December 23rd, 2009 at 02:35am
Omg...I'm so glad you PM-ed me I'd forgotten to read this...
I loved it.
Although the subject matter isn't something that would normally have apealed it me you wrote it amazingly.
"Suddenly, the same shiver runs down two different spines."
Little things like that just won me over. I can't deny for a second that you're amazingly talented.
The ending "not yet baby" ... wow.
I don't know what else to say. But thank you for making me read it.
This was really, really good. Your writing style is fantastic. The descriptions and the language flow together to make this story really, really good.
I love these few lines:
Suddenly, the same shiver runs down two different spines.
It just...shows so much into the characters and how they feel about each other, and it's really, really great.
At least, she would, if she could get over her paralyzing nerves and if Ms. Gallagher would sit the fuck down already.
I thought it was funny, the way fuck was thrown in there without any other cuss words needed was great as well.
I'm normally not one for femmeslash, it was great. Brilliantly written, and the ending was just fantastic. Lovely, lovely, lovely.
Very well done.