September 19th, 2009 at 10:53pm
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"I wanted a lilly."
OH MY GOD, this is SO gorgeous! XD Seriously, doing that to a poor boy that gave her a rose for their prom night when she wanted something else is seriously wicked. I love that. I've always loved wicked people, and I guess she's one of them. That's great. Some people don't understand why she would do that, I don't understand that either, but yeah, I think I can get her point. Maybe he thought they were perfect for each other and this was a test? Maybe she had once told him about lillies and he didn't pay attention, so she's punishing him?
I don't know what's her point, but honestly? I love that she's so sick, dement, crazy about lillies - not crazy about him.
I LOVED this. It's Gorgeous.
Hands down. Good luck in the contest :cute:
It’s such a shame. He’s such a lovely boy. Such a lovely, stupid boy. Stupid stupid stupid. That line literally gave me goosebumps. There's something not entirely right about this girl but it's not something that's very exposed, if that makes sense.
I won't quote all the lines but you just made it so obvious that there is something completely off with this girl. I love how naive Mikey is, how much he's enjoying himself right before he passes out. Poor, poor Mikey.
:cheese: I adore how you used that prompt. When it came to my mind, I was definitely not thinking it would be used like this. This was definitely a unique way to put it and you've definitely still got my attention. Why did she do this to him?
She can see her reflection in the pools of it at his bare feet. That line was fantastic and so eerie. :cheese:
“I wanted a lily.”
My God! All that because of a flower?! I... have nothing to say. That is probably one of the best twists I've ever read in anything. This oneshot kind of reminded me of the writing style of Stephen King, to be honest, which is a very good thing, since he's my favorite writer. I am still in shock because of that ending... fantastic job.