December 28th, 2010 at 06:37pm
This took me longer than I thought it would 'cause I got distracted by dinner and food and stuff. >.<
ANYWAY, to get 'em out of the way, things that might be errors/confused me:
I woke up covered in a thin film of sweat which I put down to everything nut my dream. Not sure what that's meant to be. Not? But?
I did absolutely nothing except wonder round the house Pretty sure it would be wander.
They took advantage of my confusion, and slipped in. Shouldn't it be he?
Keeping my locked in. Should be me.
There was nothing that I had done that would make me want to hurt him like that. I'm feeling it should be there was nothing that I had done that would make him want to hurt me like that, but you probably weren't going for that anyway.
Most recent on s from Micah Should be ones, I reckon.
Okay. Now that I have nitpicked and prodded to my heart's content, I LOVED IT. Well. It was incredibly depressing and I think Micah's even more of a twat than before and he is really, really confusing me, but it was still kinda lovely and poetic in a, well, in a tortured and depressing way.
I just want Aph to be happy and for Micah to take the hint and realised he's been a selfish bastard and leave her alone. And maybe for Addy to beat him to a pulp. That would be kinda cool.
Just kidding. I could never condone violence, no, not me.
I'm curious now, though, which part did you hate?
I also hope Micah gets his just desserts or at least suffers scarring emotional pain at the hands of Aph. :D Probably won't happen but I like the thought. Or a pack of Rotweilers should maul him. :3
But strangely I also feel sorry for Micah seeing as he's really regretting what he's done and that he really does love her. Or does he? Damn him.