Can You Feel It - Comments

Wow.
I mean, seriously - wow.
That was beautiful and made me want to go and listen to MJ again.
Btw: 'Can You Feel It?' is one of my favourite Jackson 5 songs.
Wonderful one shot.

This was too cute.
I love it a lot.
=D

This was perfect!!! I love it!! =D

PFFT. Omg. That...was...woah. Like...this is my new favorite story. O_O Haha! It was so sweet at the end. *giggles* I say 5/5 Pfft. If you could actually RATE that's what I'd give it. :]

Speedy Gonzalez:

·I like the detail in the first paragraph it sets the scene well. I can actually see Michael reacting that way in that paragraph, it’s sweet.
He knew I didn't like dancing, but he always managed to get [me] on my feet

·The short sentences in the second paragraph give good emphasis on the fact that the parents are fighting, perhaps they fight so much that the amount of short sentences reflects that? Or maybe I’m looking into it too much.

·Not quite sure how it would be harder to tell what the person looked like when they are closer to you, surely it would be a little bit easier? I like Michael’s concern for her welfare, it is the kind of thing he would do.

·I think the detail of her diary being the only person she can talk to emphasises her situation well.
·his singing (not he’s)
·It’s sad how he goes out at night just so he can make friends more easily, but it does sum up his situation well too.

·I like his sudden question of them becoming friends even though they only knew each other for a little while. I found it really cute.

·I like how he doesn’t get that she doesn’t know that he is Michael Jackson but then goes with the flow to see her reaction, to see if she likes him or not.

·His reaction to her being excited about him is cute and is definitely the kind of thing he would do.

·Front of [me] holding my hands

·It’s funny how she spaces out, thinking it’s just a dream. Her getting snapped back to reality was funny.

·I only danced to Michael Jackson. Wait, he was right in front of me... :lmfao

·I love how she is stubborn and doesn’t want to dance; it’s sweet how he asks her to dance with him as he sings along.

·"Everybody dances Jane." He would definitely say this! I can picture it well.

·I love the detail of it being their song and yet after 3 years she’s still reluctant to dance! He’s so sweet when he emphasises it’s their song.

·I love how she tries to play it cool when she’s caught off guard.

·The ending is so sweet I really love it!

All in all I thought this was really sweet and I could picture everything really well! :cute:

thanks so much! & thanks alot for the corrections. i'm still working on my grammar & such :/ i've always been bad at it. but thanks a lot.

& sorry... i kept forgetting the word 'me'! lol but thank you again. & also i suppose it was harder to see michael when he was closer was because that one street light was far away. :)

·I like the detail in the first paragraph it sets the scene well. I can actually see Michael reacting that way in that paragraph, it’s sweet.
He knew I didn't like dancing, but he always managed to get [me] on my feet

·The short sentences in the second paragraph give good emphasis on the fact that the parents are fighting, perhaps they fight so much that the amount of short sentences reflects that? Or maybe I’m looking into it too much.

·Not quite sure how it would be harder to tell what the person looked like when they are closer to you, surely it would be a little bit easier? I like Michael’s concern for her welfare, it is the kind of thing he would do.

·I think the detail of her diary being the only person she can talk to emphasises her situation well.
·his singing (not he’s)
·It’s sad how he goes out at night just so he can make friends more easily, but it does sum up his situation well too.

·I like his sudden question of them becoming friends even though they only knew each other for a little while. I found it really cute.

·I like how he doesn’t get that she doesn’t know that he is Michael Jackson but then goes with the flow to see her reaction, to see if she likes him or not.

·His reaction to her being excited about him is cute and is definitely the kind of thing he would do.

·Front of [me] holding my hands

·It’s funny how she spaces out, thinking it’s just a dream. Her getting snapped back to reality was funny.

·I only danced to Michael Jackson. Wait, he was right in front of me... :lmfao

·I love how she is stubborn and doesn’t want to dance; it’s sweet how he asks her to dance with him as he sings along.

·"Everybody dances Jane." He would definitely say this! I can picture it well.

·I love the detail of it being their song and yet after 3 years she’s still reluctant to dance! He’s so sweet when he emphasises it’s their song.

·I love how she tries to play it cool when she’s caught off guard.

·The ending is so sweet I really love it!

All in all I thought this was really sweet and I could picture everything really well! :cute:

This story is so cute! Cuter than kittens.

Omg! This story is totally adorable! It was extremely aesthetically pleasing like I could just about picture everything!!