Decayed Dancer - Comments

very very very good.
*subscribes*

God that was good. It took me forever to read, not because I read slow, but I wanted to get the feeling of the story, you put so much detail into it. I wanted to read a good story before I went to sleep, now I have something to dream about. It's really amazing. I think you would rock so hard by writing original fic, but this is beyond great.

i seriously need to shower now that was fucking hot more please?

This is absolutely amazing! I love the way you write. It's dark, beautiful, and sexy... all at once. You are my hero!! hehe *subscribes*

*gasp* dirty.

That was sick and twisted, but in a beautiful way.

I officially want to be you when I grow up!

ZooZoo Magee:

Ryan. I didn't like him in this. I guess I was thrown off by his different characterization. How he so easily plays the slut. Moaning, desiring, wanting the slight pain/intensity. If you keep up the characterization, and that's just how he is in this story, I think I'll start to like it.

Ryan wasn't actually intended to be like this at all.
He was supposed to be very... very much a victim, I suppose.
It's a pretty dramatic contrast compared to my original characterization.

^
-giggles-
I asked my friend Liz if this story could be AU and AR and she's like, "Nah. This totally happens. You're going to get a phone call from Pete Wentz telling you to delete it. 'HOW DID YOU FIND OUT?'"
She's insain, that girl.

Wow...if only everyone wrote as detailed and sexy as that. :lmfao

I don't know how you think of these Idea's dru, but your mind is brillant for it. I wonder what brendon's gonna do and say when Ryan comes home, cause Ryan sure as hell didn't act like he hated what had happened to him there.

I love how he compares what he does with brendon, to what he did with Pete and William. It's like you showed the main difference between pure lust, and love.

I seriously can't wait for more cause I wanna know what the fuck is going on. It's not everyday that a member of P!ATD get's fucked hard in a warehouse that Pete owns. Or at least, if it is happening we don't know about it....yet. :lmfao

I didn't really find Pete to be a jerk in this. I'm not sure why, he just didn't come off that way to me. He seemed more like someone who's in control, and used to being so. Stern, but not hateful. I liked when he would run his hands through Ryan's hair, or down his face. The best part, though, was that Pete was so grammatically correct. It just seemed to fit.
I feel bad for Brendon. I know he's not innocent, but it seems like all he wants to do is protect Ryan. Also, he cares for Ryan, doesn't want to hurt him, loves him.
William is a different sort of fellow, isn't he? Normally, I would like the kissing away [in his case, catching and licking away] of tears, but the way he did it just seems so wrong. I liked when he would try to be authoritative towards Ryan, but then would check with Pete to make sure that was "okay."
Ryan. I didn't like him in this. I guess I was thrown off by his different characterization. How he so easily plays the slut. Moaning, desiring, wanting the slight pain/intensity. If you keep up the characterization, and that's just how he is in this story, I think I'll start to like it.

My favorite lines:

"clapping his hand over his mouth after the words slipped out."

"a very precise amount of eyeliner"

"that seemed to cut through the air and stab Ryan in the chest."

"A look of disgust mingled with humiliation "

"“Contractions.” Pete’s voice was quiet."

"His voice was one of awe again.
“You’re spoiling him.” Pete said idly from the back of the room. “Now he’s going to want everyone to make those stupid, girly noises. You sound like a drunk virgin, Ross.”"

"“I’ll tie you up.” he threatened. “Can . . . Can I?” he asked Pete, a tentative afterthought.
“’May I’.” Pete corrected."

"he doubted that he would ever be surprised by anything again."

LMFAO ^

That really was rather amazing.
I was laughing too, I admit.
Maybe I should...leave.

*subscribes*
xD

Shittest comment you've ever seen?
Yes.
:lmfao

Now that it posted and I don't have to keep its content a secret...

HOLY MOTHER OF GOD, WOMAN!:shock: You have the most beautiful, magnificent, twisted, dark, sinister, evil, psychotic, amazing mind I've ever been let in to!

It is official: you are my hero. Better than hero, SUPERHERO! You're my Batman! Except with a cooler rubber outfit.

:shock:

Jeeze, if my parents knew about Mibba...
That aside.
I was on the edge of my seat the whole time...sometimes giggling at things like:
“God, I want to see you fuck his face.” Pete said. “Finish checking him for scars so I can watch you fuck his face.”

And sometimes my mouth literally dropped open at things like this:

“You’re really starting to piss me off,” Pete began calmly, ”with your bullshit, Ross. You don’t beg for more and then say ‘no’ in the same breath. Quit being such a god damn tease."

I adored the way you gave Pete the assholish-I'm-in charge attitude, and then the smug-I'm nice for giving you your reward-, because I could really see that happening. And the continuous "fuck his face" thing made me giggle although I probably shouldn't have.
That aside...
That was really fucking hot.
Like...
Beyond hot.
Like ultrahot.
Or something.
And the plot...
Was amazing.
And sad.
And...
Hot.
And I love the word "wantonly".

I am . . . so afraid of your mind sometimes, Dru darling.
You come up with the most fascinatingly dark things, and I just fucking love it.

Great job. This is so dirty and kinky. Every time I read it I feel like I need to a very long cold shower. BAHAHA.

:P
You're silly.

<3

This is my newest story.
The leads are: Ryan, Brendon, William Beckett, and Pete Wentz.
It's a gangbang of slash.
Very hardcore sexually.
Comments are greatly appreciated. I am so outside my realm of comfort with this story. So I'd love to know what's good/bad.

Happy reading!

xoxox
-Dru