Oh, Emetophobia! - Comments

This is just downright amazing. I'm not gonna bust my ass writing a kickass review, so I'm just gonna say that you do, in fact, have a talent. Although, I am pretty damn sure people tell you this on a daily basis, and you must be so sick of hearing it by now, but I am saying it anyway. Your story is too superb to be fiction. It's so real in a way that it isn't. I'm at a loss for words which usually doesn't happen to me, so I'm being completely honest with you.

This is one of the best stories, not just on this site, but one of the best, most candidly detailed piece of writing I've ever read. And trust me, I've read A LOT of crappy bullshit on this site. You and about three other authors I think have major potential.

Fantastic. Pleeease update soon.

Again, when I saw that Mibba updated a story on my subscription I hoped this would be the one, but I thought it unlikely since I only read the last chapter over the weekend. Oh, Emetophobia! was on the list, though, and it made my day. Even though I have to go to Tae Kwon Do tonight after I've stayed up late, I don't feel nearly as shitty as I could. Thank you for the uplift.
By the way, your approach to changing which character you're following seems well planned and it flows. Keep your talent coming.
-Erin

I have to say, when I checked my email and saw story updates, I was rather excited at the idea of your story being on the list. When I saw that it was... well... I squealed. I suppose it's rather good luck my parents decided to leave before that.
I'm not very well off in vocabulary, so I can't find many adjectives at the moment, but one does come to mind rather immediately: brilliant. This comment is obviously not long enough to truely let you know what an amazing writer you are, but... it'll have to do for now.
-Erin

Stumbled across this story & I have to say:
You are so freaking talented at writing.
You made me feel as if I were the one puking my brains out.
I absolutely beg you to update :]
xx

how come i only just found this...
the way it explains...absolutely everything is so absolutely, poetic....

i want more and i demand it now lol

I'll come back and comment when I get back from school, cause I sorta gotta leave in about ten minutes, and I still haven't done my hair. :tehe: It's 06:39. O_o

GODDAMN.
you did it again : )
another amazing story...

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE.
I'm inarticulate, unintelligent, and stunned speechless.
So all you're going to get from me is that squeal, and some incoherent bullshit,
something like: OHMYGODILOVEDTHATUPDATE. The absinthe thing... well, I
have an obsession with the concept. :] And the playing/partying thing was
just perfect. Honestly, god. That update was so... raw... It didn't evoke sympathy like the
other two did. It was kind of brutal.

AMAZING.
AMAZING.
AMAZING.
:cheese:

EDIT: You need to change the chapter description.
I think it should read more like: "A bad filler? Why no, not really."

"...while he himself was truly nothing but a spatter of spit on a brick wall. For a person who felt little and thought a lot, places like those where he had grown up were nothing but boiling kettles of regrets. Looking back, everything could have been done better."
No explanation, just adored those very well-constructed lines, i get sick of saying you make the best metaphors but damnit they're so brilliant.

No long gush-y sappiness tonight i'm afraid, just a reminder that even chapters that you deem as fillers are still pretty much 10x better than other author's most exciting, adrenaline-induced climatic scenes where four people die, two get pregnant and seven car-crash rapes later we find that frank has actually been having a love-affair with eliza cuts all along (okay mental vomit over that one, the thought makes me want to cry..)

But seriously, basically that chapter was wonderful and gave me such a deeper insight into these beautiful characters you're constructed, i'd happily read chapters you deem as fillers in every single scene, in fact you should sell them off to other people to make us all look a litter better ;)

Okay in hindsight, that comment was extremely sappy and gushy, i just can't help it with you

Your words are so captivating, it’s difficult to get over. Not only is it the somewhat sinister occurrence but the way you describe and portray the happenings, helps the reader to comprehend a lot of what’s occurring. I can easily picture the events in my head as I was reading them on the screen.

Wonderful.

Woahh. Amazing, as usual. Can't wait for the next update.
xoxo

How the hell do you make puking sound so... so... poetic? It's ridiculous! How the lines flow... that shouldn't be possible, especially with something a disgusting as puking. I suppose it just shows how well you write, though. You're obviously amazing. Get published.
Post more as soon as you're happy with it.
-Erin

Wow. This story is really amazing.
I've subscribed and I'm in awe.

I have con crit as well as compliments for you:

Far as con crit goes, the only bad thing about this story is that sometimes the poetry swallows the story line, and I lose touch of what is going on. The actual poetic style itself is to die for, but at points I didn't really understand what was going on. So maybe, just try to balance that out a bit. Compliments, well...it's an amazing idea which is beautifully executed. You kind of wash the reader into the story and let it swallow them. You repeat words and phrases just enough and in just the right places. I absolutely adore the way Gerard was introduced into the story using the 'Inhale', 'Exhale' pattern and the whole story is just stunning to read.

:cheese: ♥ ♥ ♥

Jerk:

I'm subscribing, and on Mibba that really means something to me. Well written.

One crit, and a small one.

it says in the latest chapter that his movements were robotized, which I don't think is a word. I'd try "robotic."

;)

Amazing work.

I forgot to tell you. xD I write in MS Word and it didn't point it out as an error so I went with it, but I actually do like your word more. :XD

Maybe not the best story to read while feeling sick, but still overwhelmingly worth every little cringe. :]]
I've always been the type to get too involved with the thoughts and emotions of fictional characters,
but your writing doesn't even make me feel guilty about it. It just seems so real, so honest...
This kid could be living next door to me.

I'm in love with this story.
The way you write makes the whole thing play out like a movie in my head,
and I'm completely and totally captivated (not to mention, have been from the start).

Buh.

I'm not doing you justice.

There.

you're an amazing writer, i love this.
really i do.
*subscribes*

God, I only read the first chapter and loved it dearly. You have a way with words and I like it :D you had me hooked from beginning to end. I'll probably end up reading this over and over. I'm going to subscribe now.

Alright, I have been waiting for a captivating story like this for a long time now. I can honestly say that the way you describe the events that are occurring so candidly makes for a great atmosphere, almost eerie like. I have to admit though, I did find myself having strong chest and stomach pains whilst reading this, and I am not sure whether or not it was your remarkable writing or if it was just me. The whole thing is so raw and direct that I found myself moving towards the edge of my seat. You are such a talented writer, although I am sure you already know that, and the way you portray your words and emotions is absolutely spectacular. It isn’t too poetic or lyrical, but it also isn’t boring or dull. Definitely not. I love stories like these and hope to find myself reading more.

I can already tell this is a masterpiece in the making. Astounding job.

okay why did i not know about this? Why haven't i read and devoured this until now? Why didn't i think of this concept myself?

Seriously sara, you do no wrong. I didn't think it was possible but you've turned such a sickening thing into brilliance, the way you described him throwing up (i can't believe i just typed that) was phenomenol, i never realised how many metaphors could be used for this act, i never realised how some of these metaphors could actually be beautiful.

The first chapter, with you describing his panic was palpable, you have a gift of one-liners, you just know exactly where to place them to create this huge domino effect upon me, creating drama and empathsis that paragraphs just couldn't do.
I'm impressed at how quickly you established Gerard's character, with only a few short sentences about him i already feel i know what you're trying to create.

I would copy and paste certain lines but i'd be here all day, i was hooked within the first chapter- and you know you have talent when a person wants to read more immediately after many elaborate metaphors of vomiting!

I saw this on the front page and when i saw the mini-description, teamed with the expressive title i just knew it was a golden idea, when i saw your screen name next to it i knew that i'd soon fall in love again.

, i could just coo and pour myself all over your writing all day, the thought of not subscribing is impossible, you deserve more feedback then you've already recieved, two pages just doesn't cut it i'm afraid!