When You Refuse to Let Go - Comments

Oh, i cryed so much at the last bit,
though i still dont compleatly understand
the what is of going on....did he make a deal
with the reaper? did whip have amnesia?
why did eric die...was he hit by a car?
D'; i dont get it..WAAAAAAAAAA!!!

The last part sent violent shivers down my arms.
Very, very, very fantastically written.

Story/Review Game

The story was very well written. A definate tear-jerker, which is always my favorite. The only thing I really found wrong with it is that were were a lot of sentences that could have been made shorter, they just seem very long to me.
For example: It hurt to sit back and just watch Andreas, clearly remembering all those times when he had have the man's body pressed against his, his fingers running through the hair that always was a mess no matter what Andreas would do to it, having Andreas look down at him with that warm smile making him all bubbly on the inside.
I liked that the plot of this story wasn't one of those "return and live happily ever after" stories. I liked the fact that Eric died and the fact that Andreas didn't kiss him back like kissing was about to be outlawed or something.
Great story. Great plot.

I love this loads; from the tear-jerking plot to the bittersweet ending.
Amazing job.

One Shot For One Shot

Other than some grammatical errors, I truly love this. It's really beautiful and sad at the same time.
Even though Eric died at the end, I'm glad that he was able to die knowing that Andreas did love him. It's too bad that it happened last minute, because then they would have been able to stay together.

I liked the plot too. It was different in a good way, of course. :]
Great job.

I don't know if I should rather Aw or Ew...

It's so sweet how Eric still believes in Andreas though in the end he's losing his hope that Andreas will ever remember But at the same time it's so sad that I really want to cry and that I feel awfully sorry for little Eric.
The ending confused me as I told you. Perhaps it does because I don't like endings where everything could have turned out completely right but turned out completely wrong Andreas DID remember Eric ;_; So why is Eric dying then? (I know the answer but I still want to complain about that xD)
That's evil ;_; But at least Eric dies with the knowledge that Andreas had loved him equally as much as he loved him <3 and hopefully they'll meet again in heaven (or hell XD)

I really do love it <3 Love... damn my comment is pure nonsense >.<

I hope your happy! You made me cry.
Well I did love it.
I like that it's a simple idea but you made it better by describing everything that was being felt and going on in the setting. I can tell from this piece that you are a strong writer to a point where you can be really vauge on things like setting but still get your point across with emotion. A lot of authors are epic failures at that. I like that you made it kind of a happy ending but not really. I guess you could call it bittersweet. I also like that not everything is revealed in the first paragraph. You learn more and more about the characters and their whole situation the more you read, which again, is hard for some people.

A couple of the sentences in the beginning were a bit awkward but other than that it was really good (: