‘Mommy and Me’ classes with her baby. Apologies for copying so much there, but you've just gotten this down. Straight up, this is all so true. It's like actually opening one of those celebrity gossip magazines, or viewing Perez Hilton's online thing or whatever, it's her doing normal, everyday tasks, yet the media make a huge deal out of it.

Honestly, Nina, this story is oh so true, I've read a book that reminds me of this. It's like the insider knowledge kinda thing, where it takes you behind the scenes and lets you in on the truth.

Sorry if I had a connection with Paris Hilton. Who the hell doesn’t in LA? True. I mean she is Paris sodding Hilton. :tehe:

I loved how you describe it as a game. It is a masquerade and you really have emphasised that. No. You don’t know me. You don’t know me at all because I’m playing the game. Of course we don't know her. You can't know a person by reading about them in a magazine and following their every move on Twitter. It's stalkerish in a sense.

This bit is really truthful. Because do you seriously think that they want to see Ashlee Simpson walking around the way she does at home? I loved that line. It's like, of course the public don't wanna see that kind of thing, because it's what they do, and it's boring. They all want to see a life they don't have, something different from the norm for them.

a leech on my sister’s career and a leech on Pete Wentz’s life, the boy who you all adore so much and supposedly want all the best for :tehe: again, love it. I liked how it touched upon Pete's defensive fan girls. How they all suddenly hate Ashlee, because she's married to him, the young teenagers who think they have a chance with him. I should know, one of my biffles is one of those teenies.

This is quite sad. It sounds as though she's just dying to tell everyone this little thing about herself, but she's scared of maybe being ridiculed or told that she's ungrateful for the life she leads, But that is just the dream in my head, and in LA you have to keep your dreams locked away otherwise they are shared with the world. It suggests that she wants to keep it private as well, and she's scared of the world finding out about it.

We are the ones you admire from a far, the shining skeletal structures dressed in jewels and fine clothes, we are the ones you love to talk about, we are the ones you love to tear down because bringing us down is better than being jealous of the lives that are glorified in magazines and online blogs. Be-au-tifullllll description there. It's all so true, and how it actually is. Like, so many people slag off celebrities for no good reason, and a lot of the time it does stem from jealousy.

This is another wonderful description, But just remember, we are also the people who behind closed doors take our make up off, slip into ratty jeans and a worn out t-shirt and walk barefoot in the daydream gardens of our own creation. You make those alien-like celebs sound oh so normal. (:

I reaaaaaaaaaaally enjoyed reading that. Do let me know if you write anymore with Ashlee with/without Pete. It was a nice little insight to something I wouldn't normally think about. Beautifully written.

So, I had just written a long ass review for you and it got deleted omgno: :grr:

If this review sucks, feel free to kick my ass. This is my first attempt of writing a long review :cute:

I thought the opening was really effective, and gripping to the reader, especially the line In some strange way waking up in the morning knowing that thousands of girls across the world hate your guts because you’re happy is oddly fulfilling.
I smiled when I read that line, because I could relate to what Ashlee was saying, although not to the same extent of course. This helps show that Ashlee is person, and does have the same feelings as 'normal' people.

Ashlee getting a coffee from Starbucks with her husband, Ashlee leaving a club with her assistant Koko, Ashlee at a premiere, Ashlee going to one of Jess’ concerts in Texas, Ashlee taking Hemmingway for a walk and Ashlee leaving ‘Mommy and Me’ classes with her baby.
I thought that paragraph was really effective, as it helps with your point that Ashlee is a normal human, and she does the normal things that people do.

Ashlee, Ashlee, Ashlee, Ashlee, Ashlee, Ashlee, Ashlee, Ashlee, Ashlee.
That line was really effective in helping the reader relate to Ashlee, and lets us in at all the commotion that follows her and her celebrity lifestyle.

You play the game right once or twice and they get the picture. Literally. They get their picture and leave you alone. You show them what they want and once they have it they leave you alone and you can go on and live your real life
That line made me think back to all the celebrities who were in the lime light, and aren't anymore. I guess it's true, if everything is perfect then nobody is gonna be interested anymore.

That’s not part of the deal. Being normal is not what we’re supposed to do. We’re different. We can’t be like everyone else. So you can’t hate me for it.
I like how Ashlee realises that she's not 'normal' to the people outside of the limelight, yet when she's alone at home she's down to earth, but people don't want that.

You can try to hate me if you want and if it makes you feel better. You can bitch about me on the internet.
Again, that line made me go :con: because the reader can really relate to that, how people hide behind the internet when they have a problem or whatever, but no-one would go up to a celebrity and say it would they? No matter how much they dislike that celebrity, if they were to meet them they'd be all smiles and fangirly.

I wouldn’t be human if I said it didn’t upset me, there are times when I wish it didn’t have to be that way.
I love how Ashlee is trying to think of a way she can be who she is, still living in LA and still married to Pete, but also a normal person. It makes her seem more real.

Maybe that’s not what you want to here, maybe you’d rather hold us up as idolized beings who aren’t human. You keep us at a distance because maybe the idea that we too can be normal frightens you, but that’s ok too. It’s fine to be intimidated and it’s fine to be frightened, but in the end we’re just like you, we are all dreamers and we all walk around pretending we’re grown up, we think we know exactly what this world has got to offer but the truth it: we haven’t got a clue.
All I can say about that is: You go girl :crazy:

I especially loved the last line :tehe: So effective.

Overall, I loved this piece - I loved how you stuck up for your idol, and all your points were totally valid and stood out to the reader, its cleared my mind up about celebrities, and reminded me that they're just like us in so many ways.

I expect you to write more I shall be watching! :cute: :arms:

Wow, you got right inside that girl's head because I bet you're right there are days when she feels that way. I think you're an incredible, soulful author who is absolutely fearless. I'd love to see more of this writing or even more one-shots of Ashlee and Pete, because sometimes... it's enlightening to see it from the girl you love to hate's shoes. I actually like some of her music, it's honest. But wow... this was amazing.

This was seriously amazing. I can't say that you were in character because Ashlee isn't a character, she's a person. This was great, and I'm sure if Ashlee were to read thsshe'd be flattered beyond belief. I still don't like her music though, lmao. It's not because she's married to Pete Wentz either, I just like more... metal.