Aw, write another chapter, this made me melt inside, it was so adorable, i could just imagine it, amazing work<3
February 5th, 2012 at 10:57pm
Sensual Boosh - Comments
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That was awesome!September 5th, 2009 at 09:10pm
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Awhhhh, cute!
I love the Mighty Boosh. =] And this was adorablee.July 20th, 2009 at 02:20am -
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OK, well first off, I have to say it was an interesting story. It was short, but cute. :cute:
This sentence is a bit repetitive though, "Well," he started out in his usual lispy and soft tone. "I'd say that you fancy him well." Because there was already a well at the beginning of the sentence.
The sentence should say, what are you doing, here, "What you doing, knocking knowledge into your thick head?" Howard joked, coming up the stairs.
You're missing a comma between these words, "He's in absolute bloody love with you, Howard!" Naboo yelled, running out of the flat.
This could be combined into one sentence instead of being two seperate ones, "I'm gonna kick his arse." Vince began to say, heading for the door. But, a strong arm stopped him from moving.
(Spell check for the word separate^)
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The ending sentence was cute..
Maybe you could change it and make it something more, but overall it was a nice story.July 16th, 2009 at 01:08am
