Luv this one! I was a little confused with the timeline, but it's all good now. I love you're style, it's not really full of detail, but that doesn't matter, there's no reason it needs it. There were a few awkward-tense spots, but that might have just been me confusing the timeline for myself. Other than that, it was awesome! This is one of my favorite chapters so far! Right behind the "Yes girls he is mysterious and I know that you are falling in love with him" chapter =D
February 11th, 2010 at 01:44am