Strange Moon - Comments

This was absolutely fanfastasmic!
It made my emotions jumpy as fuck and was rackofrackenly well-written!~ :33

This is excellent. I adore your writing style and you have a serious talent with lavish description. You really drew me in, and that story was totally awesome

Wow! The whole story was great. It wasn't like normal smut stories. Although, that was expected because I've read some of your stuff before and those weren't normal in any way. You're a really talented writer, and I think what it says on your profile about your stories pretending to be poems is true. Some lines are true poetry.

Anyway! Concentrating on this story:
I loved how there was so much emotion in it. I've noticed you're great for having a lot of emotion in your stories. The smut side was also very, very hot. And the anger on Frank's side of things was brilliant. It was an all round great story so well done! <3

wowwowwow. <33
Bad Luck said everything i was thinking, though, so i'm not going to repeat it twice.

I Really Enjoyed This.

The Combination Of Smut And Emotion Was Brilliant.
xx

I figured that I’d post another comment, just to make sure you’d see it. :]]

Wow. Well I started to read this last night but then I got all sleepy and decided that I couldn’t concentrate on what I was reading and talking about – oh well, though. Here is the comment. :cute:

First off, how it starts. It’s just... you describe setting so well. There are always little bits that are so strange but they fit. Like how they’re watching a specific episode of Star Trek. Like, there’s being detailed by saying boring shit, but then you always just seem to write about... I don’t know... details that shouldn’t matter but they do.

Hmm. I wonder what Gerard hears. (...Haha. I totally already can guess what he hears.) But sneaky, sneaky Gerard – waiting until he knows everyone is distracted before going to see Frank.

Mikey mumbles something incoherent mid-slumber, something that twists his golden-brown eyebrows into worrying shapes, and restlessly tosses his head back and forth.

I know that line is unimportant to the story line, but I think it made my heart giggle. I mean, I don’t know – I just thought it was a cute thing to add in. Oh, and also Gerard kissing his brother goodnight. :tehe: Even though those probably weren’t vital pieces of information. I don’t know. Okay I’ll stop going on about those parts and get to the better parts. (;

And ooh, what’s this. Hello Frank. I’m trying to figure out why only Gerard can hear him. Is it like, he’s listening for Frank, or the others just can’t hear it? And then what? What if they fuck, will the rest of the band hear it? o.O Maybe I’m thinking about that too much. But I’m sure it’ll be handled quite well. Er... if that makes sense. And doesn’t sound dirty. Hahaha.

In the darkness Frank is sprawled out on his stomach across the bottom bunk, face mashed into the pillow as he feigns sleep.

From that, I don’t even know, I just get a really good image of Frank from that one line. And there’s something about that that already makes me smile at him. Like, this is a character I’m going to like. Yes. :tehe: Oh and also might I add that “fragile ribbons of moonlight” is absolutely beautiful. Ah, just lets me picture it in my mind.

Ahaha oh, Gerard. There’s no use in asking “What did you get up to then?” when you already know. And then there’s something about the way you describe those images, like, it sounds more beautiful than dirty. I know that’s not what you were going for, but I bet it’ll get sexier later on. :tehe:

“Can’t I see you with your clothes on? In the morning?”

Aww! But oh, Frank. It’s kind of funny that he just chooses that moment to confess, but then sort of sad when Gerard doesn’t understand. Poor Frank, just standing there naked, having Gerard laugh at him. And he’s being so honest too, aw.

“Jesus, Gerard! You don’t have to be such a dick about it!”

My thoughts exactly. :XD

“How does that feel, you bastard?” Frank rages. Even standing four or five inches shorter, he still manages to loom somehow, his anger swelling against Gerard’s buzzing frame.

Haha! This is too funny. I mean, for a Frerard that is supposed to be smutty. I suppose it’s not Frank’s fault, I mean Gerard’s kind of being a dick. And he might have deserved that. And it totally might be leading up to hot hot sex. BUT WHO KNOWS? I shall continue reading to find out. :tehe:

“Damn right I hit you, you crazy fuck. You attacked me!” Hahaha! Seriously, I’m laughing too hard. I don’t know, just imagining him saying that – fucking hilarious. Okay, okay, I’m going to get to reading more. Yay (:

There’s something about Gerard giving Frank what he wants that makes me sort of... sad. Like yes, Frank is going to get to be with Gerard but then he can’t tell anyone, or fall in love with him? And the way that Gerard practically reduces Frank to nothing, leaving him to answer with only “want you”, it’s just kind of making me sad.

And then the repetition of “please, please, please” is just even more heartbreaking. But yes, the rest of it is really well-written. It comes off as intelligent and sexy. :tehe: But really. It wasn’t awkward or anything, and seemed realistic. I’m glad I didn’t have to hear the words “cock” or “dick” every two sentences. I’m especially glad that I didn’t have to read a dialogue filled with moans and curses. It was really descriptive, and yes, hot.

I like how it just ends, suddenly, like that. Emotions everywhere. And then how you leave it, with the unmade and broken promises. It leaves me wondering what else is going to happen to them, but then again, I’d rather not know, you know? I’m perfectly satisfied with knowing what happened to them. I really quite liked the sentimentality at the end.

You, Miss Fink, have succeeded in writing another wonderful one-shot, which I love. Shame you got so few comments, though. :cheese: I feel that I must go recc it on the Pimping and Reccing Thread. I shall go do that riiiight... now. Yes. x)

This was amzazing! :XD

Claimed! Muahahaha.

I am now off to read it. x)