An Arranged Marriage To The Mafia...? - Comments

  • MusicLover525

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    This story is pretty awesome! I really love it! And it somehow seems realistic to me that they did not fall in love. You really have a way to writing.. I cried when James died and cried when her dad died. Those moments were heartbreaking! I love how Ethan is always there for her though! :)
    January 2nd, 2013 at 12:48pm
  • fizz_pop

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    this was the best book I've read on mibba so far, it was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOved it. Youre a great writter.
    November 12th, 2010 at 11:43am
  • Cee Cee 02

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    just finished reading the first chapter and i must say im absolutely loving so far.cant wait to read the rest eish i had more time...:(
    November 1st, 2010 at 02:06pm
  • Shallowbeauty

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    I haven't been on here in awhile so I've finally gotten time to catch up and the story definitely didn't disappoint! Amazing writing and thank you very much for the acknowledgement at the end =) (heading over to the sequel now)
    September 2nd, 2010 at 03:30am
  • plug-in-baby

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    wow. soooo amazing! i cant wwait to read the sequel =]]
    <3
    August 8th, 2010 at 05:52am
  • storyluver1143

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    wow.... awesome story! thanks for writing it! =]
    August 6th, 2010 at 11:00am
  • purplebull

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    OH MY GOD! i did not jus write all that! holy shit i over killed it! that was a 1227 words...
    im so sorry that was over kill big time but again i could have typed a million words & still that wouldnt be enough on how good the story is:D

    -thank you&come again.
    August 2nd, 2010 at 08:00pm
  • purplebull

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    first of all life is UNFAIR! I went to sleep & thirty minutes later you post??!
    ok now on to the story & I'm going to make this a review comment thingy watevaa…

    I used to read a lot like everything & anything & I would think its amazing.

    then I stumbled upon this story. I LOVE arranged marriages & anything gang related so I was like YAAAY my ideal story so I started reading & I couldn’t stop until finally my ass had to go to sleep because I had school the next day so I woke up not even bothering to get ready I started reading because you were pretty far ahead I think on chapter 30 & I NEVER EVER NEVER go not jus to school but ANYWHERE lookin like shit I like to get ready so here I was just throw on wateva & resumed reading. My friend in both my first & third class was like what your problem during third because I haven’t put my phone down & usually yeah I'm always texting but I'm always talking & everything I mean I was obsessed

    I mean your story was like new territory I was so used to the dialogue & emo characters cocky males & virgin females & this had so much depth to it!

    1. writing style:
    sometimes I wonder do u use a book to get your description of things from like really its WONDERFUL I can’t stress enough how good it is & I cant find the words.
    But sometimes I get so frustrated & scroll down to any dialogue because I wanna read interaction with others rather than listen to Amelia’s mind explain things because sometimes she spends too much time on pointless things but I let that go because your descriptions are too good. You need to understand there better then published authors that’s good.

    2. plot:
    Really you couldn’t go better with it, you have done the arranged marriage perfectly especially on how they don’t fall in love in the 3rd chapter after hating each other in the past two. That’s one of my biggest things because really ALL the fun the interest the things that keep you reading is the chase between the couple whatever. those are the best things after that the story is bleeeeh but don’t get me wrong in the end I want the couple to be together of course I'm hopelessly romantic but still I'm a fan of the chase phase rather then the lovey dovey mushy throw up cute phase & any scene with Amelia & Ethan having a moment really my heart just squeezes in my chest its unbelievable. The mafia life you got that down to the letter its perfection I couldn’t think of anything to add to that I mean like I said its downright perfection. The twist with Louis was perfect you honestly made it seem like she could have said yes to him just left Ethan while most stories you know from the first paragraph who is gonna end up with who

    (this is so off topic but I gotta get it out of my chest me & my aunt were watching CSI vegas & I don’t know how we got on the subject of detective conan.. do you know who I'm talking about? the Japanese show with the guy that turns little & he solves crimes & such well my aunt was like in CSI from the first 10 minutes you know who did it but Conan your on the edge of the seat the whole team with no clue who is the bad guy)

    Ok now that I feel better back to the plot mason was big twist but kinda not much of surprise still like I felt there was a relative. Her father turning on everybody was big twist so really that was perfect.

    & when james died I cried really EVERYBODY calls me a cold hearted black soul no tears bitch
    (I'm not emo or depressed or anything I just really don’t care about anything or anyone & I'm very sarcastic so I come off as a bitch but oh well)

    plot all in all was magnificent, splendid , fabulous , extraordinary & and astonishing & that would still be an UNDERSTATMENT the only thing thou that irked me sometimes was no interaction & not much dialogue it would have been better to be there witnessing the conversation rather then read about Amelia explaining it & such but all in all its amazing.

    3. Characters:
    Amelia was perfect. Gorgeous & rich but lived the dirty life. I liked how she accepted the mafia rather than hating her father & such.
    anyone else I really cant say anything because again no interaction between characters that much & there not really that developed
    like Ethan I had no clue what to think about him is he real cocky? or rather jus with Amelia? but I still like how sweet he was with her towards the end & all

    so I'm going to wrap this up because its getting too long lol.

    your writing style Abby is out of the world really I have never read a published book or anything CLOSE to how good you write & I'm not saying this to flatter you I'm saying this because it’s the truth

    Plot was terrific all the ideas were unexpected & had us in a twist & really they were PERFECT but the lack of interaction between characters & such toke away from that.

    Amelia is a perfectly fine character & seems so real she’s 100% material but I don’t mean she’s the perfect girl I mean she’s the perfect character she has faults & issues & problems & her voice is so real.
    but again I cant speak about any other character because frankly no matter how great they seem & all more interface with them would have sealed the deal.
    I really think you don’t get the credit you truly deserve you might do this as a hobby & couldn’t care if your writing is good or if your serious but really you’re a magnificent writer anything & everything I said was a compliment like if it comes down to it there are only TWO real books I truly like & there this online author who is really good & your story I'm so picky & such nothing pleases me & nothing really fits my likeness I HATE reading now I might get excited when I read a good summary but then I start reading & see how the characters & cliché everything is I just get aggravated & not even bother

    I can NOT stress enough how GOOD “Arranged Marriage to the Mafia…?” you seem really into it & such & I'm glad you finished the novel that’s one of the things that makes you great. I can sit here & tell you how good the story was & really it still would be an understatement I really cant find the words & I cant express how much it was PERFECT

    you really changed me with your story I have a REAL opinion now I can spot a good story from a bad one & I know original when I see it once again Abby you incredible

    -thank you&come again.
    August 2nd, 2010 at 07:58pm
  • Storm Sparks.

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    the really weird thing is that i was thinking that Amelia Radev has a nice ring to it i read on and Ethan says the exact same thing!!! We're meant to be!!!!Loool, The sequels gonna be goood!!!!
    August 2nd, 2010 at 05:27pm
  • XxDanceInTheRainxX

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    oh my gosh really good! i love it please make a sequel? =)) it has an amazing plot
    August 1st, 2010 at 06:49am
  • Read.Write.Live.

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    sequel PLEASE :) I want to read about her being happy again :)
    July 28th, 2010 at 07:06am
  • brunooo

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    Please do the squeal please
    July 27th, 2010 at 03:04pm
  • The Ghillie Monster

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    Sequel Please :)
    July 24th, 2010 at 12:20am
  • ikickshins

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    wow.
    this story is absolutely amazing. <3
    and YES you should totally
    have a sequel. (:
    i can't believe her dad died. :/
    July 23rd, 2010 at 07:51pm
  • FrozenWithoutYou

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    I'm so excited to read the ending! I hope everything is ok and that you can post kind of soon.
    July 13th, 2010 at 04:02am
  • Never Looking Back

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    please put up a sequel! i loved this story so so much! it was original and very very well written
    July 8th, 2010 at 11:24pm
  • talking_girl95

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    it's even more sad with the death
    and yes, i want a sequal
    July 5th, 2010 at 06:17pm
  • Who me? Couldn't be!

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    I have different thoughts on the sequel. It would be great depending on how you do it. Would that mean this story is 'incomplete' and you have to read the next one? Or woud this one end and the other be a new story with the same people? I guess I wanna know if the stories can stand alone. If that's the case, I'm all game for a sequel. I'm not sure I can handle MORE twists in addition to THIS story but a new story I could do. I love it and I can't wait for the final chapter. Your work is wonderful.
    July 4th, 2010 at 12:23am
  • Lollipops

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    Sequel!
    July 3rd, 2010 at 01:16pm
  • maligallo

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    sequal.... plz!!
    July 3rd, 2010 at 06:28am