Holly - Comments

thank you so much for making so many chapters your just a wonderful person

please don't make him kill her or kill himself this story is nice your the author you judge anyway

YOUR GOING TO KILL HOLLY! oh no! I love it though and I'm so happy that Luke is in jail.. he deserves it for being such a prick and paist and SHES PREGO WITH HER BROTHERS EGGO!? horrific but terrific!

Ahhhh! Im goig crazy! This story is so bone chilling to me. It's really goooooood!

Oh my goodness. I don't even know what to say.

This chapter hit so many emotional levels its ridiculous, in a good way of course. Your ability to write this without sounding whiney or over dramatic is astounding, its like an actual novel and nothing like a 'fan fiction' or some sort of amateur work. Really, you're quite brilliant!

And honestly, this chapter seriously broke my heart, with Tom being accused of so many awful things- by his own family nonetheless. And Holly finally revealing what was going on, especially what Luke did to her. That part I'm still trying to wrap my brain around, its just so disgusting and upsetting for Holly's character. But I think the last sentence of the chapter is what's really got me.
"With tears in my eyes, I realised the only way to end her suffering was to end her life."
The final chapter and epilogue are probably going to be the most heart breaking chapters, and as much as I hope they won't be (because I'm a baby and suck with sad things) I can't wait to read it!

Honestly, this story is phenomenal! You're a fabulous writer!

Oh my Sykes!
Katie this is one of the chapters the surpised me out of the story so far purely amazing
you written this so well and it was like watching a movie as i kept reading.
I hope Luke and David rott in jail beccause of their asses Tom is thining about taking Holly's life
I feel bad for Holly being a like a zombie
UPDATE SOONNN!
even though i wish this didn't have to end so soon:(
Clara

Ok I read that as fast as I could so I could tell you how amazing it was Katie FABULOUS! you just came on msn so I will finish your comments there :D

I am slightly disgusted that she's pregnant with her brother's baby. That is gross. :S
and Oliver accusing poor Tom of raping Holly made me sad. Although I was happy when Holly spoke up and didn't let Tom take the blame! That was much better. :P
And DIE LUKE for hitting my Oliver. I should spit in his face. lmao.

Holy crow, holy crow. No way. Did not like the sound of the end of that chapter. Made me all worried about what's going to happen to the pair. And damn Luke and David. I hate their guts, I really do. Bastards!
This was beautifully written. I love your work, as always!
Update soon! :D

So good! haha

Excited for the next part! I really like your description. It's not intense to the point that you read so much and have to stop because your brain has taken in a lot, but the plot hadn't really changed at all yet.

:)

uh-oh!
someones gonna go up there and see them!!
lovelovelove this!!
can't wait for the next update
--Sarahh

Well Katie again you fail to dissapoint in an enthralling tale of hidden secrets, mischief and of course... Forbidden love.. (Which may possibly be my favorite thing n the entire world!) You have enraptured readers time and time again dear, and I have most obvously been failing to comment on all chapters but take no offense. For I am usually talking to you anyways soo ya.. I see no point in double comments but I am feeling a bit writer esque today. Especially since I am happy to hear Harriet will be fully Reloaded soon :D I am sooo bored without her.. Anyways! I am off topic!! Great job dear!! It really was spectacular.. Unlike some stories I have to read... Regardless.. I can not wait for the finale.. And pray that there shall be an encore... Or another of the sort.. (Even thought I have no dea who this fan fic is about!)

Oh MyGolly gee Genkers?
that was the most amazing chapter i think i have ever read on this for ages!
I'm glad you updated
I always feel strange because one chapter i feeel sorry for Tom then the next Hollly i reall don't see why she won't tell anyone but Tom.

And Oliver can get over my hair just dose the same thing but i deal with it
Clara

CHAPTER 23:

I am addicted to this story, as are a lot of other people from all the feedback you're recieving for this.
91 SUBSCRIBERS?!?!
you are very good; spectacular, for that matter.

I think one of the reasons that you're doing so well is because this is the only story you're working on. You can put all your brain power and creative juices into this one piece and make it ultra great.
People really appreciate when you put everything into something like this; the plot, the characters, the backstories. Which brings me to the added exposition that was in this chapter alone with Tom looking into Holly's diary, and utterly, her past.

Throughout the entire story, the reader has been deeply informed about Holly's misfortunes caused by her very own brother and his friend. You were smart enough to not only add that into the diary, but to start from the beginning when things were actually alright in her world, and then quickly progress into dark times.

He's sitting in her room, and it never even occured to me the absent feeling of her not being there; just you adding that in made me appreciate your writing so much more because you're always doing little things like that that other authors would probably forget to mention.

You even had names for the stores she shopped at and how she hadn't shopped there before; emphasizing her spoiled nature. GENIUS.

I can't wait to see where this story is headed, and I will always be there to bow down to your greatness :)

CHAPTER 22:

I absolutely love how long you make all the chapters. They're in small font and still takes a while to scroll down through all of it, which only shows the reader what a marvelous talent you have, since you can exaggerate an event for a really long time while keeping it relevant with the story, and allowing the characters to develop smoothly throughout the chapters of the story.

This whole chapter was about Tom waking up and finally having sex with Holly, and yet you made it an entire chapter, while the majority would probably only write a few paragraphs or so.

Another thing I love is your descriptions. I know I probably tell you this all the time, but the more writing I read of your's really shows me your potential. You are absolutely fantastic in detail, and make me feel as though I'm really there.

The way you transition from Holly feeling tired, and then to Tom becoming more and more desperate as their engagement becomes more heated adds a lot of realism to your literature, considering that you write the processes and inner turmoils and passion going through both their minds dead on.

I can't say it enough, this is one of my favorite stories.

Ahhh I love it :) Haworth is a lovely place, have you ever been? It's quite a long way away from Sheffield...since I live near Haworth...

But anyway, I can feel tension between Holly and Tom now, it's making me nervous -_- as well as Luke coming. Eeek, update soon!
xx

So it seems the idea of Tom jizzing in his pants has had a good reception from your readers, haha!
How did we even come up with that, haha?!

Anyway onto the story, you would have got this comment yesterday but my phone died on me, :(
I hate waking up in the morning and it's freezing cold, my bed may be right next to the radiator but in Autumn and Winter when I move my quilt away from me it turns freezing in an instant, so I liked the first part.

I do have to agree with Turry Sykes!!, I'm getting sick of her childish ways but I know that you need to do that to prove that she still is quite young and it highlights the fact of why her and Tom's 'relationship' would be frowned upon.

I was waiting for him to tell, I was so sure that he was going to tell and then he didn't and I was a little bit shocked but he did seem to change his mind quite a bit so maybe he will end up telling.

“You having a wobbly with each other?” he grinned cluelessly. Haha, I'm hearing that loads lately!

Leave her alone, pillock. Haha, yay for the word pillock.

Carol seems to side with Holly even though Tom's her actual son and it annoys me a little but I understand why, like the daughter she never had possibly.

Holly seems so persuasive too, she knows what she needs to do to get her own way and she rarely hesitates to do it, I could have got her completely wrong but it's just a little thought of mine.

I do feel sorry for her that she hasn't made any friends but I do have a feeling she's got off to a bit of a rocky start with people, mainly because of this;

She didn’t look uncomfortable standing there all alone, but rather more impatient; teenagers all brushed past her without a glance, but when one girl did look at her - a fair haired, orange toned girl with too much black eye liner, along with several similar looking girls tagging behind, Holly averted her eyes straight down to the ground.

Do they have spider's legs for eyelashes too? If so then I know what type of girls they are and I'm not too fond of them!

Oh, and her brother, as he’s coming to see her on Saturday.

I'm excited but scared at the same time because first of all he is sick but secondly he will bring a lot of tension maybe, but I don't know.

I think that's it but if I remember anything that I wanted to add onto this comment then be expecting another one, hehe!

:)

lmfao. that author's note made me laugh so long. :P

“You having a wobbly with each other?” he grinned cluelessly. Cutest thing I have ever heard in my life. Made me soo happy, it did.
Anyone else getting a bit sick of Holly and her childish ways? Kinda making me want to slap her, in all honesty. xD
And Oliver fixing his hair was priceless. He knows that girls like me would be staring at him if he was waiting outside of my school, so he has to look perfect. :P I love that boy. ;)
And Tom, poor Tom. It makes me upset that he is so indecisive about everything.
Update soon! :) <3

this story is amazing and you are doing farley well and I agre with Tom jizzing inhis pants...

I cant wait to see what Holly's night with him and what Tom will do when Luke comes. I am all to eager to know and update faster!!

Bonjour Katie!
This is amazing so far abosultly amazing as always
hahaha Tom and Oliver BOB THE BUILDER!
Holly and Tom need to be together
Gahh Why dose Wanker Luke have to reutrn it seems so much better without him
More SOON!
Clara