Heaven-Sent. - Comments

I can't really get over how much I love this.
I was kind of freaking out abnormally at the start, then I basically smiled for the rest.
I love Gerard as an angel with big soft wings. I loved that you described their softness as 'unearthly' it just created nice images in my head.
It's stunningly beautiful, I really look forward to seeing how it turns out.

I love that summary. :cheese: I'm a sucker for stories where the character's kind of die right off the bat, so I think this is going to be really good.

I feel a bit silly, but what is the song coming out of his alarm clock? :shifty It sounds familiar but I don't think I know it. :XD

Your description of Mikey's distress was, quite simply, beautiful. It sounds odd to say, seeing as he's in such distress, but you wrote it quite well. I could actually imagine just how terrified he was, crawling around his apartment and sobbing. It's such an upsetting moment but so amazing.

It's warm and soothing, as if it's putting tiny little band-aids on the sores from the smoke... I found the line adorable, just the mental image of little band-aids helping Mikey. Adorable.

Your description of Gerard's eyes was actually quite unique, which is pretty surprising seeing as there are only so many ways to describe his eyes and after reading MCR fanfiction for two and a half years, I thought I'd heard them all. :XD

...or his bad eyesight has gone to a whole new level. :lmfao

There's Chinese food in Heaven? That just made my day. :XD

Even though this is a Gerard/Mikey story, I think it is one of the most unique ones I've ever read. The thought of him looking after him as an angel, not a brother, is something I don't believe I've seen before but I really like it. However, I like how you didn't make him a completely kind soul and that he's a little rough around the edges.

I also love how you used the prompt I gave you, using it as a springboard for the rest of the story.

I wasn't expecting Mikey to go back home, so I'm very excited to see where else you go with it. I'm very happy that you chose to write it for my contest, it is superb so far and I didn't actually find any faults with this chapter. :cute:

YOU'RE WELCOME! :crazy:
Tell me that you don't like it when I steal your virginity! :con:

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I loved this. It’s so soft and beautiful that I don’t regret saying that your angel Gerard is better than my dead Gerard. I remember saying that betaing this might give me some courage to write on my own, but now I know that I was wrong; I can’t write anything about a dead Gerard gaining wings and whatnot after reading this. It’d be immoral. This is too good, Erikababe. Very beautiful and it feels so real on its own that I don’t care that I don’t even believe in guardian angels that much, y’know?

Alright, Mikey is so naive and innocent that he’s probably the cutest Mikey ever. I can’t find the words to describe him, because it’s His doubts and uncertainties about everything around Gerard that makes me love him so much. I love how everything is so doubtful in his mind, and he asks questions and tries to get his answers on his own before getting anyone else to answer him. He’s awesome.

And Gerard…
Yeah. That’s it.

I wanna know why Gerard comes and goes whenever he wants; does he have any other people needing his guardian angel’s thing, or does he only comes to Mikey when he’s in danger? Does it mean that Mikey had never been in danger before in his life, or that humans need to reach some specific age to find about their guardian angels? I am not Mikey so I won’t try to think of answers for them. I want you to tell me those. Please.

Now, a couple more comments, but only with emoties:

"Where's your halo?" :lmfao

Gerard finally returns with a bag of Chinese takeout :crazy: [meaning, wow, there's Chinese takeout in Heaven!]

Yeah, I think those were the only things that made me laugh about this :cute: the rest of it is just extremely beautiful. Thanks for another great and beautiful story, and it doesn’t matter if people don’t give you feedback; it’s gorgeous (: