July 12th, 2009 at 01:46pm
Aw, poor thing. That Andreas is a bastard.
There were a few mistakes, but you are getting it beta'd which is good. I really liked it :cute: It was sweet, but interesting at the same time. I can kind of see Andreas's point, but at the same time I want to beat him up :tehe:
Either way, I love it.
I love how they meet. It's so adorable, and really believable. It's simple, it's not some big-huge friend's friend's sister's aunt's cousin's friend's adopted uncle's son thing that pops up too often. :XD It's really simple and realistic, it's awesome. Dante kind of reminds me of my own idiot dog. :XD
The entire middle chunk is... yee. :tehe: My fangirly joy was blatantly obvious. There's this naive tone to the entire piece, which really fits in with everything that's happening. You didn't totally sugarcoat it and make it fairies-unicorns-candyfloss rainbows, but at the same time it's not deadly serious. It's something that can be both taken lightly and at the same time taken to heart. This is really difficult to do, but you've totally nailed it.
The ending definitely came as a shock to me, I'll admit it. Andreas' bluntness kind of made me want to slap him. :tehe: I love how he's shocked at his own words, how it's played out kind of like a movie to him. Eric's reaction isn't underplayed nor overplayed, and I can see myself reacting in a similar way in the same situation - again, really realistic. Like with what I said before, all this is really hard to get right and you've nailed it.
Like the person above said, there were a few mistakes, but I understand about the beta thing. :cute:
Super-duper-amazingly well done, love. :arms: