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  • zanigrl51195

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    *energetic applause* OMG! that was such a good story!!!! i cant wait to start ur next one!!! especially cuz i have inside information (actually i just know waht the people look like but still...) ok imma shut up now so i can go read that story!
    April 28th, 2010 at 01:11am
  • The Color Abi

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    The ending of this made me cry a little; this has to be one of the most gripping stories I've ever had the pleasure in reading.
    You did such an amazing job with it, well done :)
    April 27th, 2010 at 06:48pm
  • x.SocialReject.x

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    that was a beautiful ending lovey!!! I'm going to read the next one right now!!!

    Lovers you Brookie!!
    April 27th, 2010 at 04:38am
  • figwmwrtbb

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    YAY! ebonys not dead! xDDD
    i wonder what faiths power is? i wanna know now
    god tristan was soooooo messed up kinda scary :(
    i dont wanthis story to end but if it does i'll just read it again :)
    update soon :D
    April 24th, 2010 at 03:32am
  • zanigrl51195

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    wow... *sigh* tristan just couldnt amount to the tristan in Kissed by an Angel could he? great story I'm glad ebony didnt die i would have been sad... i liked tristans incentive for killing everybody very original
    April 23rd, 2010 at 02:08am
  • x.SocialReject.x

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    damn what a douche!! I can't believe he would do that. I understand the unjust, but everyone? includeing innocent children? what a sick basterd.....YOU ARE SO GOOD AT DOING THIS!!! playing with your readers emotions and describing scenes so that what you saw we can see too.

    I lovers you brookie!!
    April 21st, 2010 at 04:38am
  • The Color Abi

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    I'm so happy Ebony is still alive!
    It's a shame that they had to betray her to catch the killer though...
    April 20th, 2010 at 08:21pm
  • Penniluvskisses

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    This story is greay. Ive only read the first chapter, yet Im hooked. Good job :3
    April 20th, 2010 at 04:02am
  • figwmwrtbb

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    i cant believe they killed ebony T.T
    what the fuck is wrong with them?! she would never hurt a fly and they go and kill her but with what jason said, i think tristan was the one killing people and making it seem like it was ebony i mean it makes sense now :(
    i justcant wont believe ebony is dead T.T please dont let her be dead
    update soon
    April 19th, 2010 at 01:37am
  • The Color Abi

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    O_O
    Is Ebony dead or not?
    April 16th, 2010 at 11:49am
  • zanigrl51195

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    so... ebony is... is... gone?... like... forever? im sad now. wah hahahahahaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!
    April 15th, 2010 at 02:53am
  • x.SocialReject.x

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    WTF?!?!!?!?! So they decided that they were just going to stab one of them and see if that helps?!?!?!?! WHAT ABOUT EBONY?! THOSE FUCKERS LET HER DIE!!! gGAH DAMN! IF I WERE GERARD I WOULD RIP THEIR HEADS OFF!!!WTH!!! GAH I'M SO UPSET1!!!

    but it was wonerful brooke look how much emotion you pulled out of me! I can't wait to see the end. I lovers you Alice
    April 15th, 2010 at 12:30am
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    (damn nter key made it submit when I wasn't ready!!) Who can they believe that she did those jerks!! Are they that sacred of ebony? damn it all to pooy hell!!! gah brook!! You took my heart and just started wailing and jumping on it, I about cried when you wrote about her and Gerard screaming for each other. ugh such good writing!! yYou really gripped us brookie!!

    I lovers you girl and I can't wait for the ending!!!
    April 9th, 2010 at 03:22am
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    FUCK NO!!!!! IT CAN'T END LIKE THIS!!! RWAR!!
    April 9th, 2010 at 03:19am
  • zanigrl51195

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    NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! D':
    April 9th, 2010 at 02:13am
  • Daisy Chainsaw

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    I love this chapter, it's soo sad though.
    It's so sad how Ebony and Gerard love each other and then ebony dies,
    PLZ DON"T LET HER DIE!
    LET GEE SAVE HER!!!
    This chapter made me cry.
    April 9th, 2010 at 01:32am
  • The Color Abi

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    Wait!
    Is it Sarah?
    April 8th, 2010 at 08:49pm
  • The Color Abi

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    All throughout the chapter I thought it was Ebony; the end just confirmed this for me.
    Wow... just... Wow...
    April 7th, 2010 at 10:13pm
  • chasingstars;

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    Well, I just wanted to state the fact that you have a new reader. And for a story so far along, that's quite an accomplishment. It takes a pretty damn good story to keep a new reader involved with a story so far along, and this is what you brought to me. I must say, I am impressed. I didn't want to read this at first- not for any reason specifically, just that it didn't really catch my eye- but I clicked back after a second thought. I am extremely glad I did.

    I feel that this work is- well, exactly that. Work. It feels like you've put a lot of work into every aspect of this story. The characters are extremely diverse but lifelike- strange considering that they're not human- and you really grow to like them. The story is paced extremely well, and you left hints of suspence at the perfect times. Everything seems to flow very well, and I have only noticed a couple flaws in grammar/spelling which seem to be typing errors rather than anything else.

    I like your style. A lot of things a lot of authors can't get the concept of is variety in their sentences, and you've nailed it pretty well. There are some that are short and simple, others that are more complex, which is good and keeps things from being monotonous. You also break up paragraphs in rather good places.

    I'll certainly be following this one. A question, though- think you could comment / message me when you update? I never check my emails.

    I'll comment more on what I see next chapter.
    March 30th, 2010 at 07:21pm
  • zanigrl51195

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    *sarcastically* what a happy ending!!! jk that totally caught me by surprise nice touch my stomach like dropped when i read that. it was so casual to!
    March 27th, 2010 at 04:01pm