Chasing Chaos - Comments

I'm very pissed, cause I just wrote this long ass comment and then my computer frooze, which led to turning it off. So everything I wrote was erased..so I guess I'll try to sum it up for you...

So, this is the best Oliver story that I ever read, prossibley the best one here on mibba or any other fanfiction site I've been on. You use such strong words t describe everything, you have such a talent, that makes me jealous, haha. I was considering to put something on mibba, but now I think I'm gotta go back into my cave and hid for bout a year..
I liked your idea for starting in the present, then going back to the past. It give so much more insight on the characters, and it was cool that it started off that they did have a past before..if you understand that.. I've read I story like that before(they switch between past and present) and it might even have been a Oli Sykes story too. But it was such poorly written..I was very pleased with yours. I'm definently going to check out your other stories when I can.
I liked the relationship between Tom and Savana, that would make anyone jealous. Near the end I almost thought they should belong together...then I was like, WAIT WHAT NEVER, she belongs with Oliver. All the way. Just the way Sav(well you) talked about Oliver, and every touch they had, waas beautiful. In the end, in 2005, i was so fucking thrilled when Sav told Oliver, haha. That was awesome. Oli made her grow some real balls. And the ending for 2009 was just how I wanted it. It was perfect, how you left the readers just there..and I'm exicted cause I see you have a sequeal WOOOO!

And by the way, THANK-YOU. I never met someone on here who knows who Elliott Smith, NMH, Joy Division, etc is. You had some wicked bands choice's in your stories. (And you had one of my favorite book and authors mingened!) I was thrilled! All I ever see on his website in All time low,aX7, and the jonas brothers...You know how hard it is to read a story about those people? Not that the stories are bad, but I just cant stand the bands..I can't feel like a hipocrut reading them though, haha.

awww im all teary. well 'night darling. wonderful story.

so i started reading this like when i first joined mibba but then the updates was so slow and i couldn't seem to get back into it which i was well ticked off at myself for doing soon, then browsing stories i found it again and saw it was finished which was good now because i could just finish it all in one go, though actually it took me a week to finish it all! i honestly didnt want to do anything else than read this story. it was so hooking and really kept me reading! i honestly have to stay its one of my favourite stories on mibba, it was just amazing i love the way it was written from past and present, that was such an amazing idea. it really was so good and the 2005 characters to the 2009 was really good, like they had actually grown up and not the excatly same they were then, if that makes sense? i should have like written a comment for each chapter while i read it all, but then i think that maybe my comment might just be one hell of a long comment! i love the ending, i like the letter a lot that oliver wrote, it wasnt like sloppy or anything, like it wasnt him trying to say that he loves her or anything like that, it was like a guy had actually written that letter! & im so glad her and tommy got to be okay with each other again. i dont know which year i like better really, they both have theirs amazing moments. gosh im so stoked for the sequel and this time ill keep on track! amazing story, honestly just unbelievable, different from other stories thats for sure, the ending was so real and believable, those are the kind of endings i love! :D

Everything they went through, over all the times they hung out with each other, just made them connect and come closer to each other. They felt comfortable with one another. Life just isnt how some people think it is, all perfect, when everything turns out all great and tidy. But i think you did a really good job keeping the connection with Her and tom, even though they did have bits of rough patches. Oliver and her are a little tied up in things. Its not as easy for her to talk to Oliver as it is Tom, because they've been friends for such a long time, and nothing more than friends. I Like how its all platonic, Strictly friends. But theres always people asking them millions of times about it, and then she starts to question herself. Really asking her brain
"Are we something more?"

That chapter.. the one with oliver at the end whispering "I wish this could last" brought me to tears. I Was hysterical, it was horrid. The second i read those words i just broke. He knew it wasnt going to last, he knew that there was no way. it was too good to be true. Theres alot of suspense going on in this story, which i truly love and adore. I Like how it shows around the last chapters how sensitive and vulnerable Oliver is and can be. I never would have thought... he always seemed confident and cocky, and under controll. I guess he just didnt know what to think of the situation, or better yet what to do.

Im down right excited for the sequel, you got me sitting at the end of my seat, praying for an update. Take your time, and thank you for this story! i really appreciated the wonderful read.

-Sunny

OMG.
i held in my tears for this one. but i was going to let them out because i was so scared there wasn't going to be a sequel, but I AM VERY RELIEVED there is. oh i nearly died.
they're meant to be together and they keep realizing it at the wrong times. oh their goodbye was sad to say the least. "It's over and done" WHAT not it's not! argh again, i nearly died, he should have said he still loved her. Or she should have asked is it still true. EEEEP! i can't wait for the sequel now, i wasn't ready to let go.

you are very talented and this was truly amazing.

Oh my lanta.
Well, that definitely put my heart in a few knots during their goodbye. I just wanted so much for them. I don't know what I was expecting, either. A kiss? Another "I love you"? Anything at all, for the two of them just to realize that they really are supposed to be together. They've always been, haven't they? It looks like both times they couldn't realize it. Not at the right time, anyways.

But this was beautiful, and I am definitely subscribed to the sequel right now. So excited. :D

Yes, I did cry. And now my eyeliner looks weird haha.
But aside from my disaster makeup, I would like to say how much I enjoyed reading this story. I absolutely fell in love.
I can't wait for the new one (already commented haha).
I wish I had more amazing things to say about this, but I'm at a loss. There just aren't enough good words in the world to describe how brilliant it was, so I will just let you know I loved it. The end. :)

Gosh... this ended so beautifully, I'm kind of relieved there is a sequel, not going to lie. And yes, I cried. I really loved how 2005 Savannah just called him out. And I really liked how he was brutally honest in the letter, but it was just as heartbreaking to read in so many ways. I think there are so many girls who could relate to being in a relationship (it is, in a way, a relationship of sorts) like this and have their heart broken all over again. I look forward to the sequel, and I'm already subscribed. This was high school and college all over again, gosh.

Fuck yeah I got a little fucking weepy.
Mainly because you posted this at a point in my life where something very, very similar happened, 'cept I didn't say goodbye.
You amaze me with these things, man. You've got so much writing talent in you, the way you can express an idea without going overboard.
This story has been one of my favorites forever.

my mind is blown.
beautiful story from start to finish, i feel like i just relived high school with this story, brought tears to my eyes

Oh my god!!!! I cried like a baby!!! I liked this ending but I wish they would have ended up together. It was a some what happy but heartbreaking ending.

Brilliant story!! Super excited for the sequel!! :)

I still miss We're Trouble Bound, and now I'm going to miss this one too.
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Aw.

Amazing stories. I'm going to go click the other link, now.

Did I spoil it? shit. I hope I didn't rush you into posting this.
Savanna laying into Oliver was pure gold bro! That was epic, calling him out on all his shit, I mean

“I mean, what are yeh anyway? Some bloke in a shitty local band, who spends ‘is days gettin’ piss drunk, pukin’ behind clubs and chasin’ blonde birds, goin’ fuckin’ no where… Yer right, it is for the best.” My indignation would have been embarrassing if it hadn’t been sort of accurate.
Idek what to say. The bit about her indignation being accurate is brilliant, I love it. The whole argument is so simple and raw and it gets out everything I think everyone has thought whilst reading.
This ending was beautiful. I'm a little sad now, but I know that it's what needed to happen. What Oli wrote in the letter is 100% true as is what he said, they would never work, which is heartbreaking on a million different levels.
I loved it. I really loved Chasing Chaos, and dude, there's no doubt in hell I'll love Over and Done. Subscribbbbeeeeee
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THANKS A SHIT TON FOR MAKING ME CRY.
And for the record, I didn't admit that just now.

This was perfect. I'm subscribing because I can take it. You've already made me cry once, I CAN TAKE IT.

Oh my God, I'm so sad now!
This is seriously one of the best stories
I've ever read on mibba.
You're an amazing writer <333

I noticed the corner before I even read the last chapter. :)

omogmgomgkgjkgjk gkjglkajg she really layed into him. whoa.

“I guess, aye.” His eyes kept glancing in my direction, completely overlooking Katie’s large presence. She was intimidating him; I could tell by the way his body leaned away.
-hahah

I found myself wishing that he had stopped me, that he’d begged me not to go, that he’d told me to stay. But Oli Sykes didn’t beg and he sure as hell didn’t want me to stay.
-:(

Sixteen year old me, in the prime of my black t-shirt phase. Nineteen year old Oliver, in the midst of his love affair with the flat iron. The two of us, not such a strange looking pair together after all. This picture was the match to a photo I still had hidden away. The writing on the white frame read “Oli&Sav’05” in a familiar script.
-mmmm

djalkfjslkfjalsjfklasj I'm kind of scared to subscribe. idk bro.
Ahh I'll just man up and do it. :)

*prequel.

bloody heck.

I NEVER GET FUCKING UPDATE NOTIFICATIONS.

The door of the venue opened again and this time a tall blonde with a sizeable chest stumbled out in a pair of stilettos. “Oli? Oli, there yeh are.” She gave him a wide Cheshire grin, teeth white and sharp. I knew the sort of girl she was; I’d seen them at every show I’d ever gone to. She caught sight of me and gave me a calculated smile of my own. “Who’s this?”

Oli looked up at me, determination glinted in his eyes, and he said “Oh, she’s jus’ my little brother’s mate.” And as if he was disgusted by this statement as I was, he leaned over and promptly splashed vomit at my feet. “Oh fuck.”

Near enough just broke my heart there bro. I know exactly how she feels and that's horrible. I can't believe he's dismissing her in such a way, but I've got a suspicion that I might know why. I kinda think I might have this Oliver down. I'm not sure though, so I'll keep quiet.

An indefinite holiday sounds ace.

and dude, I just saw in the top right corner.....'this is the sequel to 'over and done' you have no idea how much this has brightened my shitty day.
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