Broken Promises - Comments

  • cruciatus.

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    I really like this story, Del. tehe The way you write it is really simple, and easy to understand and follow, but at the same time extremely well-written in my opinion. I love the simplicity of the layout, as well; it's easy on the eyes, and green is my favorite color. tehe I like Billie's character in this, and I have to admit that I was shocked that Adrienne has left him apparently high and dry. I want to know why. XD I like Delaney's character, too. She's a solid character with a good personality and a smart head on her shoulders, and I like characters like that. If you decide to continue this, I can't wait to see where it goes. OMGYES
    December 26th, 2010 at 08:40am
  • Mrs. Whirly

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    Chapter 3

    Well then! She didn’t have to be so blunt lol. She could have said in a nice way. Haha, but I guess her bluntness is her. AH! I love it and crazing for more. ;)

    I like it! Its so ama-zaz-zing

    Oh and when you’re spacing it, Space it like this:

    “Hi, my name is Del!”

    “Hi Del, My name is Spencer!”

    But I just love this story!!
    October 5th, 2009 at 05:47am
  • Mrs. Whirly

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    Chapter 2

    I took the nearest empty liquor bottle in my hand, and smashed it on his big fat head.

    I sort of…laughed at the part… :)
    October 5th, 2009 at 05:46am
  • Mrs. Whirly

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    Chapter 1

    Awe!! That’s so sad/sweet. I like it. Amazing. Haha, I love how he was so random and stuff, J

    I wonder what happened to her?
    October 5th, 2009 at 05:46am
  • the fallen.

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    This story has real potential!
    The only thing that bothered me was the spacing. Can you double it?

    Like that. It makes it seem way more organized.
    Other than that, i love how Billie Joe warmed up to Delany so much!
    October 4th, 2009 at 11:16pm
  • Sharksnacks.

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    I love you! <3 Seriously.
    September 29th, 2009 at 11:03pm
  • St. Of Denial

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    its good keep it u :D
    September 29th, 2009 at 09:15pm
  • Alphabet Soup

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    Woohoo! I hope I was supposed to read this one.... Ahem, anyway it was cool. Fan-Fic really aren't my thing but this one was good. Now, for the constuctive criticism. In the beginning I felt like it didn't mesh well and was moving really fast. Another thing that's really simple.... space out your paragraphs; It gets hard to read after a while. And how the girl meets with Billie Joe was a little uh, unlikely in real life, but nothing is stopping you so go for it.
    September 22nd, 2009 at 10:12pm
  • St. Of Denial

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    I like this story... its lillke kinda cute or somyhing idk i just like it *clicks the subscribe button*
    September 21st, 2009 at 09:46pm