Your Flawless Looks and Soulful Eyes - Comments

Before I start, I should probably mention I am a huge DT fan. Seriously major. ;)

Being in this little writing community, it's difficult to find any David Tennant story, never mind a good one, and it was by complete chance that I stumbled upon this today. And I have to say; I fell in love with this.
I don't like stories that are too fast and this was the perfect pace, it had no filler through it, it was clearly all important, there was no lengthy discription that is tiring to read and the grammer was perfect, everything I look for in a story.
I'm a fan of slash pairings but for some reason I'd never even thought about it with David and I'm now wondering why...You made me a fan of that too, if any of them are half as good as yours.

Thank you so much for writing this, for it's nice to see another David Tennant story in the world,If you ever write any more I'll most definately read them. =]
Well done.

since you asked:) i think ti was really gd, you had room to drag it out a little tho but if you were heading for a short peice it was great!

since you asked:) i think ti was really gd, you had room to drag it out a little tho but if you were heading for a short peice it was great!

I like this story. It's so sweet though I was a bit frustrated when it finished. I wanted more. See, that's how good this story is.

xoxo
Annie

I really liked this. The pace was set just right, the descriptions were nice and I didn't find too many errors. It really wasn't noticeable that you have never written slash before, either. So yeah, all in all it was good.

I like that you started it with him entering the classroom and going straight into the action and the story, instead of beating around the bush and delaying the story by putting a bunch of descriptions and back-story information in the beginning. It made the story flow very nicely, and we still found out what we needed to know in the right places.

The way Jacoby was trying to avoid looking at his teacher so much that he was getting rude, was interesting to me. I'm surprised stuff like that doesn't happen more often to teenagers when they try to play cool in front of people they like and still not make fools of themselves. I kind of recognize myself in this, so I definitely like it.

The part before he enters detention reminded me of an old episode of Lizzy McGuire, and that made it really funny to me. With how he's scared to enter, and how he doesn't want to be one of the hopeless students that don't really try in school. And then instead of a room full of rebellious teenagers, it's just Mr. McDonald.

I think the poem was really cute, and good, actually. :tehe: It's a nice touch, definitely, and a good way to move on to when Jacoby is starting to show more obvious signs of his crush on the teacher. It's cute how he gets all hot and flustered, and then even knocks the glass to the floor, and then we have that little cliché moment, but it's really sweet.

You have a very good language. Yeah, I felt I needed to comment on that since I know you're a Swede like me. There was only one thing that really sounded off to me, and that was
On second hand he could probably make anything look good.
I don't think I've ever seen that expression before. Just saying. (:

Other than that, it was a good story.
Thanks for entering. :arms:

*squeals*
Ok, childish, "I-LOVE-DAVID-TENNANT" bit over.
I really like your way of writing. I could honestly believe this was happening, you write with a romantic reality that screams art. It's like the clash of two distinct styles of writing. A story surely Mr Tennant would be proud of!
:D

LOVE IT ^^

This one-shot was awesomely written!
You're one of my favorite authors, Frida. It hurts my feelings when you say that it's crap, because that means that the things I write is just really a waste of time! Haha.

I mean, if you think that THIS is crap, then what would you think of my poor writing-skillz? :cute:

I love the way you write, you make the whole story so beautiful

xo,

Alex.

this was freakin awesome!
:) (: