According To Columbus - Comments

Number 4.

Reviewed as per personal choice

Title - According to Columbus
Whose Columbus (in the story)? Meh. Relevance is a little awry. I'm going to go out on a limb here and say that it's because you had to name the story after the song that you named it thus. Right?

Rated: 7/10

Content

No one understood it. Why Erik loved London so much.
^ a dash between it and Why would improve your flow.

London liked clothes and hairspray and sleeping with any guy that would sleep with him.
^uhm, okay now, issues much?

London would tell Erik he loved him and in the same breathe...
^breath?

London was sitting on the floor crying and Erik took him into his arms with a soft grip.
^and to when?

He took London’s face in his hands and made their eyes meet.
^made? Maybe it could be:

He took London’s face in his hands and their eyes met. or something like that.

Overall
I'm sorry for commenting on, what I see now, your oldest one shots. But I didn't realize it until...well, now... and I didn't know how to effectively review a six word story. Sorry.

This was nice, cute and a little sad.

Rated: 10/10

I loved this, a lot.
It contains a lot of emotion for so little words.
I am really intrigued by it, and I loved the last line. One of my favourite lyrics ever. :]