A Whole New World - Comments

Thanknyouu!! :)

I find this story very interesting. I like the detail you've put into it, and the plot itself is unique from other things that I've read similar to this. I also like the complexity of the main character herself, it seems like she is developed.
But like others have said, there are a few grammatical errors. One error that I've noticed a considerable amount of times in the early chapters and would like to point out is the run-on sentences.
Other than the little mistakes, I think this story is actually really good. If you fix those up it would be an excellent read!

Thank you!! :)

The why you mix Bella's past with the rest of the story is very good. The plot is very interesting, and I find her wedding dress sort of funny considering her name. :) There are some grammar mistakes to fix, but I'm happy to see them less frequent in the newer chapters. There is an obvious growth in your writing skills. Keep it up! :)

Thank you for the feedback, I will look through and correct them now :)

I enjoy the plot. It seems interesting and engaging. I did find several grammatical mistakes. The mistakes stand out, but are the kind of minor grammar issues that can be fixed with just a little editing. A story without mistakes is automatically ten times better so, I suggest looking into those corrections. All in all, this seems like a pretty solid piece. It's definitely worth a read. ^.^

I like the plot. It flows well. However, you make a lot of grammar mistakes. They're mediocre, however to an OCD grammar freak like me, they're about as noticeable as the clouds on a story day. I hope you didn't find that rude, it wasn't my intention at all. It's a good read, regardless! x

deffinatly :) im working on an update now :)

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love it soooo much, oooh u mentioned me hehe. babe update asap hehe, i love you sooo much babe :P xxxx

I'll update more tomorrah chick
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UPDATE NOW.

OMG UPDATE NOW.

different much dude, but i like it:) love you babe xxxxxxxx

Thank you :)
and i shall be updating later tonight hopefully
love kaytee
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Well done. You've really turned into an amazing writer. I really love this. More soon? :D