December 4th, 2010 at 04:28am
At first, I was reluctant to the narration. The descriptions and metaphors seemed a little cliche and melodramatic. I did, however, rather enjoy the sun/moon metaphor carried throughout the story.
The flashback was the most lackluster part of the story. I felt you got carried away with the romanticism and poetics. I would have much preferred to see a natural and relaxed interaction between the two, to contrast the situation they currently face.
I thought that after the death of Hephaestion, you finally found your voice, beginning with "it is only this living earth that separates the moon, Hephaestion, from the sun, Alexander."
The final scene is the strongest, and I particularly refer to the light in his room as Hephaestion. The last line is the most powerful in the story and definitely leaves me satisfied!
I hope this helps :cute:
it's such a moving one shot and yes I to cried a little :'(
Iam yet to see the film though, but Ive seen some clips of the training everyone had to go through
I love this one shot soooooo much!! <3 keep writing!! more alexanderXhephaestion please?
Jay x