Wild Ride - Comments

This is such an original idea! I adore it so. The language of this is beautiful, honestly. The description of the silence being ripped open then sewn shut just took my breath away. The emotions of the piece are so strong; the horror, the terror, the awful sense of foreboding and hopelessness. And then the strange scenes with the experiments were fascinating. I love it. And I know you're rewriting this and such, but I'd like to say that occasionally you over-use certain worlds too close together. It can be hard to find new words and synonyms and such, it just sounds a little awkward if you have 'child' or 'men' used repeatedly. It's just a little suggestion, and I really only noticed it in the first chapter; I'm being completely honest when I tell you that it didn't even detract from the story at all, your writing was just that good. You should definitely keep at it, and hopefully, continue and finish this story.

As I have told you before your wording is very descriptive and very interesting. I have a problem when it comes to things keeping my attention, as you so well know, but I kept reading it till the end.

Your character, in some ways, are so different from you; which is hard to do sometimes because people want to make the character into well ‘them’ at least with some people. I would keep her the same. The lust to kill is something you shouldn’t get rid of even if it’s a little out there (I remember you telling me about her killing) I think it makes you love, yet hate her for it! Making her more memorable.

Overall I think you’re on the road to success in the writing career, and I hope to keep reading your stuff till the end! I only read one chapter and little bits of pieces when I was told to look them over but I’m sure to read them all with my full attention this time around! Keep me updated on your stuff so I can stalk you some more ;] Keep up the good work Meg!

-of topic- For future references I would like to read something that’s close to your personality I think it would be very interesting and enjoyable.

You end it like that!
It's almost like a cliffhanger. I mean...what's going to happen next?
Ah!
You jerk. You have to update soon.
:)

Oh man I am loving this new version. It's giving me chills :)
I'm so glad you updated, I squealed really loudly when I found out lol.
Especially because I've been without the internet for over a week now. So this is a treat.
Update again soon, okay?

p.s.
This story is awesome, don't ever think other wise.

amazing, your ability to express every detail like a novel is awesome :D
i love the story by the way. :]

I believe I've located your rewrite dear!
And Lovely?
You most definitely didn't give yourself enough credit!
The idea for this story is really unique and i'm definitely intriqued!
I can't wait to see how you take this.

I don't want to find out it's been stolen, nor does Seclue want to find her banner and layout stolen

lmao, I didn't take the banner picture, I just saw the picture and put words on it :P lmao

Wow, I didn't think it was possible for me to love this story any more than I already do. I am absolutely loving this new version.
I like even more than the old version. It's so much better. Like wow, it's awesome.
:)
It all seems to just flow.
Though it was a very sad first chapter/prologue, I still loved it...like i've said like 50 billion times already. great start to your new improved story.

You're back and better than ever. Seriously Meg you simply blow me away.
This story is so worth waiting for. I squealed when I check my inbox and found out that you updated, I was so happy.

Poor Zachary, she hit him right in the rib cage…ouch!

And oh my gosh! They are related…well I mean, I knew that because I kept bugging you with questions, but I don't think or remember if I ever guessed that he was her brother.

Dun, dun, dun!

Who needs soaps and teen dramas when you have a story like this

;)

Lol. Great update, I simply loved it!

Yay, you updated!

Go Zachary! I knew he was related some how...or at least I think so....
hmmmm....lol.
Oh gee, you left us with another cliff hanger! You evil person you!
Seriously!!
You must update soon, please.
:)
lol.

I honestly don't get how you only have two stars.....
you should have more....and a lot more comments as well. This story is unique without being way out there you know?

I love it, and I really do hope you update it very soon :)

How dare you only have two stars! This should have wayy more than that.
I am seriously in love with this story. I loved how you made up a Syphris. It's so unique and very creative. You have an amazing imagination. :D
Keep up the great work!

Wow, this story is great!
I'm on chapter 3!

WOAHHHH!
AMAZING STORY!
I LOVE IT! <3

Where do I start with this? Well I find writing a comment while I read the story always helps make my comments that much longer and better lol.

So first off I want to let you know that I am so, so, so, glad you updated. I really do love this story, and I know you do too, so that's good because it means you wont delete it or anything.

I am surprised that you don't have 5 billion comments on this story yet, it's so unique and wonderful, you know? I have a strong feeling you will be getting a 3rd star sometime soon, at least I hope you do because you so deserve it.

Now to talk about the story. I am hooked with the very first paragraph. Meg, you simply blow me away. You always have and you always will.

Kallen's heart ached and throbbed painfully but as she acknowledged the pain she could only question whether it was her heart longing for civilization and her mother or if it was only the pain from the energy whirling within her.

You really make us feel her pain, I think you do at least. I can almost imagine what it must feel like to want to be part of something but you can't. I honestly think she's probably aching from both the energy in her and for 'want'.

The sky was a fusion of reds and blues, blended together to make a brilliant sky that signified dusk.

Simply beautiful. You really do paint a picture.

Uh-oh, big machine is not good for Kallen. I bet right now she really is wishing she could turn invisible. Lol.

"Well well, 14. I see you're still alive after all. It's a shame that it has turned to this. I'm afraid I must ask you to return to the helicopter with us," Alexander said pointing to the large machine.

Does he honestly think she'll just listen to him, tsk, tsk Alexander.

"What do you mean? Why do you question what I am? Clearly you would know such a thing. You've kept me in captivity for so long to endure inhuman tests to figure out exactly what I am. Why should you question what I am now? It's obvious you know what I am. Or, are you telling all of those damned tests were for nothing and you just have a sick twisted mind and you decided to torture each and every one of us in that hell hole for fun?"

You tell him Kallen!!

Oh man, I really want to hit Alexander, like seriously I do. I mean in some ways I like him, but gee the man is like taunting her.

Oh gee, I really don't want her to kill everyone, but I do want her to escape. Man, I am so torn, I feel so bad for her right now, it's not even funny.

Why can't she just sing that song "Why can't we be friends, why can't we be friends~" lol.

Anyways though, seriously I love this update, and I am so sorry this isn't like a hecka long comment, because I wouldn't want anything more than to give you a super duper long comment that you deserve!

Thank you everyone for the lovely comments! I am fairly sure I've gotten back to everyone unless their profile was private or something. I know it's not much to celebrate but for me getting to get a second star is amazing since it'll be the first time for me. So, thank you so much! I screamed when I saw it. :]

Wow Chapter really made me choke up. I almost cried, I felt so horrible for Kallen, she's scared and lonely and doesn't want to be viewed as a monster you know? Plus she doesn't want to hurt anyone else which I find very noble of her.

Also I liked how they were trying to help her, it was nice of them, though at the end everyone was shocked and scared.

I think it's great to know that she's not pure evil you know what I mean? She has feelings just like everyone else does, which is pretty cool...I can't really think of any other word for it.

I also think it's neat that she can heal so quickly. Must of freaked Martha out, huh? Lol.

She must be scared knowing that she'd never fit in any where. Where is she going to go, you know?

And chapter 11...oh my goodness. The whole first part had me smiling yet so sad to know that it's just a memory. Poor Kallen, that poor, poor, poor girl, seriously I feel so bad for her. She must really miss her mother, and how she slipped in the water and it's just so sad and innocent.

Her mother, oh gee, is she still alive, I'd die not knowing if my mother was dead or alive. It's eat me up, to even think that maybe they killed her just because they gave birth to a 'monster'.

I really hope she finds her mom, but I also realize that it may be very dangerous, especially if her mom is dead or something. She might go psycho and destroy things and people, take out her revenge on everyone.....

I think I might no Zachary's secret...maybe :)

Also I almost cried again when she was taken, poor Kallen and her mom. it must have seriously broke both of their hearts. I know it would break mine. Also to know you'd never go home again.

Kallen was confused too, since it all seemed to happen so fast.

Well great update, I loved it. :)

This is a really original story so far, but I'm only on chapter 5.
: D
It's good so far, though.

Well, that was a brilliant update.
I loved it for sure. And I have no idea what Zachary's secret is.
Haha.

Alexander isn't very happy now is he?

I have one thing to say...

I assume her body began emitting a blue aura
My auras never been pinker!

Hopefully you got that little comment. :)

Anyways this was a very nice update and it really cleared up everything. No longer will anyone be confused...or at least they shouldn't be.

I'm not sure how i feel about Alexander right now to be honest. I'm sure I'll like him very much later on. I think he's just worried about all the destruction she's caused.....which is coming out as anger towards everyone who let her escape.

I'm wondering about what Zachary is doing in a place like that, especially if he was offered better paying jobs. I think if I was him I'd get out of there and away from Alexander.

How old is Alexander anyways?

lol random I know.

Anyways this was a very awesome update and I liked it very much because it explained a lot. So she's going to be childish and dangerous! Oh knows!

Aww meg, you inspire me so much with this story.